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For now, further research is still going on to get to the bottom of this case: The case of the vanishing stars.
 
For now, further research is still going on to get to the bottom of this case: The case of the vanishing stars.
 
Source: [https://www.popsci.com/story/space/100-stars-have-disappeared/]
 
Source: [https://www.popsci.com/story/space/100-stars-have-disappeared/]
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== Vanishing Stars ==***
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<br>Throughout history, we have been lead to believe that our night sky is unchanging as the same existing stars are still used for navigation.***
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<br>However, recent images of the night sky brings a question to that claim: Is the night sky really permanent?***
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<br>The images show that many spots of lights (stars) have vanished over the years.***
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    Too much information and too many sentences. Let's take the most important information from each of the three sentences above and make it into one sentence. Most important information: "lead to believe that our night sky is unchanging", "However, recent images", and "(stars) have vanished":
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''Throughout history, we have been lead to believe that our night sky is unchanging, however, recent images show that many stars have vanished over the years.'' 
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A group of astronomers are investigating this further in a project named the Vanishing and Appearing Sources during a Century of Observations (VASCO) Project.***
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They compare 70-year-old surveys of the night sky with recent one and have so far discovered at least 100 vanished sources of light!***
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    Good. Just change "with recent one" to either "a recent one" or "recent ones".
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''They compare 70-year-old surveys of the night sky with recent ones and have so far discovered at least 100 vanished sources of light!''
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<br>These astronomers continue to research for this project and hope that the information found would even be relevant to the search for extraterrestrial intelligence (SETI).***
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    This sentence is a little wordy and since we already have some large sentences let's trim this one for easier reading and better flow. I suggest changing the order of where "these astronomers" and "research" appears in the sentence. I also changed the tense at the end to present since the astronomers currently haven't found EI yet. Notice how it's easier to read and gets to the point faster.
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''As the research continues, these astronomers believe that this could be relevant to the search for extraterrestrial intelligence (SETI).''
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<br>Afterall, there aren't many explanations for the subtle vanishing of stars and nothing, even the possibility of aliens, can be ruled out.***
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<br>When stars die, they explode in supernovas that are hard to miss.***
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<br>So why have hundreds of stars disappeared without obvious notice?***
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    Combine the above two sentences. Use "Afterall," here instead because it still ties in the sentences nicely.
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''Afterall, when stars die, they're hard to miss, so, why have hundreds of stars disappeared without notice?''
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<br>The other possibility are black holes, but disappearances due to black holes are not common at all.***
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    Omit. Too many details. You must pick and choose which facts are most important.
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<br>Although it may be too early to assume alien life, we cannot rule it out as an explanation.***
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<br>For now, further research is still going on to get to the bottom of this case: The case of the vanishing stars.***
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''Although it may be too early to assume alien life, further research is needed to get to the bottom of this case.''
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<br>Source: [https://www.popsci.com/story/space/100-stars-have-disappeared/]***
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    I've deleted the brackets around your source so that the website name is fully listed and visible, however, I'm not sure if it's necessary. 
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''Source: https://www.popsci.com/story/space/100-stars-have-disappeared/''
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== Vanishing Stars ==
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Throughout history, we have been lead to believe that our night sky is unchanging, however, recent images show that many stars have vanished over the years. A group of astronomers are investigating this further in a project named the Vanishing and Appearing Sources during a Century of Observations (VASCO) Project. They compare 70-year-old surveys of the night sky with recent ones and have so far discovered at least 100 vanished sources of light! As the research continues, these astronomers believe that this could be relevant to the search for extraterrestrial intelligence (SETI). Afterall, when stars die, they're hard to miss, so, why have hundreds of stars disappeared without notice? Although it may be too early to assume alien life, further research is needed to get to the bottom of this case.
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<br>Source: https://www.popsci.com/story/space/100-stars-have-disappeared/
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    Overall, this is really good writing and does summarize the article however, it is still way too long and has about twice as many sentences! Remember a headline, 6 sentences, and the source. Keep up the nice writing but please stick to the format.
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== Microplastics in the Air ==
 
== Microplastics in the Air ==
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== China's Huawei and Cananda ==***
 
== China's Huawei and Cananda ==***
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    Watch spelling. I added "Still Disputing" to better represent the topic in the article. Without it, it is a broad headline.  
China's Huawei and Canada Still Disputing  
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''China's Huawei and Canada Still Disputing''
 
