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<br> The Whale that Ate Jaws
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<br> When thinking of the biggest predator of the oceans, what comes to mind first? Sharks?
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<br> Well, orcas whales eat them!
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<br> Shark carcasses had been washing up on the beaches of South Africa, and orca whales are the most likely culprits.
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<br> Because of the lack of knowledge of the great white sharks and orca whales, scientists are not sure as to which predator is superior.
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<br> The main reason orca whales may be targeting sharks are because of their fatty livers, which are always strategically and accurately ripped off of the sharks' bodies.
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<br> Scientists are still studying the actions of the orca whales and their motives that concern sharks.
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<br> Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/07/killer-whales-orcas-eat-great-white-sharks/
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<br> Sea Animals Say "Cheese!"
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<br> Laurent Ballesta, an underwater photographer, had a goal, which was to capture clear and stunning photos of a particular group of fish: the marbled grouper.
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<br> Because of their rarity and quick appearance yearly, it was a challenge until Ballesta and his friend Jean-Marc Belin created a diving routine and strategy that allowed for him to stay and dive underwater for as long as 24 hours!
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<br> With the help of his team, Ballesta was able to capture many photographs of the marbled groupers, as well as several other species like sharks.
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<br> Ballesta's view on the sharks and other potentially dangerous animals are that humans should stay calm, as they only view humans as an obstacle, not an enemy.
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<br> Clearly, he advocates for a better view towards sea animals and wants people to appreciate the beauty, as well as its wonders.
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<br> Source: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/photography/proof/2018/04/sharks-groupers-photography-animals/#close
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<br> Are Killing Animals Fun?
 
<br> Are Killing Animals Fun?
 
<br> In the Yellowstone National park, grizzly bears get baited into a cage and are woken up with a lip tattoo, an ear tag, and a GPS radio collar attached to them.
 
<br> In the Yellowstone National park, grizzly bears get baited into a cage and are woken up with a lip tattoo, an ear tag, and a GPS radio collar attached to them.
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<br> However, Bonnie Rice, senior representative of the Sierra Club in the Greater Yellowstone and Northern Rockies Region, claims that since the bears are very slow reproducing creatures, any harm would take a huge toll on the species.
 
<br> However, Bonnie Rice, senior representative of the Sierra Club in the Greater Yellowstone and Northern Rockies Region, claims that since the bears are very slow reproducing creatures, any harm would take a huge toll on the species.
 
<br> Many debate on whether hunting the bears for sport is justified or not, and the decision seems to be uncertain.
 
<br> Many debate on whether hunting the bears for sport is justified or not, and the decision seems to be uncertain.
<br> Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/07/can-grizzly-bears-survive-hunting-animals/
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<br> Source: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/07/can-grizzly-bears-survive-hunting-animals/
  
  
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<br> Others, unfortunately, do not, and that could result in their death from plastic consumption.
 
<br> Others, unfortunately, do not, and that could result in their death from plastic consumption.
 
<br> Even seeing as to how bad that the pollution situation had become, plastic use isn't going away anytime soon, as it is expected to double by the year of 2050.
 
<br> Even seeing as to how bad that the pollution situation had become, plastic use isn't going away anytime soon, as it is expected to double by the year of 2050.
<br> Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/12/whales-eating-plastic-pollution/
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<br> Source: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/12/whales-eating-plastic-pollution/
  
  

Revision as of 05:03, 11 January 2020


The Whale that Ate Jaws
When thinking of the biggest predator of the oceans, what comes to mind first? Sharks?
Well, orcas whales eat them!
Shark carcasses had been washing up on the beaches of South Africa, and orca whales are the most likely culprits.
Because of the lack of knowledge of the great white sharks and orca whales, scientists are not sure as to which predator is superior.
The main reason orca whales may be targeting sharks are because of their fatty livers, which are always strategically and accurately ripped off of the sharks' bodies.
Scientists are still studying the actions of the orca whales and their motives that concern sharks.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/07/killer-whales-orcas-eat-great-white-sharks/







Sea Animals Say "Cheese!"
Laurent Ballesta, an underwater photographer, had a goal, which was to capture clear and stunning photos of a particular group of fish: the marbled grouper.
Because of their rarity and quick appearance yearly, it was a challenge until Ballesta and his friend Jean-Marc Belin created a diving routine and strategy that allowed for him to stay and dive underwater for as long as 24 hours!
With the help of his team, Ballesta was able to capture many photographs of the marbled groupers, as well as several other species like sharks.
Ballesta's view on the sharks and other potentially dangerous animals are that humans should stay calm, as they only view humans as an obstacle, not an enemy.
Clearly, he advocates for a better view towards sea animals and wants people to appreciate the beauty, as well as its wonders.
Source: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/photography/proof/2018/04/sharks-groupers-photography-animals/#close







Are Killing Animals Fun?
In the Yellowstone National park, grizzly bears get baited into a cage and are woken up with a lip tattoo, an ear tag, and a GPS radio collar attached to them.
Some say that because the population of grizzly bears had increased, the Western states should be free to hold highly regulated hunting seasons for the bear.
There are some critics who disagree, saying that regardless of the bear population increase, the shouldn't be hunted for sport and fun.
Protesters such as Jane Goodall, plan to buy grizzly hunt tickets, so that others would not get it to hurt the animals.
Dan Bjornlie, a carnivore biologist with the Wyoming Game and Fish Department, says “but hunting, as long as it’s maintained within the mortality thresholds, is not a threat.”
However, Bonnie Rice, senior representative of the Sierra Club in the Greater Yellowstone and Northern Rockies Region, claims that since the bears are very slow reproducing creatures, any harm would take a huge toll on the species.
Many debate on whether hunting the bears for sport is justified or not, and the decision seems to be uncertain.
Source: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/07/can-grizzly-bears-survive-hunting-animals/







Is Plastic Tasty?
With the constant climate change and pollution, it is not surprising that sea animals are dying due to an excess of plastic in the oceans.
What is surprising is that fact that larger animals, such as whales, are getting washed to shore with tons of plastic in their body.
The question is: Why do they consume the plastic in the first place?
Different species of animals have different body structures, which can work in their favor or not.
For example, some animals have a filtration system in their digestive system, disregarding anything that is not their usual diet.
Others, unfortunately, do not, and that could result in their death from plastic consumption.
Even seeing as to how bad that the pollution situation had become, plastic use isn't going away anytime soon, as it is expected to double by the year of 2050.
Source: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/12/whales-eating-plastic-pollution/







Saving a Squirrel's Life
Videos of people saving animals in distress through the use of CPR have been revolving around the internet for some time.
One case, in particular, is a man saving a squirrel by lightly pressing on its chest to get the blood flow going normally again.
Though saving animals is admirable, one should take caution in doing so, as it can be dangerous to both the animal and the human.
Not all animals have similar chest structures as humans and doing CPR may potentially kill them or injure them even more.
If one must, they should resort to CPR last and carefully do so.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/news/2018/04/squirrels-animals-cpr-wildlife-rescues/


Saving a Squirrel's Life***

    Good, no edit.


Videos of people saving animals in distress through the use of CPR have been revolving around the internet for some time.***

    No edit.


One case, in particular, is a man saving a squirrel by lightly pressing on its chest to get the blood flow going normally again.***

   "going normally" should be switched around, however, it's still hard to read. I suggest "...flowing again." for easier reading. 

One case, in particular, is a man saving a squirrel by lightly pressing on its chest to get the blood flowing again.

    ***You are missing a fact sentence here. I suggest continuing on with the story from the sentence above:

In the video, the Andean squirrel begins breathing again and then runs off.
Though saving animals is admirable, one should take caution in doing so, as it can be dangerous to both the animal and the human.***

    Good summarizing.


Not all animals have similar chest structures as humans and doing CPR may potentially kill them or injure them even more.***

   Good.


If one must, they should resort to CPR last and carefully do so.***

    Good.


Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/news/2018/04/squirrels-animals-cpr-wildlife-rescues/***

   Use "Source" instead of "Website"

Source: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/news/2018/04/squirrels-animals-cpr-wildlife-rescues/

    Overall, great job. 

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Saving a Squirrel's Life

Videos of people saving animals in distress through the use of CPR have been revolving around the internet for some time. One case, in particular, is a man saving a squirrel by lightly pressing on its chest to get the blood flowing again. In the video, the Andean squirrel begins breathing again and then runs off. Though saving animals is admirable, one should take caution in doing so, as it can be dangerous to both the animal and the human. Not all animals have similar chest structures as humans and doing CPR may potentially kill them or injure them even more. If one must, they should resort to CPR last and carefully do so.
Source: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/news/2018/04/squirrels-animals-cpr-wildlife-rescues/

Edited by Kira Carson



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A Historic Day in American History: The Area 51 Raid
If you know anything about conspiracy theories or are fascinated by the thought of extraterrestrial beings, you probably already knew about the Area 51 Raid.
Rumors of Area 51 having aliens in its clutches have been told for years.
Believe it or not, there is actually history on the suspicions of Area 51, dating back to the 1950s during the Cold War.
Area 51, originally designed as an experimental bombing site, became a military outpost later on throughout history.
Heres why people believe that Area 51 has aliens: Advancements in artillery and planes were too intricate for people to understand, so they believed that those high-tech aircrafts were UFOs.
Ever since then, people have believed that Area 51 had to be linked to aliens, due to several other factors such as people claiming to have seen them or worked in Area 51 with them.
Area 51 still remains a private site in which people are forbidden to enter, so questions still remain on whether aliens exist or not.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/culture/topics/reference/why-two-million-storm-area-51/#close

A Historic Day in American History: The Area 51 Raid***

    Good title, no edit.

If you know anything about conspiracy theories or are fascinated by the thought of extraterrestrial beings, you probably already knew about the Area 51 Raid.***

  A little wordy. To cut down a bit I've edited the ending to "you've probably heard about the Area 51 raid.". Also, 'raid' doesn't need to be capitalized.  

If you know anything about conspiracy theories or are fascinated by the thought of extraterrestrial beings, you've probably heard about the Area 51 raid.

