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The two events did the fairy God-Mother magically bestow to Cinderella a dress and a carriage. The fairy God-Mother magically made a carriage with the things Cinderella gave her. In the text it states that, "the fairy God-Mother made a carriage with many things." Also the fairy God-Mother made a dress that Cinderella could wear for the ball. In the text it states that, "her godmother only just touched her with her wand, and, at the same instant, her clothes were turned into cloth of gold and silver, all beset with jewels." The two events that the fairy god mother made Cinderella happy.
 
The two events did the fairy God-Mother magically bestow to Cinderella a dress and a carriage. The fairy God-Mother magically made a carriage with the things Cinderella gave her. In the text it states that, "the fairy God-Mother made a carriage with many things." Also the fairy God-Mother made a dress that Cinderella could wear for the ball. In the text it states that, "her godmother only just touched her with her wand, and, at the same instant, her clothes were turned into cloth of gold and silver, all beset with jewels." The two events that the fairy god mother made Cinderella happy.
  
The two gifts the fairy god mother magically bestowed to Cinderella were a dress and a carriage. <br>
 
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The fairy god mother magically made a carriage with the things Cinderella gave her. <br>
 
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In the text it states that, "the fairy God-Mother made a carriage with many things." <br>
 
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Also, the fairy god mother made a dress that Cinderella could wear for the ball. <br>
 
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In the text it states that, "her godmother only just touched her with her wand, and, at the same instant, her clothes were turned into cloth of gold and silver, all beset with jewels." <br>
 
'''***Nice!'''
 
 
The two gifts that the fairy god mother created made Cinderella happy. <br>
 
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The two gifts the fairy god mother magically bestowed to Cinderella were a dress and a carriage. The fairy god mother magically made a carriage with the things Cinderella gave her. In the text it states that, "the fairy God-Mother made a carriage with many things." Also, the fairy god mother made a dress that Cinderella could wear for the ball. In the text it states that, "her godmother only just touched her with her wand, and, at the same instant, her clothes were turned into cloth of gold and silver, all beset with jewels." The two gifts that the fairy god mother created made Cinderella happy. <br>
 
'''***Overall, nice job! Make sure to read your sentences out loud to verify they make sense.'''
 
 
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