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Canada has decided to wait until after this fall’s federal election to see whether Chinese tech, Huawei, can provide equipment for the country’s next-generation 5G wireless network.***
    Canada has decided to wait until after this fall’s federal election to see whether Chinese tech, Huawei, can provide equipment for the country’s next-generation 5G wireless network.***
 
 
  Ralph Goodale says Canada requires more information from the United States about the potential security threat by the state-owned company.***
 
  Ralph Goodale says Canada requires more information from the United States about the potential security threat by the state-owned company.***
 
The election is Oct. 21.***
 
The election is Oct. 21.***
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Canada and its Five Eyes intelligence allies had a meeting discussing whether to let Huawei supply the equipment for the 5G system.***
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<br>Canada and its Five Eyes intelligence allies had a meeting discussing whether to let Huawei supply the equipment for the 5G system.***
This is a conflicting issue as The United States and Australia have already banned Huawei.***
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<br>This is a conflicting issue as The United States and Australia have already banned Huawei.***
Their reasons being that they are concerned it is an organ of Chinese military intelligence.***
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<br>Their reasons being that they are concerned it is an organ of Chinese military intelligence.***
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The issue is even more pressing as Canada and China are in a political dispute.***
 
The issue is even more pressing as Canada and China are in a political dispute.***
China imprisoned two Canadians and this is being seen as retaliation for the Royal Canadian Mounted Police’s decision to arrest Huawei senior executive Meng Wanzhou on a U.S. extradition warrant.***
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China imprisoned two Canadians and this is being seen as retaliation for the Royal Canadian Mounted Police’s decision to arrest Huawei senior executive Meng Wanzhou on a U.S. extradition warrant.***
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    Hey there! Sorry about this article. I just realized that I must have not finished it or saved the final product properly! The original article has now expired so, I am going to leave it for now. My main notes are for you to watch how many sentences you are using and make the most of each sentence. A few of your sentences can be combined and cut back a bit to better summarize the new story.
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== Pakistani military plane crashed ==
 
== Pakistani military plane crashed ==

Latest revision as of 21:32, 15 January 2020

Vanishing Stars[edit]

    Throughout history, we have been lead to believe that our night sky is unchanging as the same existing stars are still used for navigation. However, recent images of the night sky brings a question to that claim: Is the night sky really permanent? The images show that many spots of lights (stars) have vanished over the years. A group of astronomers are investigating this further in a project named the Vanishing and Appearing Sources during a Century of Observations (VASCO) Project. They compare 70-year-old surveys of the night sky with recent one and have so far discovered at least 100 vanished sources of light! These astronomers continue to research for this project and hope that the information found would even be relevant to the search for extraterrestrial intelligence (SETI). Afterall, there aren't many explanations for the subtle vanishing of stars and nothing, even the possibility of aliens, can be ruled out. When stars die, they explode in supernovas that are hard to miss. So why have hundred of stars disappeared without obvious notice? The other possibility are black holes, but disappearances due to black holes are not common at all. Although it may be too early to assume alien life, we cannot rule it out as an explanation.

For now, further research is still going on to get to the bottom of this case: The case of the vanishing stars. Source: [1]

== Vanishing Stars ==***

    Good, clear and to the point. No edit.


Throughout history, we have been lead to believe that our night sky is unchanging as the same existing stars are still used for navigation.***
However, recent images of the night sky brings a question to that claim: Is the night sky really permanent?***
The images show that many spots of lights (stars) have vanished over the years.***

    Too much information and too many sentences. Let's take the most important information from each of the three sentences above and make it into one sentence. Most important information: "lead to believe that our night sky is unchanging", "However, recent images", and "(stars) have vanished":

Throughout history, we have been lead to believe that our night sky is unchanging, however, recent images show that many stars have vanished over the years.

A group of astronomers are investigating this further in a project named the Vanishing and Appearing Sources during a Century of Observations (VASCO) Project.***

    Good. 

They compare 70-year-old surveys of the night sky with recent one and have so far discovered at least 100 vanished sources of light!***

   Good. Just change "with recent one" to either "a recent one" or "recent ones". 

They compare 70-year-old surveys of the night sky with recent ones and have so far discovered at least 100 vanished sources of light!