Rumors of Area 51 having aliens in its clutches have been told for years.***

    I really like this sentence but, let's combine it with the one below to keep to our 6 sentence rule. 

Believe it or not, there is actually history on the suspicions of Area 51, dating back to the 1950s during the Cold War.***

    To combine the sentences I suggest removing the 'Believe it or not' and cutting out most of the middle as well:

Rumors of Area 51 having aliens in its clutches have been told for years, the history dating back to the 1950s during the Cold War.

Area 51, originally designed as an experimental bombing site, became a military outpost later on throughout history.***

    Good. Replace 'Area 51' with something else to avoid the repetition. 

The area, originally designed as an experimental bombing site, became a military outpost later on throughout history.

Heres why people believe that Area 51 has aliens: Advancements in artillery and planes were too intricate for people to understand, so they believed that those high-tech aircrafts were UFOs.***

   Good attempt to summarize a large idea! However, the beginning feels too much like a casual conversation. I suggest changing it to "It's thought that Area 51 has aliens because, the...". Watch your repetition of words. I changed a 'believe' to 'thought'.  

It's thought that Area 51 has aliens because, the advancements in artillery and planes were too intricate for people to understand, so they believed that those high-tech aircrafts were UFOs.

Ever since then, people have believed that Area 51 had to be linked to aliens, due to several other factors such as people claiming to have seen them or worked in Area 51 with them.***

    I've omitted some of the words like 'them' and 'people' and 'aliens' to avoid repetition. Again, good summarizing but for clarity and flow let's change around the thoughts like this:

Ever since then and due to other factors such as people claiming to have seen extraterrestrials, it's been believed that Area 51 is linked to aliens.

Area 51 still remains a private site in which people are forbidden to enter, so questions still remain on whether aliens exist or not.***

    Good conclusion.

Edited Paragraph:

A Historic Day in American History: The Area 51 Raid

If you know anything about conspiracy theories or are fascinated by the thought of extraterrestrial beings, you've probably heard about the Area 51 raid. Rumors of Area 51 having aliens in its clutches have been told for years, the history dating back to the 1950s during the Cold War. The area, originally designed as an experimental bombing site, became a military outpost later on throughout history. It's thought that Area 51 has aliens because, the advancements in artillery and planes were too intricate for people to understand, so they believed that those high-tech aircrafts were UFOs. Ever since then and due to other factors such as people claiming to have seen extraterrestrials, it's been believed that Area 51 is linked to aliens. Area 51 still remains a private site in which people are forbidden to enter, so questions still remain on whether aliens exist or not.
Source: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/culture/topics/reference/why-two-million-storm-area-51/#close

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Pictures Worth a Thousand Words
Joel Sartore is a photographer that desired to capture the animal species that one day might go extinct.
When asked about his most memorable photoshoot, he stated that it was the Rabbs’ fringe-limbed tree frog, Ecnomiohyla Rabborum, which died in 2016.
It was one of the last of its species and Sartore was grateful for being in a position to take its photograph and tell its story to the world.
Many of the animals that used to be endangered and photographed with the aid of Sartore bounced and are thriving again.
Such examples consist of the Californian condor, the black-footed ferret, the Mexican grey wolf, the whooping crane, etc.
Sartore’s purpose is to get the public to care about the extinction disaster while there’s notwithstanding time to save the planet and all that lives there.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/09/editor-joel-sartore-portraits-capture-animals-that-might-be-extinct-in-the-wild/#close







Spooky Scary Skeletons
Halloween wasn't always celebrated in the U.S.
It can be traced back to the 19th century, but people did not dress up in costumes until the early 20th century.
The costumes started off as mostly classic costumes like witches, mummies, skeletons, etc.
With the rise of pop culture and movies/shows, more ideas for costumes emerged, as kids dressed up as their favorite character.
Later on along the years, a movie called "Halloween" was released, which was a hit with teens and adults.
This caused Halloween to be a holiday in which older people also celebrated, as a means for fun and frights.
Costumes obviously altered and advanced over the years, but the anticipation of the next years' costumes is thrilling.
Website: https://www.nytimes.com/2019/10/24/us/pop-culture-halloween-costumes.html?action=click&module=Top%20Stories&pgtype=Homepage

Spooky Scary Skeletons***

    No edit. Good use of alliteration.

Halloween wasn't always celebrated in the U.S.***

    Let's combine this sentence with the one below to keep to the correct amount of sentences.

It can be traced back to the 19th century, but people did not dress up in costumes until the early 20th century.***

    Combine this with sentence above. Note how I used 'although' and omitted 'but' to make sure the combined sentences still had flow. 

Halloween wasn't always celebrated in the U.S. and although it can be traced back to the 19th century, people did not dress up in costumes until the early 20th century.

The costumes started off as mostly classic costumes like witches, mummies, skeletons, etc.***

    Good. No edit.

With the rise of pop culture and movies/shows, more ideas for costumes emerged, as kids dressed up as their favorite character.***

    My only edit here is to somehow get rid of the slash in 'movies/shows'. It just makes it difficult to read. The comma after emerged is also not needed. I suggest: 

With the rise of pop culture in movies and television, more ideas for costumes emerged as kids dressed up as their favorite character.

Later on along the years, a movie called "Halloween" was released, which was a hit with teens and adults.***

    Let's change 'later on along the years' to a phrase shorter or more to the point. The current wording is a little difficult to read. You could use just 'Later on' or 'Soon after' or 'Following this'.

Soon after, a movie called "Halloween" was released, which was a hit with teens and adults.

This caused Halloween to be a holiday in which older people also celebrated, as a means for fun and frights.***

    Another good sentence. I enjoy the vocabulary of 'fun and frights' at the end. No edit. 

Costumes obviously altered and advanced over the years, but the anticipation of the next years' costumes is thrilling.***

    Good beginning. Let's adapt the last half of the sentence though. You're on the right track here but, the two separate parts of this sentence don't seem to be quite related (this is similar to what you did with you concluding sentence in "To Dream or Not to Dream"). It ends too abruptly. Notice how my sentence below comes to a more natural ending.

As costumes have altered and advanced over the years, we now wait in anticipation to see what thrills next years' brings.

    Overall, this article was well summarized. Good paragraph. Good job. 

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Spooky Scary Skeletons

Halloween wasn't always celebrated in the U.S. and although it can be traced back to the 19th century, people did not dress up in costumes until the early 20th century. The costumes started off as mostly classic costumes like witches, mummies, skeletons, etc. With the rise of pop culture in movies and television, more ideas for costumes emerged as kids dressed up as their favorite character. Soon after, a movie called "Halloween" was released, which was a hit with teens and adults. This caused Halloween to be a holiday in which older people also celebrated, as a means for fun and frights. As costumes have altered and advanced over the years, we now wait in anticipation to see what thrills next years' brings.
Source: https://www.nytimes.com/2019/10/24/us/pop-culture-halloween-costumes.html?action=click&module=Top%20Stories&pgtype=Homepage

Edited by Kira Carson






To Dream or Not to Dream
Heidi the octopus was captured sleeping by scientists for a PBS documentary.
During her slumber, she was restless. Her muscles constantly moved and her skin constantly changed colors.
Based on her body movements and color changes, scientists believe that she is dreaming about eating a crab.
Because octopus’ brains control their arms, it is likely that a dream is causing the movement of the arms.
These movements and color changes are similar to what humans go through during an R.E.M sleeping stage, further suggesting that octopuses can dream when they go to sleep.
While scientists are still unsure of whether they can or not, it sure is interesting to see this feat and hypothesize.
Website: https://www.nytimes.com/2019/10/08/science/heidi-octopus-sleeping.html


To Dream or Not to Dream***

    No edit, I like this sentence. It accurately summarizes the point of the original article. 

Heidi the octopus was captured sleeping by scientists for a PBS documentary.***

    The appositive 'the octopus' needs a comma before and after.

Heidi, the octopus, was captured sleeping by scientist for a PBS documentary.

During her slumber, she was restless.***

    Combine this sentence with the sentence below to keep to 6 sentences. Let's remove 'she was restless' because that is explained in the next part.

Her muscles constantly moved and her skin constantly changed colors.***

    Let's remove one of the 'constantly' to avoid repetition. 

During her slumber, her muscles moved and her skin constantly changed colors.

Based on her body movements and color changes, scientists believe that she is dreaming about eating a crab.***

    This is specific to one particular instance, not all times while Heidi was dreaming so, to clarify that, let's add something like 'during one observation'.

During one observation, based on her body movements and color changes, scientist believe she may have been dreaming about eating a crab.

Because octopus’ brains control their arms, it is likely that a dream is causing the movement of the arms.***

    Read the article carefully. The point here is that their brain is actually throughout their body, especially inside the arms. To portray that, let's change 'control their arms' to 'are inside their arms'.

Because octopus' brains are inside their arms, it is likely that a dream is causing the movement of the arms.

These movements and color changes are similar to what humans go through during an R.E.M sleeping stage, further suggesting that octopuses can dream when they go to sleep.***

    Good sentence. I just suggest cutting down the words at the end by replacing 'octopuses can dream when they go to sleep' with 'octopuses dream while they sleep.'

These movements and color changes are similar to what humans go through during and R.E.M sleeping stage, further suggesting that octopuses dream while they sleep.

While scientists are still unsure of whether they can or not, it sure is interesting to see this feat and hypothesize.***

    Not bad but, let's try to keep the same tone you've had. It sounds too casual compared to the rest which sounds very factual. I suggest changing the language from 'can or not' to 'are dreaming or not' and the last half of the sentence to 'this phenomena still continues to amaze.' 

While scientist are still unsure of whether they are dreaming or not, this phenomena will continue to amaze.