These astronomers continue to research for this project and hope that the information found would even be relevant to the search for extraterrestrial intelligence (SETI).***

    This sentence is a little wordy and since we already have some large sentences let's trim this one for easier reading and better flow. I suggest changing the order of where "these astronomers" and "research" appears in the sentence. I also changed the tense at the end to present since the astronomers currently haven't found EI yet. Notice how it's easier to read and gets to the point faster.

As the research continues, these astronomers believe that this could be relevant to the search for extraterrestrial intelligence (SETI).


Afterall, there aren't many explanations for the subtle vanishing of stars and nothing, even the possibility of aliens, can be ruled out.***

    Omit this. This information isn't crucial for a summary since it was mentioned above already.


When stars die, they explode in supernovas that are hard to miss.***
So why have hundreds of stars disappeared without obvious notice?***

    Combine the above two sentences. Use "Afterall," here instead because it still ties in the sentences nicely. 

Afterall, when stars die, they're hard to miss, so, why have hundreds of stars disappeared without notice?


The other possibility are black holes, but disappearances due to black holes are not common at all.***

    Omit. Too many details. You must pick and choose which facts are most important.


Although it may be too early to assume alien life, we cannot rule it out as an explanation.***
For now, further research is still going on to get to the bottom of this case: The case of the vanishing stars.***

    Combine the above two sentences into one. 

Although it may be too early to assume alien life, further research is needed to get to the bottom of this case.


Source: [2]***

    I've deleted the brackets around your source so that the website name is fully listed and visible, however, I'm not sure if it's necessary.  

Source: https://www.popsci.com/story/space/100-stars-have-disappeared/

Edited Paragraph:

Vanishing Stars[edit]

Throughout history, we have been lead to believe that our night sky is unchanging, however, recent images show that many stars have vanished over the years. A group of astronomers are investigating this further in a project named the Vanishing and Appearing Sources during a Century of Observations (VASCO) Project. They compare 70-year-old surveys of the night sky with recent ones and have so far discovered at least 100 vanished sources of light! As the research continues, these astronomers believe that this could be relevant to the search for extraterrestrial intelligence (SETI). Afterall, when stars die, they're hard to miss, so, why have hundreds of stars disappeared without notice? Although it may be too early to assume alien life, further research is needed to get to the bottom of this case.
Source: https://www.popsci.com/story/space/100-stars-have-disappeared/

    Overall, this is really good writing and does summarize the article however, it is still way too long and has about twice as many sentences! Remember a headline, 6 sentences, and the source. Keep up the nice writing but please stick to the format. 

Edited by Kira Carson







Microplastics in the Air[edit]

    It's no secret that our oceans are full of our plastic litter. The plastic can actually be broken down into minuscule fragments of plastic called, microplastic. Scientists have found that the microplastic is transported by the atmosphere and eventually leaves the atmosphere with precipitation, specifically, snow. To test this, Dr. Melanie Bergmann and Dr. Gunnar Gerdts performed a study on snow samples from various locations such as the Arctic and Swiss Alps; high concentrations of microplastics were found. Bergmann then hypothesized that the microplastics were being transported by the air. Her next experiment utilized pollen instead of microplastics. She discovered that the pollen did indeed travel a long distance from middle latitudes all the way to the Arctic! With these experiments in mind, even more questions are raised: How much plastic are we inhaling then? As these plastics continue to travel through the air and into the food we consume, how will it affect our future?   (Note to editor: Sorry for not updating! I will be on vacation from August 22nd until August 30th. Also, could you please give feedback on the night-glowing clouds one in the meantime? Thanks!)

Source: [3]


***"Airborne Microplastics" ***

- Switch the order of the adj, and noun-- this is clearer.

- No edits for your intro, except that the second "our" is not needed. I still see that you are still relying on certain parts of the original piece, certainly in tone and rhythm of the sentence. This is not technically plagiarism, but it shows a lack of enthusiasm about the subject matter and makes the article dry. Try not to box yourself in ! Show us your creativity, your way of thinking and structuring words. The ball is in your court!

***Luckily, scientists discovered that plastic can actually be broken down into microplastics, are transported into the atmosphere to be discarded with precipitation. ***

- Mark a transition with the adverb "luckily", also tie your second sentence with the third to bring together similar thoughts and consolidate information. This helps keep away redundancies and unnecessary wording.