Edited Paragraph:

To Dream or Not to Dream

Heidi, the octopus, was captured sleeping by scientist for a PBS documentary. During her slumber, her muscles moved and her skin constantly changed colors. During one observation, based on her body movements and color changes, scientist believe she may have been dreaming about eating a crab. Because octopus' brains are inside their arms, it is likely that a dream is causing the movement of the arms. These movements and color changes are similar to what humans go through during and R.E.M sleeping stage, further suggesting that octopuses dream while they sleep. While scientist are still unsure of whether they are dreaming or not, this phenomena will continue to amaze.

Source: https://www.nytimes.com/2019/10/08/science/heidi-octopus-sleeping.html

Edited by Kira Carson

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“Turbo” in Real Life?
Neil Riseborough, often known as the "Snail Master,” owns snails that race.
There are requirements that the snails must fulfill to join the race.
The snails cannot be too big, as they would have an advantage over other smaller snails.
Going on for about 45 years, small owners verse their snails against eachother to crown one snail and its owner “Fastest.”
In order to have the fastest snail, Riseborough bred many snail species to get the ultimate fastest snail to compete in the races.
Although snail races may seem peculiar to many, it is widely celebrated and participated in around the world, with the biggest support from the UK.
These snails may still be slow to humans like us, but they sure are the fastest among their species.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/news/2013/7/130719-snail-races-escargot-world-championship-england/


“Turbo” in Real Life?***

    I suggest removing the punctuation around 'Turbo'. The '?' already means that the meaning of 'turbo' is being questioned.
    Although I am going to leave it because I appreciate the creativity, next time I would suggest using 'Snail' somewhere in the headline for more clarity.  

Turbo in Real Life?


Neil Riseborough, often known as the "Snail Master,” owns snails that race.***

    Great, no edit. Makes me intrigued to read on.


There are requirements that the snails must fulfill to join the race.***
The snails cannot be too big, as they would have an advantage over other smaller snails.***

    Let's combine the two sentences above to keep to our 6 sentence rule. This can be done using a conjoining phrase like 'such as'.

There are requirements that the snails must fulfil to join the race, such as not being too big, as they would have an advantage over other smaller snails.


Going on for about 45 years, small owners verse their snails against eachother to crown one snail and its owner “Fastest.”***

    Omit 'Going on' for fluidity. Watch your typing, 'eachother' should be two words. Again, watch your typing: change 'small owners' to 'snail owners'. Now, the next use of 'snail' is repetitious so, let's use a new word instead like, critters. Let's omit 'and its owner'. I know what you are saying here but, its not necessary and technically it's just the snail that is "fastest". 

For about 45 years, snail owners verse their critters against each other to crown one snail "Fastest".


In order to have the fastest snail, Riseborough bred many snail species to get the ultimate fastest snail to compete in the races.***

    'In order to have' is wordy. Change to 'To find'. The word "fastest' is used a few times so let's use something else at the beginning. I suggest 'best snail' instead. Again, to avoid repetition lets omit the 'snail' from 'snail species'. The reader by now, is aware that you are talking about snails so, it's not necessary. 'Ultimate fastest' is a bit difficult to say. Try just 'ultimate snail'. 

To find the best snail, Riseborough bred many species to get the ultimate snail to compete in the races.


Although snail races may seem peculiar to many, it is widely celebrated and participated in around the world, with the biggest support from the UK.***

    This is a good sentence! I suggest just changing 'the biggest support from the UK' to 'the UK being the biggest supporter'.

Although snail races may seem peculiar to many, it is widely celebrated and participated in around the world, with the UK being the biggest supporter.


These snails may still be slow to humans like us, but they sure are the fastest among their species.***

    The meaning here is okay, but this tone doesn't match the tone to the rest of your summary. The use of 'humans like us' and 'sure are the fastest' is too casual.

Although these snails seem slow to us, among themselves they are the fastest of their kind.

Edited Summary:

Turbo in Real Life?

Neil Riseborough, often known as the "Snail Master,” owns snails that race. There are requirements that the snails must fulfil to join the race, such as not being too big, as they would have an advantage over other smaller snails. For about 45 years, snail owners verse their critters against each other to crown one snail "Fastest". To find the best snail, Riseborough bred many species to get the ultimate snail to compete in the races. Although snail races may seem peculiar to many, it is widely celebrated and participated in around the world, with the UK being the biggest supporter. Although these snails seem slow to us, among themselves they are the fastest of their kind.
Source: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/news/2013/7/130719-snail-races-escargot-world-championship-england/

Edited by Kira Carson





Yellowstone National Park Helps Animal Migration Across America
Yellowstone park made a new movement to help the animals migrate by removing some of the barriers humans have thrown up over recent decades.***

    -good topic sentence
   -change 'made' in the beginning to 'has made' and 'the animals' to 'animals';

Yellowstone park has made a new movement to help animals migrate by removing some of the barriers humans have thrown up over recent decades.

The Greater Yellowstone Ecosystem, a roughly 18 million acre sized-space, has thousands of elk, pronghorn antelope, and mule deer that must migrate across Yellowstone’s harsh landscape to reproduce and thrive.***

    -good sentence but, we have already used "Yellowstone" in the headline and topic sentence so let's remove it;

This Ecosystem, a roughly 18 million acre sized-space, has thousands of elk, pronghorn antelope, and mule deer that must migrate across the harsh landscape to reproduce and thrive.

The migration makes the Pronghorn antelope jump over a creek, even though they don’t usually jump.***

    -'Pronghorn' doesn't need to be capitalized
    -'even though they don't usually jump' sounds too casual for a news summary. Let's rephrase to 'even though this species isn't know to jump';

The migration makes the pronghorn antelope jump over a creek, even though this species isn't know to jump.

To add on, the Elk migrate over an 11,000 foot mountain pass in the Absaroka Mountains on their way towards Yellowstone National Park in the late spring time.***

    -'Elk' is not capitalized. Animal species do not need to be capitalized. 
    -Replace 'To add on' with 'In addition' for better flow.
    -This sentence has a lot of information so, let's remove anything that isn't needed. Remove 'in the Absaroka Mountains' and shorten 'late spring time' to 'late spring';

In addition, the elk migrate over an 11,000 foot mountain pass on their way towards Yellowstone National Park in the late spring.

Other than that, many problems other than the migration itself occurred; a Pronghorn got its leg caught in a barbed-wire fence.***

    -Repetition with the words 'other than'. Let's remove one or rephrase. 
    -Not necessary to have a semicolon. Make one sentence for better flow;

Aside from the migrations, other problems have occurred like a pronghorn getting its leg caught in a barbed-wire fence.

Because of that, many fences have since been removed thanks to a nascent movement to preserve migratory corridors.***

    -This sentence feels like it should be a fact sentence and not necessarily the concluding sentence. Since you haven't included the source I can't read the original article to verify this. Please include the source. 
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Yellowstone National Park Helps Animal Migration Across America

Yellowstone park has made a new movement to help animals migrate by removing some of the barriers humans have thrown up over recent decades. This ecosystem, a roughly 18 million acre sized-space, has thousands of elk, pronghorn antelope, and mule deer that must migrate across the harsh landscape to reproduce and thrive. The migration makes the pronghorn antelope jump over a creek, even though this species isn't know to jump. In addition, the elk migrate over an 11,000 foot mountain pass on their way towards Yellowstone National Park in the late spring. Aside from the migrations, other problems have occurred like a pronghorn getting its leg caught in a barbed-wire fence. Because of that, many fences have since been removed thanks to a nascent movement to preserve migratory corridors.

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The Story of One Elephant
Gluay Hom, an elephant in Thailand who had gone through many hardships, is finally freed. He had been living at a zoo outside of Bangkok, clearly mistreated with his feet chained, resulting in his swollen leg and wound at his temple. Seeing his pain and struggling, National Geographic worked on trying to save the elephant. By making a change.org petition, many signed against to save him. After negotiating with Gluay’s owner, he was finally set free at the Elephant Nature Park, an area for elephants made by the Save Elephants organization. In his new home, he was treated of his ailments and is treat undergoing treatment to recover his muscle tissues. Although he is still traumatized from his previous owners, he is now under great care and is thriving.

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New species of pygmy seahorse.
In the boulder-strewn coasts of Japan, researchers have discovered tiny seahorses that are the size of a grain of rice.
These creatures camouflage with the algae-covered rocks and at first glance look they look like floating debris in the water.
Scientists have named the seahorse Hippocampus japapigu, Latin for “Japan pig”.
Graham Short, an ichthyologist at the California Academy of Sciences says that it is “because to the locals, it resembles a tiny baby pig”.
Although they are tiny and hard to find because of their appearance, they are not rare.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/08/tiny-pygmy-seahorse-discovered-japan-news/


New species of pygmy seahorse.

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In the ***boulder-strewn coasts of Japan***, researchers have discovered tiny seahorses that are the size of a grain of rice.

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These creatures camouflage with the algae-covered rocks and at first glance ***look*** they look like ***floating debris in the water***.

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Scientists have named the seahorse 'Hippocampus japapigu', Latin for “Japan pig”.

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Graham Short, an ichthyologist at the California Academy of Sciences says that it is “because to the locals, it resembles a tiny baby pig”.
Although they are tiny and hard to find ***because of their appearance***, they are not rare.