***Dr. Melanie Bergmann and Dr. Gunnar Gerdts tested snow samples from various locations to prove that microplastics are airborne. ***

-This is the point in the article where you should be getting to the meat of the text; it seems like sometimes you are edging around the main point, or taking to long to get there. By putting together information that you spread across a few sentences, we can consolidate, specify and reach our point much quicker!

***This experiment raises an important question: how much plastic are we inhaling?***

- Since you have a sentence limit, introduce one experiment to focus on. Good use of the colon, but "How" should not be capitalized. This is not the start of a new sentence but a continuation.


-Great concluding sentence. No edits! I like that you end with a question. The whole sentence ties together the paragraph while simultaneously providing new and compelling information. Well done!


  • "Airborne Microplastics"

It's no secret that our oceans are full of plastic litter. Luckily, scientists discovered that plastic can actually be broken down into microplastics, are transported into the atmosphere to be discarded with precipitation. Dr. Melanie Bergmann and Dr. Gunnar Gerdts tested snow samples from various locations to prove that microplastics are airborne. This experiment raises an important question: how much plastic are we inhaling? As these plastics continue to travel through the air and into the food we consume, how will it affect our future?

[4]




The New Biodegradable Plastic Revolution[edit]

    As we all know, plastic is a very useful material, and convenient, too! It's light, inexpensive, substantial, and a part of our everyday life- preserving our food in packaging, holding our drinks in containers, and so much more. However, the lesser-known fact about plastic is that it's extremely harmful for the environment. Plastic fills landfills, spills into the ocean, and poisons sea creatures as it breaks down into microplastic. Scientists have been trying to create a better plastic that is biodegradable and gives back to the world. To do this, it's important to know that plastic is made from polymer chains and the weaker the chains, the more biodegradable it is. Achieving biodegradability is not easy; it comes with a few factors to consider, such as temperature. The temperature to make plastic is similar to the temperature to degrade it. Researchers must find the right conditions to raise the temperature of degradation, by adding certain chemicals stops the breaking of the polymer chain, or lower the melting temperature, by using additives called plasticizers. Scientists have already begun making progress in biodegradable plastics. There are plant-based ones they've made, that have smaller carbon footprints than plastic, but they aren't completely biodegradable. Next, they've come up with PLA, a corn-based plastic, which are biodegradable, just only in the particular infrastructures for compost. Finally, this journey in attempting to create biodegradable plastic leads to the making of PHA and PHB. PHA is made from broken down food waste and sewage from wastewater treated pants and PHB is from methane. These plastics are better in such that nothing is wasted and everything can be used and reused. Many popular companies such as PepsiCo and Nestlé are planning on using PHA instead of the previous harmful plastics. The new plastic revolution is springing into action!

Source: [5]


*** "The Biodegradable Plastic Revolution"***

- Good title! You do not need "new" because that is suggested with "revolution".

***We all know that plastic is a useful and convenient material; it is light, inexpensive and part of our every day lives.***

- "As" is not needed, and I included descriptors from your next sentence into this one using a semi-colon. Your paragraph is very very long; try to consolidate information and remove phrases that are not necessary or repeat information.

***However, it is also extremely harmful for the environment because of the way it breaks down into micro-plastics, filling into landfills and oceans, and poisoning wildlife.***

- You have similar/connected sentences that are separated. Like the edit above, keep together similar information. This allows for a natural flow from one idea into a connecting one.

***Scientists are trying to create a biodegradable plastic by using temperature and certain chemicals to create the perfect conditions for decomposition.***

- In these next few sentences, you are trying to explain the process in a way that is too complex for the reader to understand in just really just 4 sentences (excluding the intro and conclusion). Summarize as best you can, you do not need to include all the information from the original article. Paraphrase for clarity and character count.

***Already, plant-based plastics, though not completely biodegradable, have lessened the carbon-footprint.***

- This is a transition sentence to tie together the previous sentence and the end of the article. Use it as a stepping stone-- remove the sentences that are too compounded with information to be clear and plot out your paragraph before writing.

***Plastics are also being made from broken-down food waste, sewage and methane. ***

- You introduce PHA and PHB without explaining what the are. This is the kind of information that you should remove. Instead, focus on information that will enhance the paragraph and will be clear to the reader. I see that your are using more descriptive language, but it is getting lost in the quagmire of the paragraph.