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Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/08/tiny-pygmy-seahorse-discovered-japan-news/

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New species of pygmy seahorse.
In the boulder-strewn waters off Japan's coast, researchers have discovered tiny seahorses that are the size of a grain of rice. These creatures camouflage with the algae-covered rocks and at first glance they look like "floating seaweed" in the water. Its been named by scientists 'Hippocampus japapigu', Latin for "Japan pig". Graham Short, an ichthyologist at the California Academy of Sciences says that it is "because to the locals, it resembles a tiny baby pig". Although they are tiny and hard to find, they are not rare.
Source: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/08/tiny-pygmy-seahorse-discovered-japan-news/






The Poaching Problem
Legal international trade for lion skeletons.
Although the poaching of lions is illegal, South Africa has made the export of skeletons from captive facilities where lions are bred and raised legal.
Lions are already an endangered species so the demand for lion body parts such as, teeth, bones, and claws do not help them.
There are multiple reports on the horrible conditions made by the businesses that sell lion parts.
The businesses also allow customers to pay for the opportunity to kill the lions in which calling it “canned hunting”.
About 8,000 lions live in lion farms and only about 1,300 and 1,700 adult lions remain in the wild.
These terrible businesses shouldn’t be able to continue to sell lion parts because even if lion poaching is illegal, this is basically also killing off the lions into extinction.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/07/lion-bone-export-south-africa-wildlife-trafficking-news/


The Poaching Problem
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About 8,000 lions live ***in lion*** on farms, and only ***about*** 1,300 ***and*** to 1,700 adult lions remain in the wild.
These terrible businesses shouldn’t be able to continue to ***sell lion parts*** making profits off lions because even if ***lion*** (remove) poaching is illegal, ***this*** (italicize to add emphasis) is ***basically*** (avoid adverbs) ***also*** (remove) killing off the lions into extinction.
***Website*** Source: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/07/lion-bone-export-south-africa-wildlife-trafficking-news/


The Poaching Problem
Lions are already an endangered species, so the demand for their body parts, such as teeth, bones, and claws, do not help the situation. There are multiple reports on the horrible practices of the businesses that sell lions' parts. They allow customers to pay for the opportunity to kill the lions, calling it "canned hunting". About 8,00 lions lives on farms, and only 1,300 to 11,700 adult lions remain in the wild. These terrible businesses shouldn't be able to continue making profit off lions' because even if poaching is illegal, this' is killing off the lions into extinction.
Source: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/07/lion-bone-export-south-africa-wildlife-trafficking-news/





Why Are Dogs So Friendly?
Dogs are more sociable than their wild cousins, the wolves.
They pay more attention to humans and following our directions and commands more effectively.
Von Holdt, a evolutionary biologist, provided the clue that hyperdogs like Marla carry variants of two genes called GTF2I and GTF2IRD1.
If these genes get deleted, Williams syndrome, which is characterized by elfin facial features, cognitive difficulties, and a tendency to love everyone.
Overall, understanding our best friends is basically how domestic dogs are more respondent to us humans.
Website: https://news.nationalgeographic.com/2017/07/dogs-breeds-pets-wolves



Why Are Dogs So Friendly?
Dogs are more sociable than their wild cousins, the wolves.
***For example,*** They pay more attention to humans and ***following*** 'follow' our directions ***and commands*** 'remove' more effectively.
Von Holdt, an evolutionary biologist, ***provided the clue*** uncovered that hypersocialdogs like Marla carry variants of two genes called GTF2I and GTF2IRD1.

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If these genes get deleted in people, Williams syndrome is caused, which is characterized by elfin facial features, cognitive difficulties, and a tendency to love everyone.

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Overall, understanding our best friends is basically how domestic dogs are more respondent to us humans.

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***Website*** Source: https://news.nationalgeographic.com/2017/07/dogs-breeds-pets-wolves


Why Are Dogs So Friendly?
Dogs are more social than their wild cousins, the wolves. For example, they pay more attention to humans and follow our directions more effectively. Von Holdt, an evolutionary biologist, uncovered that hyper social dogs, such as one named Marla, have two variants of genes called GTF21 and GTF21RD1. If these genes get deleted in people, Williams Syndrome is caused, which is characterized by elfin facial features, cognitive difficulties, and a tendency to love everyone.






Pet-fox DNA tells us a lot about dogs and humans.
In 1959, a man named Dmitri Belyaev started a experiment on how dog’s get trained and domesticated.
So, for almost sixty years Russian scientists have been breeding pet-foxes to be tame or aggressive.
Biologists believed that domestic dogs were descended from wolves, however they didn’t know how all the anatomical, physiological, and behavioral differences between the two animals could arise.
Belyaev had believed that breeding the friendliest foxes together would perhaps become domesticated.
His idea was correct and he got the most fearless tame foxes that are similar to how dogs interact with humans.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/08/fox-dogs-wild-tame-genetics-study-news/


Pet-fox DNA tells us a lot about dogs and humans.

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In 1959, a man named Dmitri Belyaev started a'n' experiment on how ***dog’s*** get trained and domesticated.

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So, for almost sixty years Russian scientists have been breeding pet-foxes to be tame or aggressive.
Biologists believed that domestic dogs were descended from wolves, however***,*** they didn’t know how all the anatomical, physiological, and behavioral differences between the two animals could arise.
Belyaev had believed that breeding the friendliest foxes together would perhaps ***become domesticated***.

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His idea was correct and he ***got the most fearless tame foxes that are*** similar to how dogs interact with humans.

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***Website***: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/08/fox-dogs-wild-tame-genetics-study-news/

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Pet-fox DNA tells us a lot about dogs and humans.
In 1959, a man named Dmitri Belyaev started an experiment on how dogs get trained and domesticted. So, for almost sixty years Russian scientists have been breeding pet-foxes to be tame or aggressive. Biologists believed that domestic dogs were descended from wolves, however, they didn't know how all the anatomical, physiological, and behavioral differences between the two animals could arise. Belyaev had believe that breeding the friendliest foxes together would perhaps domesticate them. His idea was correct and he ended up taming the most fearless foxes to perform similar to dogs interact with humans.
Source: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/08/fox-dogs-wild-tame-genetics-study-news/



Insect Art
Raku Inoue, and artist and photography from Montreal, creates and showcases portraits of insects and other animals made from flowers, leaves, twigs, seeds, and stems.
Inoue usually makes his art without glue, but for complex ones, he’ll use glue and tape to secure the portraits.
Growing up in Japan, insects had always been symbolic to Inoue, as he and his grandmother would enjoy their presence.
Whatever inspires him, he creates.
Many would occasionally try to challenge him by sending him twigs and flowers, which he always transforms into art.
Inoue continues to artistically create portraits of insects, along with other animals.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/magazine/2019/08/this-artist-makes-colorful-insects-out-of-plants/


Insect Art
Raku Inoue, ***and*** artist***and photography*** from Montreal, creates and showcases ***portraits of insects and other animals made from flowers, leaves, twigs, seeds, and stems***.

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Inoue usually makes his art without glue, but for ***complex*** ones, he’ll use ***glue and tape*** to secure the portraits.

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Growing up in Japan, insects ***had*** always been symbolic to Inoue, as he and his grandmother would enjoy their presence.

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Whatever inspires him, he creates.
Many ***people would*** occasionally try to challenge him by sending him twigs and flowers, which he always transforms into art.

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Inoue continues to ***artistically*** create portraits of insects, along with other animals.

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Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/magazine/2019/08/this-artist-makes-colorful-insects-out-of-plants/


Insect art
Raku Inoue, an artist-photographer from Montreal, creates and showcases "portraits of insects and other animals made from flowers, leaves, twigs, seeds, and stems". Inoue usually makes his art without glue, but for intricate ones, he'll use adhesives to secure the portraits. Growing up in Japan, insects have always been symbolic to Inoue, as he and his grandmother would enjoy their presence. Many people will occasionally occasionally try to challenge him by sending him twigs and flowers, which he always transforms into art. Inoue continues to create portraits of insects, along with other animals.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/magazine/2019/08/this-artist-makes-colorful-insects-out-of-plants/








Endangered for Boots
Pangolins, the world’s only scaled mammal, are one of the world’s most trafficked mammal.
Poachers target the pangolins for a number of reasons, such as for their features.
Even the United States imports pangolin skins, which were used to make exotic leather cowboy boots, hats, etc.
Because the numbers of pangolins were drastically decreasing, all of the pangolin species have been banned from any trade internationally.
However, many importers replaced trading pangolins with arapaima, an Amazonian fish which are also endangered.
Although this conflict has not yet been resolved, advocators and environmentalists are working on education the traders and public on why the species should not be poached.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/07/pangolin-poaching-leather-boots/


Endangered for Boots
Pangolins, the world’s only scaled mammal, are one of the world’s most trafficked mammal***

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Poachers target ***the pangolins*** for a number of reasons, such as ***for*** their features.

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Even the United States imports pangolin skins, which ***were*** used to make exotic leather cowboy boots, hats, ***etc.***

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Because the numbers of pangolins were drastically decreasing, ***all of the pangolin species have been banned from any trade internationally***.

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However, many importers replaced trading pangolins with arapaima, an Amazonian fish which ***are also endangered.***

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Although this conflict has not yet been resolved, advocators and environmentalists are working on ***education*** the traders and public on why the species should ***not be poached.***

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Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/07/pangolin-poaching-leather-boots/


Endangered for Boots
Pangolins, who are the world's only scaled mammals, are also one of the most trafficked. Poachers target them for a number of reasons, such as their skins, which are imported to the United States and used to make exotic leather cowboy boots, hats, and so on. Because the numbers the numbers of pangolins were drastically decreasing, all trade of the pangolin species has been banned internationally, but many importers replaced them with arapaima, an Amazonian fish which is also endangered. Although this conflict has not yet been resolved, advocators and environmentalists are working on educating the traders and public on why the species should be preserved.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/07/pangolin-poaching-leather-boots/







The Search for the Lost
Robert Ballard, the man who found the Titanic, is planning to search for Amelia Earhart’s airplane.
Who is Amelia Earhart?
She was the first woman to ever fly an airplane.
During an attempt to be the first person to cross the Atlantic Ocean, she and her navigator Fred Noonan went missing, along with their airplane.
Ever since they went missing, people have been searching for them.
However, after a while, the U.S government enlisted them as dead from a plane crash.
Ballard's plans to search for the airplane by doing more than 150 deep-sea expeditions, and deploying a number of advanced vehicles that have the ability to dive get deep underwater.
Plans to do this continue to linger on, but the public anticipates whether their questions will receive any answers.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/culture/2019/07/bob-ballard-found-titanic-can-find-amelia-earhart-airplane/


The Search for the Lost
Robert Ballard, the man who found the *** Titanic, is planning to search for Amelia Earhart’s airplane.

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Who is Amelia Earhart?***

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She was the first woman to ever fly an airplane.***
During an attempt to be the first person to cross the Atlantic Ocean***, she and her navigator Fred Noonan went missing, along with their airplane.***

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Ever since they went missing, people have been searching for them.
However, after a while, the U.S government enlisted them as dead from a plane crash.***

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Ballard***'s plans to search for the airplane by doing more than 150 deep-sea expeditions, and deploying a number of ***advanced vehicles that have the ability to dive get deep underwater.***

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Plans to do this continue to linger on, but the public anticipates whether their questions will receive any answers.

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Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/culture/2019/07/bob-ballard-found-titanic-can-find-amelia-earhart-airplane/


The Search for the Lost
Robert Ballard, the man who found the sunken Titanic, is planning to search for Amelia Earhart's airplane. She was the first woman to ever fly in one, but during an attempt to be the first person to cross the Atlantic Ocean in 1937, she and her navigator Fred Noonan went missing, along with their airplane. Ever since they went missing, people have been searching for them. Ballard plans to search for the airplane by doing more than 150 deep-sea expeditions, and deploying a number of advanced diving vehicles.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/culture/2019/07/bob-ballard-found-titanic-can-find-amelia-earhart-airplane/







Pretty Amazing Mice
The yellow-rumped leaf-eared mouse is a species that lives in the foothills and mountains of the Andes, as well as places below sea level sea level.
This makes them the world's highest-dwelling mammal, since they have the ability to live in high elevations that not many other mammals could survive in.
In several high elevated mountains and places in the world, scientists continuously find mice.
When collecting DNA sample from the rodents’ holes, they discovered that it was, in fact, the yellow-rumped leaf-eared mouse.
Scientists were shocked at this because they couldn’t understand how they could somehow survive in soil whose temperature could swing variously in a single day.
The capabilities of this mouse can advance humans in understanding how animals adapt and work with their given environment.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/07/highest-dwelling-mammal-mouse-volcano/


Pretty Amazing Mice
The yellow-rumped leaf-eared mouse is a species that lives in the foothills and mountains of the Andes, as well as places below sea level sea level.***

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This makes them the world's highest-dwelling mammal, since they have the ability to live ***in high elevations that*** not many other mammals could survive

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In several ***high elevated ***mountains and*** places ***in the world, scientists continuously find mice.

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When collecting DNA sample*** from the rodents’ holes, they discovered that it was, in fact, the yellow-rumped leaf-eared mouse.***

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Scientists were shocked at this because they couldn’t understand how they could somehow survive in soil whose temperature could swing variously in a single day.
The capabilities of this mouse can advance humans in understanding how animals adapt and work with their given environment.***

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Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/07/highest-dwelling-mammal-mouse-volcano/


Pretty Amazing Mice
The yellow-rumped leaf-eared mouse is a species that lives not only on the Andes Mountains, but also below sea levels. This makes them the world's highest-dwelling mammal, since they have the ability to live at elevations not many other mammals could survive. In several highly elevated places around the world, scientists continuously find mice, and when collecting DNA samples from the rodents' holes, they discover that it is, in fact, the yellow-rumped leaf-eared mouse. Scientists were shocked at this because they couldn't understand how they could survive in soil whose temperature could swing variously in a single day, but studying this mouse can advance humans' understanding of how animals adapt to their given environment. Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/07/highest-dwelling-mammal-mouse-volcano/







Bones Tell All
Scientists have found that based on the chemistry makeup of some ancient bone samples, they can discover a lot about the skeleton.
This is called stable isotope analysis, which is the study of the differences of elements in archeology.
Stable isotope analysis looks at isotopes, which can give scientists information on the climate, diet, and origins of the skeleton and other bones.
For example, a skeleton may not look similar to other skeletons of the area because they could’ve had a different diet, which informs the scientists on he kind of lifestyle they once lived.
Therefore, based on the chemical makeup of the bones, scientists can now know everything from the diets of the once living to mass movements.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/culture/archaeology/how-bones-record-where-grew-up-ate/


Bones Tell All
Scientists have found that based on the ***chemistry*** makeup of some ancient bone samples, they can discover a lot about ***the skeleton***.

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This is called stable isotope analysis, which is the study of the differences of elements ***in*** ***archeology***.

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Stable isotope analysis looks at isotopes, ***which can give*** scientists information on the climate, diet, and origins of the ***skeleton and other bones***.

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For example, a skeleton may not look similar to other skeletons of the area because they could’ve had a different diet, which informs the scientists on he kind of lifestyle they once lived.***

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Therefore, based on the chemical makeup of the bones, scientists can now know everything from the diets of the once living to ***mass movements***.

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Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/culture/archaeology/how-bones-record-where-grew-up-ate/


Bones Tell All
Scientists have found hat based on the chemical makeup of some ancient bone samples, they can discover a lot about who they belonged to. This is called stable isotope analysis, which is the study of the differences of elements within archaeology. Stable isotope analysis looks at isotopes, giving scientists information on the climate, diet, and origins of the deceased human. Therefore, based on the chemical makeup of the bones, scientists can now know everything from the diets to mass movements of the once living.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/culture/archaeology/how-bones-record-where-grew-up-ate/






How A.I Can Save the Planet
As you may have already known, the planet is facing a major conflict, which is climate change.
Along with the several other possible solutions, A.I could also help in subsiding the problem.
With the technological advances of A.I, we can discover insights from complex climate simulations made by the field of climate modeling.
The better the predictions, the better people will be to prepare for the change, and possibly discover ways that could subside to stop some effects of climate change.
Because people do not believe that climate change is real, producers of A.I are creating simulations on how homes and lives would change with the effects of climate change, such as floodings it heat waves.
Although the contributions of A.I may be minuscule compared to many other methods, it may be the thing that tips people into trying to reverse the odds and saving the planet against climate change.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/environment/2019/07/artificial-intelligence-climate-change/


How A.I***.*** Can Save the Planet

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As you may have already known, the planet is facing a major conflict***,which is*** climate change.

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Along with the several other possible solutions, A.I could also help ***in subsiding the problem***.

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With the technological advances of A.I, we can discover insights from complex ***climate*** simulations made ***by the field of*** climate modeling.

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The ***better*** the predictions, the better people will be ***to prepare*** for the change, and possibly discover ways that could subside ***to stop*** some ***effects of climate change***.

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Because people do not believe that climate change is real, producers of A.I are creating simulations on how homes and lives would change with the effects of climate change, such as floodings it heat waves.***

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Although the contributions of A.I may be minuscule compared to many other methods, it may be the thing that tips people into trying to reverse the odds and saving the planet against climate change.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/environment/2019/07/artificial-intelligence-climate-change/


How A.I. Can Save The Planet
As you may have already known, the planet is facing a major conflict: climate change. Along with several other possible solutions, A.I. could also help mitigate global warming. With the technological advances of A.I., we can discover insights from complex simulations made with climate modeling. The more accurate the predictions, the better people will be prepared for the change, and possibly discover ways that could subside some of climate change's effects. Although the contributions of A.I. may be minuscule compared to many other methods, it may be the thing that tips people into trying to reverse the odds and saving the planet against climate change.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/environment/2019/07/artificial-intelligence-climate-change/





Heated Plastic Bottles
As the weather gets more and more warmer, many will buy and drink from plastic water bottles that have been possibly left out in the sun for long periods of time.
However, as time and heat continues to increase, the chemical bonds in the plastic bottle breaks down, releasing chemicals in the water.
Although a single water bottle won’t do much to hurt your system, the long term effects could be devastating.
How can avoid this?
Researchers and scientists encourage people to opt in to metal or glass bottles, as they are harder to melt.
The melting point for plastic is significantly lower than that of glass or metal, proving why those are good alternatives water bottles.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/environment/2019/07/exposed-to-extreme-heat-plastic-bottles-may-become-unsafe-over-time/


Heated Plastic Bottles
As the weather gets ***more and more warmer***, many will buy and drink from plastic water bottles that have been possibly left out in the sun for ***long periods of time.***

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***However,*** as time and heat continues*** to increase, the chemical bonds in the plastic bottle *** breaks*** down, releasing chemicals in the water.

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Although a single water bottle won’t do much to hurt your system, the ***long term effects*** could be devastating.

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How can avoid this?***

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Researchers and scientists encourage people to opt in to *** metal or glass bottles, as they are harder to melt.

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The melting point for plastic is significantly lower than that of glass or metal, proving why those are good alternatives water bottles.***

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Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/environment/2019/07/exposed-to-extreme-heat-plastic-bottles-may-become-unsafe-over-time/


Heated Plastic Bottles
As the weather gets warmer and warmer, many will buy and drink from plastic water bottles that have been possibly left out in the sun for too long. As times and heat continue to increase, the chemical bonds in the plastic bottle break down, releasing chemicals in the water. Although a single water bottle won't do much to hurt your system, the long term effects could be devastating. Researchers and scientists encourage people to opt in to buying metal or glass bottles, as they harder to melt.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/environment/2019/07/exposed-to-extreme-heat-plastic-bottles-may-become-unsafe-over-time/





Extreme Heat
The U.S could be facing dangerous heat conditions that may be at least 127 degrees Fahrenheit within the next few decades.
Although the heat affects only a few states today, the next few decades could change that all, affecting about 47 states.
Not only does this weather feel uncomfortable, but it also can drastically affect one’s health.
If the body experiences heat above the necessity, a fever may break out.
Extreme heat could also cause cellular machinery to break down, which is extremely dangerous, requiring immediate medical attention.
Although this can be avoided by reducing the carbon emission in the air, it may not change.
Therefore, it is important to pay attention to our environment and weather, as it could tell us a lot about what the earth will be like in the future.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/environment/2019/07/extreme-heat-to-affect-millions-of-americans/


Extreme Heat
The U.S could be facing dangerous heat conditions that may be at least 127 degrees Fahrenheit within the next few decades.
Although ***the*** heat affects only a few states today, the ***next few decades*** could change that all, affecting about 47 states.

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Not only does this weather feel uncomfortable, but it ***also can*** drastically affect one’s health.***

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If the body experiences heat above the necessity, a fever may break out.***

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Extreme *** heat could also cause cellular machinery to break down, which is extremely dangerous, ***requiring*** immediate medical attention.