*** The plastic revolution is springing into action as more and more companies turn to alternative resources to benefit the planet.***

- Your two last sentences were good to wrap up the piece. I put them together to make a complete picture. Focus on consolidation and clarity! (which does not necessarily mean more information).

  • "The Biodegradable Plastic Revolution"

We all know that plastic is a useful and convenient material; it is light, inexpensive and part of our every day lives. However, it is also extremely harmful for the environment because of the way it breaks down into micro-plastics, filling into landfills and oceans, and poisoning wildlife. Scientists are trying to create a biodegradable plastic by using temperature and certain chemicals to create the perfect conditions for decomposition. Already, plant-based plastics, though not completely biodegradable, have lessened the carbon-footprint. Plastics are also being made from broken-down food waste, sewage and methane. The plastic revolution is springing into action as more and more companies turn to alternative resources to benefit the planet.

https://www.knowablemagazine.org/article/sustainability/2019/toward-greener-plastics



The Past, Present, and Future for Coccolithophores[edit]

    Coccolithophores were first exposed to the world by oceanographer, Barney Balch, during the summer of 1988. It all started when he spotted a rather large and radiant turquoise-colored patch in the Atlantic ocean. After collecting the water samples, it was confirmed that the patches of color were due to tiny single-celled algae, called coccolithophores. They produce reflective limestone plates, giving off the bright colors Balch had seen. Coccolithophores have made great impacts on the chemistry of the ocean and global climate. A few ways they demonstrate that they are beneficial are by not only, absorbing carbon dioxide out to make sugars as all photosynthetic organisms do, but by shielding the ocean from the sun's harsh rays and radiation. In addition, they also bring decomposing mineral that could release more carbon dioxide down to the ocean floor. However, with climate change, the ocean environment is becoming inhabitable for shell-forming organisms as the change in climate makes the ocean more acidic and corrosive to limestone. The organisms will have to use up extra energy to form plates in acidic water. Currently, coccolithophores are one of the most plentiful phytoplankton groups in the world, but if we don't take initiative to reduce climate change for them and other organisms, they won't be the most abundant any longer. Let's prevent that from happening and help out these important ocean organisms. 

Source: [6]

***" The Past, Present, and Future of Coccolithophores."***

- Good title! Instead of "for", use "of" to point to the subject.

*** When oceanographer Barney Balch first spotted a large and radiantly colored patch in the Atlantic ocean, he introduced the world to coccolithophores.***

- Your intro sentence is more of a statement of fact than an introduction into the piece. I used this form to start the sentence and project the reader into the article.

***Coccolithophores, tiny, single-celled algae, produce reflective limestone plates which create a luminous turquoise color, and they have a great impact on the ocean's chemistry.***

- See how in the first sentence we introduce the subject? Now, the second sentence can tell us what the subject is and the next sentence can go further into their impacts. See the paragraph not as separate, individual sentences, but a collective force! I only used one description of the algae in regards to its impact, so the sentence doesn't run on. We can slip that information in elsewhere!

***They impact the global climate, absorb carbon dioxide, shield the ocean from the sun's harsh rays, and bring decomposing minerals down to the ocean floor.***

-In this sentence, we can list and describe the benefits of the subject. Good descriptions, but try and stay away from those in the original piece. Also note how all the verbs (absorb, shield, bring) are in the same tense.

***However, with climate change's steady increase, the ocean's environment is becoming inhabitable for shelled organism; the ocean is too acidic and corrosive and these organisms must exert more energy to protect themselves. ***

- I used "steady increase" for description, and changed "shell-forming" since it is a description from the original. I used a semi-colon to bring together three sentences that flowed well together.

***Coccolithophores are one of the world's most plentiful phytoplankton, but if initiatives are not taken to reduce climate change, they won't be abundant for long.***

- This sentence is your natural conclusion! Look through your sentence and see what words are redundant and unnecessary. Good article! Really enjoyed it.

  • " The Past, Present, and Future of Coccolithophores."

When oceanographer Barney Balch first spotted a large and radiantly colored patch in the Atlantic ocean, he introduced the world to coccolithophores. Coccolithophores, tiny, single-celled algae, produce reflective limestone plates which create a luminous turquoise color, and they have a great impact on the ocean's chemistry. They impact the global climate, absorb carbon dioxide, shield the ocean from the sun's harsh rays, and bring decomposing minerals down to the ocean floor. However, with climate change's steady increase, the ocean's environment is becoming inhabitable for shelled organism; the ocean is too acidic and corrosive and these organisms must exert more energy to protect themselves. Coccolithophores are one of the world's most plentiful phytoplankton, but if initiatives are not taken to reduce climate change, they won't be abundant for long.

https://www.knowablemagazine.org/article/living-world/2019/tiny-living-stones-sea




Save the Coral Reefs![edit]

    For the past 13 years, Joleah Lamb, a biology professor, has provided large contributions of data for a study invested in determining how to save coral reefs. With help from more than 80 other researchers, over 2,500 reefs across 44 countries have been researched on for this study. Lamb provided details for over a million coral reefs and it is clear she cares very deeply on this topic as she, along with her team, swim underwater for as long as 6 hours per day! From her observations, they've learned about coral bleaching. The presence of coral bleaching indicates that the water is much too warm. This is because when temperatures are too high, corals lose their algae needed for energy. This also makes the coral color change into white instead of their usual vibrant colors. Thankfully, the research claims that it is not too late to save most of the reefs. For the most part, we must protect the corals from anymore human impact. Our excessive carbon emissions are leading to climate change which continues to harm corals worldwide. It's time we protect our world and combat environmental threats!

Source: [7]


- No edits for you title! Very personable, but still professional. Well done!

***For the past 13 years, Joleah Lamb, a biology professor, has been gathering data to determine how to save coral reefs.***

- Good first sentence. "Provided" and "contributions" are redundant; simply saying "gathering data" is a clearer way to express this ("study" is not necessary because it is already implied). Similarly "invested in determining" is too lengthy of a phrase when "to determine how" is more straightforward.

***With help from more than 80 other researchers, over 2,500 reefs across 44 countries have been included in this study, and Lamb's team spent as long as 6 hours in the water each day acquiring data.***

- Another good sentence. I really appreciate how you are forming your own phrases to interpret the article. "Research" is already implied in "study", so "included" is better suited. I used the conjunction "and" to draw from the next sentence and tie together the two points. The section where you point out Lamb's care is unnecessary and takes away from the professionalism of your piece.

***Lamb's observations provided vital information about coral bleaching, which occurs when water temperatures are too high and affect energy-giving algae that grow on these reefs.***

- You have three sentences here that can be joined together to make a stronger sentence. I recommend focusing on the outline of your paragraph and map out what your four facts are; than you can align your information with each fact.

***Fostered by excessive carbon emissions, high water temperatures cause the coral to lose its vibrant color.***

- Another example of a sentence that is too short (not necessarily in length, but how it contributes to the overall paragraph). Try to keep together similar ideas and facts that connect to each other.

*** Thankfully, research claims that it is not to late to save a majority of coral reefs from human impact.***

- Pretty good sentence! The article "the" is not needed (you are referring not to one piece of research, but many). "A majority" allows us to visualize the subject better than "most", which is vague. I liked "human impact" from the next sentence and felt it belonged in this one. Good use of starting the sentence with an adverb! Really helps the momentum.

***Now is the time to combat environmental threats that harm coral reefs worldwide, before it becomes to late.***

- Good conclusion! Be careful using universal pronouns, like "we" in conclusions; it can sometimes make the ending sound contrite.

  • Save the Coral Reefs!

For the past 13 years, Joleah Lamb, a biology professor, has been gathering data to determine how to save coral reefs. With help from more than 80 other researchers, over 2,500 reefs across 44 countries have been included in this study, and Lamb's team spent as long as 6 hours in the water each day acquiring data. Lamb's observations provided vital information about coral bleaching, which occurs when water temperatures are too high and affect energy-giving algae that grow on these reefs. Fostered by excessive carbon emissions, high water temperatures cause the coral to lose its vibrant color. Thankfully, research claims that it is not to late to save a majority of coral reefs from human impact. Now is the time to combat environmental threats that harm coral reefs worldwide, before it becomes to late.

https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/08/190812144926.htm



New Zealand's Lost Birds[edit]

    It may be hard to believe at first, but a devastating fact about New-Zealand is that HALF the birds there have gone extinct ever since humans began to colonize New Zealand. This just shows how human impact is affecting biodiversity in detrimental ways. Luis Valente and his team have done a study that allows them to estimate the number of years it would take to restore all the bird species lost from human interaction. Since the influence of humans on species extinction in New Zealand is very documented, they chose to test their method on the birds of New Zealand. With their technology and calculation, they have determined that it would take around 50 million years to restore all the lost species. This number is insanely large and adds more reason to why we need to take immediate actions on the species restoration. New Zealand is already on the right path in taking the initiative to reduce human threats. The rest of the world should acknowledge this terrible situation as a call to action in watching out for and minimizing our human threats to the environment. 