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Although this can be avoided by reducing ***the*** carbon emission*** in the air, ***it*** may not change.

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Therefore, it is important to pay attention to our environment and weather, as it could tell us a lot about what the earth will be like in the future.***

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Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/environment/2019/07/extreme-heat-to-affect-millions-of-americans/


Extreme Heat
The U.S. could be facing dangerous heat conditions that may be at least 127 degrees Fahrenheit within the next few decades. Although this level of heat affects only a few states today, the new future could change that all, affecting about 47 states. Not only does this weather feel uncomfortable, but it can also drastically affect one's health, such as causing a fever. Extreme internal heat could also cause cellular machinery to break down, which is extremely dangerous and requires immediate medical attention. Although this can be avoided by reducing carbon emissions in the air, these predictions may not change.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/environment/2019/07/extreme-heat-to-affect-millions-of-americans/





No Place to call Home
In Bangladesh, there are children of the Rohingyan people who are neither identified as Bangladeshi or Burmese by birth due to neither country taking responsibility for them.
About 736,000 have fled into Bangladesh and are not even recognized as refugees.
Because of this, they aren’t able to get education and access to public services, all things which should be provided to everyone.
30,000 children from the half million are under the age of one, meaning that they will have to face the conflict of having nothing to identify as.
If this conflict continues to linger, those kids would most likely not have access to formal education and/or job opportunities.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/culture/2018/12/see-rohingya-babies-born-without-home/


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In Bangladesh, ***there are*** children of the Rohingyan people ***who*** are ***neither*** identified as Bangladeshi ***or*** Burmese ***by*** birth due to neither country taking responsibility for them.

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About 736,000 *** have fled into Bangladesh and are not even recognized as refugees.

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Because of this, they aren’t able to get education and access to public services, ***all things which should be provided to everyone.***

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30,000 children from the half million are under the age of one, ***meaning that they will have to face the conflict of having nothing to identify as.***

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If this conflict continues to linger, those ***kids*** would most likely not have access to formal education ***and/or job*** opportunities.

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Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/culture/2018/12/see-rohingya-babies-born-without-home/


No Place to Call Home
In Bangladesh, children of the Rohingyan people are identified neither as Bangladeshi nor Burmese at birth due to neither country taking responsibility for them. About 736,000 people have fled into Bangladesh are not even recognized as refugees. Because of this, they aren't able to get education and access to public services. If this conflict continues to linger, those children would most likely not have access to formal education and job opportunities.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/culture/2018/12/see-rohingya-babies-born-without-home/






Endangered Giraffes
Because if poaching and land usage change, Masai giraffes from Kenya and Tanzania are now endangered.
Although poaching is illegal, some continue to do so to get their hide, meat, bones, and tails.
The Masai giraffe population had significantly decreased by about 50 percent in the last three decades.
The giraffe population in all of Africa had also gone don’t by about 40 percent as well, proving how severe this conflict is.
Being one of the most iconic and quintessential animals in Africa, the fact that the giraffe population is endangered is very surprising and unexpected.
Giraffe populations had also decreased due to humans engulfing the wild lands, which hurt the crop and lead to more accidents concerning the animals residing in the area.
All in all, humans are the main reason as to why the Masai giraffes are going extinct, as they poach for and hurt the animals and their environment.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/07/masai-giraffes-subspecies-declared-endangered/


Endangered Giraffes
Because if*** poaching and land usage change, Masai giraffes from Kenya and Tanzania are now endangered.

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Although poaching is illegal, some *** continue to do so to get their hide, meat, bones, and tails.

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The Masai giraffe population ***had*** significantly decreased by about 50 percent in the last three decades.

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The giraffe population in all of Africa had also gone don’t by about 40 percent as well, proving how severe this conflict is.***

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Being one of the most iconic and quintessential animals in Africa, the fact that the giraffe population is endangered is very surprising and unexpected.***

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Giraffe populations had also decreased due to humans engulfing the wild lands, which hurt the crop and lead to more accidents concerning the animals residing in the area.***

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All in all, humans are the main reason as to why the Masai giraffes are going extinct, as they ***poach for and hurt the animals and their environment.***

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Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/07/masai-giraffes-subspecies-declared-endangered/


Endangered Giraffes
Because of poaching and land usage change, Masai giraffes from Kenya and Tanzania are now endangered. Although poaching is illegal, some people continue to do so to get their hide, meat, bones and tails. The Masai giraffe population has significantly decreased by about 50 percent in the last three decades, at the same time as the giraffe population in all of Africa having gone down 40 percent. All in all, humans are the main reason as to why the Masai giraffes are going extinct, as they poach the animals and engulf wild lands for profit.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/07/masai-giraffes-subspecies-declared-endangered/






Silly Words
Can certain words make you giggle or laugh?
Have you ever wondered what makes them so silly?
Psychologists Chris Westbury and Geoff Hollis from the University of Alberta in Canada conducted a study to figure this out.
After studies and questionnaires done, they found out that how the word looks and sounds has a lot to do with how silly a word is considered.
Words’ endings that sound like “oo” or “le” can often make the whole sentence seem funny.
Words can seem silly and funny, and it’s all based on how it sounds and looks to the reader.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/magazine/2019/07/data-show-what-makes-a-word-funny/


Silly Words
Can certain words make you giggle or laugh?
Have you ever wondered what makes them so silly?***

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Psychologists Chris Westbury and Geoff Hollis from the University of Alberta in Canada conducted a study to figure this out.***
After studies and questionnaires done, they found out that how the word looks and sounds has a lot to do with how silly a word is considered.***

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***Words’ endings that sound like*** “oo” or “le” can often make the whole sentence seem funny.

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Words can seem silly and funny, and it’s ***all*** based on how it sounds and looks to the reader.

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Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/magazine/2019/07/data-show-what-makes-a-word-funny/


Silly Words
Can certain words make you giggle or laugh, and have you wondered what makes them so silly? Psychologists Chris Westbury and Geoff Hollis from the University of Alberta in Canada conducted a study to find out that how the word looks and sounds has a lot to do with how silly a word is considered. Words ending "oo" or "le" can often make the whole sentence seem funny. Words can seem silly and funny, and it's msotly based on how it sounds and looks to the reader.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/magazine/2019/07/data-show-what-makes-a-word-funny/






Tiny Apocalypse
Lori Nix and Kathleen Gerber are architects that make small scale models on how the apocalypse would look.
Why?
Nix stated, “we want [them] to contemplate the present. Do we still have a future? Will we be able to save ourselves?”
They want people to question how the apocalypse would be and whether they can see themselves in it, causing them to think on how to prevent it.
Their inspirations come from everyday things, like riding the subway or eating at a restaurant, and then picturing how that place would look during the apocalypse.
To express the images in their head, they design how every little detail would be and build it exactly how they imagined.
All in all, their photos and work are not to incite fear or hate, but to get the public thinking.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/magazine/2017/04/miniature-models-city-after-apocalypse/


Tiny Apocalypse
Lori Nix and Kathleen Gerber are architects that make small scale models on how the apocalypse would look.
Why?***

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Nix stated, “we want [them] to contemplate the present. Do we still have a future? Will we be able to save ourselves?”
They want people to question how the apocalypse would be and whether they can see themselves in it, causing them to think on how to prevent it.***

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Their inspirations come from everyday things, like riding the subway or eating at a restaurant, and then picturing how that place would look during the apocalypse.
To express the images in their head, they design how every little detail would be and build it exactly how they imagined.***

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All in all, their photos and work are not *** to incite fear or hate, but to get the public thinking.

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Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/magazine/2017/04/miniature-models-city-after-apocalypse/


Tiny Apocalypse
Lori Nix and Kathleen Gerber are architects that make small scale models on how the apocalypse would look. Nix stated, "we want [them] to contemplate the present. Do we still have a future? Will we be able to save ourselves?" Their inspirations come from everyday things, like riding the subway or eating at a restaurant, and then picturing how that place would look during the apocalypse. All in all, their photos and work are not meant to incite fear or hate, but to get the public thinking.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/magazine/2017/04/miniature-models-city-after-apocalypse/






Plastic Straw Conflict
To address the global plastic waste problem, several places banned the use of plastic straws.
Just how much harm can plastic straws do?
They harm sea-life and sea animals, since they break down into micro-plastics that are very commonly found on Earth.
However, it is not too late to make a difference!
If one MUST use a straw, there a lot of cleaner and healthier options.
A few of these options are the use of metal, paper, silicone, glass, hard plastic, and bamboo.
Because of the threat it poses on sea-life and nature, many switch their plastic straws for cleaner options that are better for the environment.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/magazine/2019/07/rethinking-plastic-straws-consider-these-options/


Plastic Straw Conflict
To address the global plastic waste problem, several ***places*** *** banned the use of plastic straws.

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Just how much harm can plastic straws do?***

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They harm sea-life and sea animals, since they break down into micro-plastics that are very commonly found on Earth.

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However, it is not too late to make a difference!

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If one MUST use a straw, there a lot of cleaner and healthier options.

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A few of these options ***are the use of*** metal, paper, silicone, glass, hard plastic, and bamboo.

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Because of the threat it poses on sea-life and nature, many *** ***switch*** their plastic straws for cleaner options that are better for the environment.

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Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/magazine/2019/07/rethinking-plastic-straws-consider-these-options/


Plastic Straw Conflict
To address the global plastic waste problem, several establishments have banned the use of plastic straws, which harm sea-life when they break down into micro-plastics. There have been found to be many more cleaner and healthier options. A few of these options include metal, paper, silicone, glass, hard plastic, and bamboo. Because of the threat it poses on sea-life and nature, many people have switched their plastic straws for cleaner options that are better for the environment.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/magazine/2019/07/rethinking-plastic-straws-consider-these-options/






Girls in Space
Women going out into space seems like a bizarre idea, regardless of the fact that they make up about 11% of the astronauts sent into orbit.
An even more bizarre idea is a full-female mission into space.
However, that may be more effective than an all-man crew for several reasons.
Because of their overall smaller physique, they would have less problems when launching into space.
Additionally, women typically possess traits useful for long trips, making them emotionally healthy.
Therefore, women are believed to be more capable of going into a space mission than men.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/magazine/2019/07/space-travel-four-ways-women-are-a-better-fit-than-men/


Girls in Space
Women going out into space ***seems*** like a bizarre idea ***, regardless of the fact that they make up about 11% of the astronauts sent into orbit.

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***An*** even more ***bizarre*** idea is a full-female mission ***into*** space.

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However, that may be more effective than an all-man crew for several reasons.***

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Because of their overall smaller physique, they would have less problems when launching into space.

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Additionally, women typically possess traits useful for long trips, making them emotionally healthy.

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Therefore, women are believed to be more capable of going ***into*** a space mission than men.

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Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/magazine/2019/07/space-travel-four-ways-women-are-a-better-fit-than-men/


Girls in Space
Women going out into space may seem like a bizarre idea to some, regardless of the fact that they make up about 11% of the astronauts sent into orbit. Even more of a radical idea is a full-female mission to space. However, that may be more effective than an all-man crew for several reasons: because of their overall smaller physique, they would less problems when launching into space, and women typicaly possess traits useful for long trips, keeping them emotionally healthy during the mission. Therefore, women are believed to be more capable going on a space mission than men.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/magazine/2019/07/space-travel-four-ways-women-are-a-better-fit-than-men/






A Woman in Charge
Begum Samru is moderately forgotten today, but the Bhagirath Palace is one of the few landmarks that commemorate her.
Who is Begum Samru?
Begum Samru was a very powerful commander of over 3,000 troops and maintained that power even while being a female.
Today, 78 women hold seats in India’s Parliament, which is not even close to equal to men, who hold the remaining 465 seats.
Many of the people who know of Begum Samru respect her highly as a woman who was able to differentiate her supreme rule aside from the other rulers while maintaining her power.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/culture/2019/07/india-forgotten-power-broker-begum-samru/


A Woman in Charge
Begum Samru is moderately forgotten today, but the Bhagirath Palace is one of the few landmarks that commemorate her.

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Who is Begum Samru?
***Begum Samru*** was a very powerful *** commander of over 3,000 troops and maintained that power ***even while being a female.***

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Today, 78 women hold seats in India’s Parliament, which is not even ***close to*** equal to men, who hold the ***remaining*** 465 seats.

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Many of the people who know of Begum Samru respect her highly as a woman who was able to ***differentiate her supreme rule aside from the other rulers while maintaining her power.***

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Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/culture/2019/07/india-forgotten-power-broker-begum-samru/


A Woman in Charge
Who is Begum Samru? She was a very powerful, female commander of over 3,000 troops and maintained that power during the late 18th and early 19th centuries. Today, 78 women hold seats in India's Parliament, which is not even closely equal to men, who hold the majority 465 seats. Many of the people who know of begum Samru respect her highly as a woman who was able to do whatever it took to remain in power.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/culture/2019/07/india-forgotten-power-broker-begum-samru/







July Fourth
The American Independence Day, commonly called the 4th of July is a celebration that originated from the American Revolution and goes back to the 18th century.
On July 2nd, 1776, Congress decided that it would support the idea of an independent nation.
Just two days on July 4, delegates from all 13 colonies signed the Declaration of Independence.
The early ways of celebrating the Fourth of July was having concerts, bonfires, and parades, which were all common practices.
However, the War of 1812, which was another war in which America faced Great Britain, enforced it as a national holiday with celebratory events to show American pride.
Since then, Americans all across the nation celebrate the Fourth of July as a prideful celebration, typically lighting up fireworks and having barbecues.
Website: https://www.google.com/amp/s/www.history.com/.amp/topics/holidays/july-4th


July Fourth

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The American Independence Day, commonly called the ***4th of July *** is a celebration that ***originated from the American Revolution ***and goes back to*** the 18th century.

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On July 2nd, 1776, Congress decided that it would ***support the idea of*** an independent nation.

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Just two days on July 4, delegates from all ***13 colonies signed the Declaration of Independence. ***

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The early ways of celebrating the Fourth of July was having concerts, bonfires, and parades, which were all common practices.

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***However,*** the War of 1812, ***which was*** another war in which America faced Great Britain, enforced it as a national holiday with celebratory events to show ***American*** pride.

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Since then, Americans all across the ***nation*** celebrate the Fourth of July ***as a prideful celebration***, typically lighting up fireworks and having barbecues.

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Website: https://www.google.com/amp/s/www.history.com/.amp/topics/holidays/july-4th


Fourth of July
The American Independence Day, commonly called the Fourth of July, is a celebration that originates from the American Revolution during the 18th century. On July 2nd, 1776, Congress decided that it would declare themselves an independent nation, and two days later, delegates from all thirteen colonies signed the Declaration of Independence. The War of 1812, another war in which America faced Great Britain, enforced it as a national holiday with celebratory events to show national pride. Since then, Americans all across the country celebrate the Fourth of July, typically lighting up fireworks and having barbecues.
Website: https://www.google.com/amp/s/www.history.com/.amp/topics/holidays/july-4th






The Eastern quoll nearly gets extinct.
The Eastern quoll, an adorable little spotted Australian Marsupial, went extinct fifty years ago in the mainland of Australia.
Quolls certainly have a signature look, a face of a mouse, ears of a lemur, a cat-like body and white polka dots on their thick fur.
Quolls are nocturnal and are not picky eaters; they eat insects or carrion, and will hunt rats, rabbits, birds, and lizards—even animals larger than themselves.
For the first time in five decades, the eastern quoll has been introduced back into the wild.
Forty quolls were moved from Tasmania to the Booderee National Park to ensure a increase in this population.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/08/animals-Australia-quolls-marsupials-extinct-reproduction/


The Eastern ***quoll nearly ***gets*** extinct.***

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The Eastern quoll, an adorable little spotted Australian ***Marsupial***, went extinct fifty years ago in ***the*** mainland ***of*** Australia.

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Quolls certainly have a signature look***,*** ***a*** face of a mouse, ears of a lemur, a cat-like body *** and white polka dots on their thick fur.

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Quolls are nocturnal and are not picky eaters; they eat insects or carrion, and will hunt rats, rabbits, birds, and lizards—even animals larger than themselves.***

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For the first time in five decades, the eastern quoll has been introduced back into the wild.***

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Forty quolls were moved from Tasmania to the Booderee National Park to ensure a ***increase in this*** population.

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Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/08/animals-Australia-quolls-marsupials-extinct-reproduction/


The Eastern Quoll Nearly Goes Extinct
The Eastern quoll, an adorable little spotted Australian marsupial, wet extinct fifty years ago in mainland Australia. Quolls certainly have a signature look: the face of a mouse, ears of a lemur, a cat-like body, and white polka dots on their thick fur, and they're also nocturnal. For the first time in five decades, the eastern quoll has been introduced back into the wild by the Australian government. Forty quolls were moved from Tasmania to the Booderee National Park to ensure a revival of their population.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/08/animals-Australia-quolls-marsupials-extinct-reproduction/






Reasons why Rhinos are having a hard time
Since rhinos are endangered, finding a mate is harder for them.
They live in four isolated regions scattered across 10,000 square miles so even finding another is difficult.
Many wildlife organizations are teaming up to breed rhinos in sanctuaries and increase the population of them.
Due to poaching, as many as seventy percent of the rhino decreased through the years.
A island in Indonesia called Sumatra has less than seventy-five rhinos in the whole place.
The population of those rhinos decreased hugely.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/magazine/2018/10/explore-atlas-sumatran-rhino-critically-endangered-conservation/


Reasons why Rhinos are having a hard time

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Since rhinos*** are endangered, finding a mate is harder for them.

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They live in four isolated regions scattered across 10,000 square miles*** so even finding *** another is difficult.

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Many wildlife organizations are teaming up to breed rhinos in sanctuaries ***and increase the population of them.***

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Due to poaching, as many as seventy percent of the rhino decreased through the years.***

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A island in Indonesia called Sumatra has less than seventy-five rhinos in the whole place.

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The population of those rhinos decreased hugely.***

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Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/magazine/2018/10/explore-atlas-sumatran-rhino-critically-endangered-conservation/


Reasons Why Rhinos Are Having A Hard Time
Since rhinoceroses are endangered, finding a mate is harder for them. They live in four isolated regions scattered across 10,000 square miles, so even finding one another is difficult. Many wildlife organizations are teaming up to breed rhinos in sanctuaries to increase their population after being decreased by poaching throughout the years. Their population has dropped drastically.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/magazine/2018/10/explore-atlas-sumatran-rhino-critically-endangered-conservation/







Is shark an ingredient in your cosmetics?
It is known that millions of deep-sea sharks are killed for multimillion dollar industries every year but there has also been found in sunscreen, lipstick, foundation, lotion, and many other cosmetics.
Common ingredients for cosmetics is oil, known as squalene, derived from shark livers.
Squalene is a key moisturizing agent for it is high in antioxidants and fatty acid.
Shark-sourced squalene can be found in other types of consumer goods, such as vaccines but ninety percent is used in cosmetics.
Thankfully, many corporations in the western world have made the switch to plant-based squalane, even though it is about thirty percent more expensive to produce.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/07/sharks-news-cosmetics-squalene-health/


Is shark an ingredient in your cosmetics?***

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It is known that millions of deep-sea sharks are killed ***for*** ***multimillion dollar industries ***every year but there has also been found in sunscreen, lipstick, foundation, lotion, and many other cosmetics.***

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Common ingredients for cosmetics is oil, known as squalene, derived from shark livers.***

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Squalene is a key moisturizing agent for it is high in antioxidants and fatty acid.***

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***Shark-sourced squalene*** can *** be found in other types of consumer goods, ***such as vaccines but ninety percent is used in cosmetics.

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***Thankfully,*** many corporations in the western world have made the switch to plant-based ***squalane, even though it is about thirty percent more expensive to produce.