Source: [8]

***"The Lost Birds of New Zealand."***

- Your title is good, but you took it from part of the original title. If we just change the positioning of the sentence, we can draw from the original piece while not directly taking from it.

***It may be hard to believe, but half of the birds native to New Zealand have gone extinct since humans began to colonize the land.***

- There are a lot of unnecessary words in this sentence, like "devastating fact"; you are already asserting a fact so we do not need that explanation. "Half" should not be capitalized. To show exaggeration, put the word in italics.

- You next sentence is a good one, but it reads like a conclusion. You could instead include it in the intro sentence or use it to wrap up the article. I'm conflicted, because it is a great sentence, it just doesn't belong in this part of the paragraph.

***To show the detrimental affects of human impact on the environment, a team of scientists conducted a study which allows them to estimate the number of years it would take to restore the extinct birds of New Zealand.***

- I put together pieces from your previous sentence with this one, so the audiences sees a cause and effect play out. Since such limited information is given about Luis Valente, it is better to generalize with "team of scientists.

***The correlation between human intervention and animal extinction in New Zealand is well documented, and scientists determined that it would take approximately 50 million years to restore each lost species.***

-Like the previous sentence, I took two sentences/facts you present and made one sentence that connects each thought. "Correlation" is a great scientific word to use to explain a comparison. Your sentences are good (and organic- not from the original piece), you just need to work on the presentation and linear flow of the info you present.

***New Zealand is already taking the necessary steps to reduce human interference on the environment, in the hope of preventing further extinction.***

-"Necessary steps" in exchange for "on the right path" is more of a personal choice, but I used this for the text to sound more elevated. Perhaps you should include what steps the country is taking, and if none are provided, perhaps you can surmise your own. What do you think some of the steps are?

***The plight of New Zealand's birds is a call to action for people around the world; we must watch out for and minimize our negative influence on the environment.***

-I love your word choice, especially "call to action"; this really sets up your conclusion. The use of the semi-colon helps pace the sentence. Overall, good job choosing new words. Focus now on the linear direction of the sentence, sentence count and fluidity.

  • "The Lost Birds of New Zealand."

It may be hard to believe, but half of the birds native to New Zealand have gone extinct since humans began to colonize the land. To show the detrimental affects of human impact on the environment, a team of scientists conducted a study which allows them to estimate the number of years it would take to restore the extinct birds of New Zealand. The correlation between human intervention and animal extinction in New Zealand is well documented, and scientists determined that it would take approximately 50 million years to restore each lost species. New Zealand is already taking the necessary steps to reduce human interference on the environment, in the hope of preventing further extinction. The plight of New Zealand's birds is a call to action for people around the world; we must watch out for and minimize our negative influence on the environment.

https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/08/190805112225.htm


Liquid Magnets[edit]

    Scientists have created liquid droplets that act like magnets. This is unusual because magnets that produce a permanent magnetic field are normally solids. However, certain liquids can be magnetic when put in a magnetic field. Each atom of a magnet have their own north and south poles. In the liquids, once the magnetic field goes away, their magnetic poles will be disoriented and the liquids are no longer magnetic. A scientist by the name of Thomas Russell and his colleagues figured out a way to make permanently magnetized liquid magnets. The liquid magnets will be incredibly useful in science. They could be used to build soft robots, to be ingested in drug capsules, to lead medicine to cells, and more. How were they able to make these droplets permanently magnetized? They did this by adding particular polymers to the liquid droplets. in addition, taking in mind that most magnets of made of iron, the liquid magnets are made of iron as well. Well, specifically, they were a watery solution containing iron-oxide nanoparticles. After making the watery solution, they lowered the solution into oil. The polymers in the oil pulled out and pulled many of the nanoparticles out to the droplet's surface. Now, a densely packed shell of nanoparticles surrounds the droplet. So even when the magnetic field is turned off, the nanoparticles are so packed together that they won't fall out of their alignment.    

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- No edits for your title; well done!