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Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/07/sharks-news-cosmetics-squalene-health/


Is Shark An Ingredient In Your Cosmetics?
It is known that millions of deep-sea sharks are killed by multi-million, but every year people are finding ingredients made from shark livers in their sunscreen, lotions, and cosmetics. Cosmetics commonly include squalene, derived from the animal's liver. It can also be found in vaccines, but ninety percent of its used is in cosmetics. Many corporations in the western world have made the switch to plant-based squalene, even though it is about thirty percent more expensive to produce.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/07/sharks-news-cosmetics-squalene-health/






Ancient way of catching fish.
The ancient Japanese fishing method that uses birds to catch fish is called ukai.
Even though this method has been around for 1,300 years, it is now practiced because it is a popular tourist attraction.
Fishers get the fish by placing a tie on the cormorant’s neck and attaching a leash on the bird.
This way when the cormorants catch the fishes, they can only swallow the small fishes and the big fishes in their mouths get taken by the fisher.
Actor Charlie Chaplin has also described this method as “Japan’s highest art form”.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/08/ukai-comorant-fishing-japan-news/


Ancient way of catching fish.***

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The ancient Japanese fishing method that uses birds to catch fish is called ukai***.

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Even though this method has been around for ***1,300 years, it is now practiced because it is a popular tourist attraction.

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Fishers ***get the fish by*** ***placing*** a tie on ***the cormorant’s*** neck and ***attaching*** a leash on ***the*** bird.

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***This way*** when*** the cormorants catch*** the fishes***, they can only swallow the small fishes*** and the big fishes*** in their mouths*** get*** taken by the fisher.

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Actor Charlie Chaplin has also described this method as “Japan’s highest art form”.

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Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/08/ukai-comorant-fishing-japan-news/


Ancient Way Of Catching Fish
Ukai is an ancient Japanese fishing method that's been around thirteen hundred years using birds, and is now a popular tourist attraction. Fishers place a tie on a bird called a cormorant's neck and attach a leash on it. When the cormorant catches the fish, they can only swallow the small fish and the big fish in their mouth gets taken by the fisher. "Japan's highest art form" is how it was apparently described by actor Charlie Chaplin.
Website: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/08/ukai-comorant-fishing-japan-news/






Breeding reorganized dog’s brains.
Since the first wolf was domesticated an estimated 12,000 years ago, variety of dogs were bred and many more different kinds of dogs were made.
A new brain-imaging study examined the carcasses of eleven different dogs and breeds.
Scientists found that the brains of many short-snouted breeds have shifted forwards about fifteen degrees.
Researchers say that this perhaps significantly alters the dogs' all-important source of smell.
It is a wonder on how breeding can change a something like a sense of smell; researchers say that is a question to look forward into.
Website: https://news.nationalgeographic.com/news/2010/08/100803-dogs-brains-changed-breeding-science/


Breeding reorganized ***dog’s*** brains.***

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Since the first wolf was domesticated an estimated ***12,000*** years ago, ***variety*** of dogs ***were*** bred and many more different kinds ***of dogs were*** made.

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A new brain-imaging study examined the carcasses of eleven different ***dogs*** ***and*** breeds.

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Scientists found that the brains of many short-snouted breeds have shifted forwards about fifteen degrees.

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Website: https://news.nationalgeographic.com/news/2010/08/100803-dogs-brains-changed-breeding-science/


Breeding Reorganize Dogs' Brains
Since the first wolf was domesticated an estimated twelve thousand years ago, varieties of dogs have been bred and many more different kinds made. A new brain-imaging study examined the carcasses of eleven different dog breeds. Scientists found that the brains of many short-snouted breeds have shifted forward about fifteen degrees. Researchers say that this has a significant effect on the dogs' sense of smell. It is a wonder how breeding can change something like a sense of smell; researchers are excited to continue investigating.
Website: https://news.nationalgeographic.com/news/2010/08/100803-dogs-brains-changed-breeding-science/







Can dogs feel our emotions?
It is already known that sometimes dogs yawn when they see others yawn but they don’t know if it is considered a form of empathy or mild stress, as yawning can be caused by anxiety.
In a test it was determined that not only did the dog yawn more to their owners but also yawned less to fake yawns.
In a similar study before, scientists claimed that people yawn more when people they care about yawn.
So, they believe that contagious yawning is a form of empathizing with people experiencing a feeling.
Elisabetta Palagi, of the Institute of Cognitive Sciences and Technologies in Rome, says "This could be the result of a long process of domestication.”
Website: https://news.nationalgeographic.com/news/2013/08/130808-yawning-dogs-contagious-animals-empathy-science/


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It is already known that sometimes dogs yawn when they see ***others*** ***yawn*** but ***they don’t know*** if it is considered a form of empathy or mild stress, as yawning can be caused by anxiety.

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Elisabetta Palagi, of the Institute of Cognitive Sciences and Technologies in Rome, says "This could be the result of a long process of domestication.”
Website: https://news.nationalgeographic.com/news/2013/08/130808-yawning-dogs-contagious-animals-empathy-science/


Can Dogs Feel Our Emotions?
It is already known that sometimes dogs yawn when they see people do so, but researchers aren't sure if it is considered a form of empathy or mild stress, as yawning can be caused by anxiety. In a test it was determined that not only did the dog yawn more to their owners, but also responded less to fake yawns, and in a similar study beforehand, scientists claimed that people yawn more when somebody they care about does it. So, researchers believe that contagious yawning in dogs is a form of empathizing with people experiencing a feeling. Elisabetta Palagi, of the Institute of Cognitive Sciences and Technologies in Rome, says "This could be the result of a long process of domestication."
Website: https://news.nationalgeographic.com/news/2013/08/130808-yawning-dogs-contagious-animals-empathy-science/







Illegal Tiger Trade.
Undercover investigators with the Wildlife Justice Commission visited a tiger farm where people were illegally selling tigers that are hidden in a secret room.
Fewer than 4,000 tigers remain in the wild, but as many as 8,000 are held in captive facilities across China, Laos, Thailand, and Vietnam.
The bones of captive tigers are often used for wine or medicinal paste.
The skin of the tiger is used for furniture décor such as rugs or wall hangings.
The teeth may be set in gold and turned into jewelry.
Being able to wear, decorate, and use tiger parts led to people wanting to have them, however this also leads to tiger extinction.

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Armored dinosaur found.
A plant-eating dinosaur was found in a subtropical continent resembled today's Mississippi.
More than seventy-five million years ago, this dinosaur had lived and died on what scientists now call Laramidia, which was a continent that no longer exists.
The fossils consist of the animal's skull and parts of its skeleton, including its tail club, however the most prominent feature of the dino is the bony knobs dotting its skull that resemble pyramids.
Paleontologists named the new ankylosaurid species, Akainacephalus johnsoni, which is also known as “Johnson’s thorny head”.
Now, the animal's species name honors Randy Johnson, the volunteer fossil preparer who spent thousands of hours cleaning up the dinosaur's skull and lower jaw.
The discovery was amazing.🦕***

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Spice enduring mammal.
Scientists has discovered that humans are not the only mammals who can eat spicy food; Chinese tree screws were found to be able to eat chili peppers.🌶
Researchers found a mutation in the species’ ion channel receptor, TRPV1, that makes it less sensitive to capsaicin.
That acts as a pain receptor on the tongues and throats of mammals, alerting the brain when it comes in contact with harmful heat.
Scientists say that the mutation is a evolutionary adaptation to expand the range of the tree screws diet.
With their mutations, tree shrews don’t feel as much pain from spicy food.
If you like spicy food then, you have something in common with the Chinese tree screw!***

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Halloween sky

In the sky's of Halloween night there is said to have ghostly figures shown around the constellation Cepheus. Many star constellations are known back as far as the Aztec civilizations. They believed it as legends associated with the moon. What is said to be creepier is that the monster seems to be winking at the star gazers. Even with these theories, keen eyed trick-o-treaters often search for a ghoul.🎃***

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Kissing Kits

On the field of Prince Edward Island located in Canada, there were red fox kits playing with each other. On average there could be up to six fox kits in one litter. They could stay with their parents for up to seven months. The young offspring can be called kits,cubs,whelps,or pups. The red foxes are known to be intelligent and sly. 🐺***

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Hello, Spring

Spring is the time of year when Sakura trees, are also called Cherry Blossom trees. Their flowers bloom the most beautiful soft pink color. Many birds come to visit the trees inspecting the offerings given to them by the radiant blossoms. The cherry blossoms are also the national flower of Japan. From this, the Spring time of year is "Japan's busiest tourist season."🇯🇵🌸***

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Earth-sided planet

11 light years away, there is a dim red star called Ross 128b. These dwarf planets are everywhere however what makes it special is the fact that it has seven Earth sized planets in it orbital embrace. Actually, the closest Earth sized planet in Ross 128b's orbital embrace is Proxima b. This is a great discovery even though all the Earth like planets are nothing like Earth. People still want to find out if Earth has a twin. 🌏 👩👩***

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' Prehistoric ' shark captured

A shark with a snake head was captured,pulled from the ocean near Portugal. This shark has more than 300 teeth and was around 5 feet in length. From more than 2000 feet below the surface of the sea, it was hauled by a trawler. These Frilled sharks have been around for more than 80 million years but we still don't have enough information on them. This long, slim "living fossil" also poses a large threat to squid and other fish they are thought to prey on because like their modern cousins(Hammerhead , Great white ect.)they have neddle shaped teeth and the jaws to catch large prey. 🇵🇹***

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Whale spa day

While studying the Bowhead whales, Sarah Fortune discovered that like humans, Bowhead whales in the Canadian Article pamper themselves. To get rid of loose and dead skin, Bowhead whales rub themselves against giant boulders. Beluga whales and Ocras (killer whales) were known to do this but this was the first known for Bowhead whales. The whales regularly molt, shedding the top layer of dead skin. These whale especially use rocks on Cumberland sound to exfoliate their skin. 🐋 ***

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