***Scientists have created liquid droplets that act like magnets, which is unusual since permanent magnetic fields are normally solids.***

- Your intro sentence was too much to the point/ direct to start off your article. By combining it with the next sentence, the intro now sounds more personable, less stiff in its introduction. I can also tell that you are still relying on the original article for certain terms and phrases. I think if you cut down the paragraph, you will have an easier time using your own voice. Try for 6 sentences all together instead of the 10+ you have here.

***However, scientist Thomas Russell and his colleagues discovered a way to make liquid droplets permanently magnetic; by adding particular polymers to liquid iron, nanoparticles are able to encase the substance to keep it from falling out of alignment.***

- The intro sentence sets up your article with the affirmation that scientists have done something incredible,, something that hasn't been done. Linearly, the audience wants to know what, why and how. In this way you can set up your paragraph: intro, fact 1-4, and your conclusion. Also, don't assume the audience knows what you are talking about-- it most cases we know less than you do. The added info only adds to the confusion. I put together some of your sentences that fall in line with the discovery and explained the process in a simple yet understandable way for a layman/woman. I used a semi-colon so the sentence does not run on and we can separate two ideas and facts in one sentence.

***Scientists can also control the liquid by manipulating it's magnetic poles.***

- I included this sentence here to add a new fact and provide the audience a more concise idea of what is happening. There is no explanation of certain scientific phrases that the audience would never know, which adds to the confusion.

***Liquid magnets are predicted to become incredibly useful for the future of scientific development.***

- This sentence acts as a transition. The audience knows we are gaining momentum into the piece. I changed "will be" to "predicted" since "will be" is represents personal opinion (no backing to it); instead, "predicted" provides just the right amount of vagueness. "Scientific development" is more specific than "science".

***They could be used to build soft robots and to be put into drug capsules to guide the medicine in the body.***

-Pretty good sentence! You are still relying on descriptions from the original piece. Take for instance your usage of "ingested"-- that is directly from the article. Instead, look at an online thesaurus. This will give you a huge variety of words to use.

***Liquid magnets are the wave of the future and scientists will make great use of this discovery.***

- The conclusion should be the outcome or result of the article. What should the audience take away from your piece? A conclusion is not just a summary!


"Liquid Magnets"

Scientists have created liquid droplets that act like magnets, which is unusual since permanent magnetic fields are normally solids. However, scientist Thomas Russell and his colleagues discovered a way to make liquid droplets permanently magnetic; by adding particular polymers to liquid iron, nanoparticles are able to encase the substance to keep it from falling out of alignment. Scientists can also control the liquid by manipulating it's magnetic poles. Liquid magnets are predicted to become incredibly useful for the future of scientific development. They could be used to build soft robots and to be put into drug capsules to guide the medicine in the body. Liquid magnets are the wave of the future and scientists will make great use of this discovery.

https://www.sciencenewsforstudents.org/article/tiny-new-magnets-are-not-only-squishy-also-liquid




Night-glowing clouds[edit]

    Scientists have seen incredible noctilucent clouds in the Northern Hemisphere. This summer, an unusual discovery scientists have made is that these clouds are appearing further South than normal.
    Noctilucent clouds develop high in polar skies and gleam blue or white as they catch the sun’s rays. They float in high latitudes in the mesosphere. The clouds form when water vapor condenses onto and then freezes around dust particles, which usually happens at −130° Celsius. Nanometer-sized ice crystals result from this. 
    What is surprising is that the Mesosphere, this summer, was the wettest it has ever been. One possible explanation scientists have for this is that this summer, more moist air rose than usual. It is also believed that there might have been a rise in methane in the atmosphere that enters chemical reactions, forming water vapor. The scientists are planning to use computers to monitor the clouds and hopefully, through their studies, find a solid explanation for the trends and reasons to why the clouds are forming outside of polar skies. 

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***"Night-Glowing Clouds"*** - Good title! Just remember capitalization rules.

***Scientists have seen incredible numbers of noctilucent clouds in the Northern Hemisphere, and, surprisingly, have observed these clouds further south than usual. *** - Good first sentence. I put it together, using a conjunction, with the following sentence. Try to do this when you can; it helps keep your article sharp and concise. I included the adverb "surprisingly" to mark a change in the text.

***Noctilucent clouds form in the polar skies, and produce astounding colors as they drift into the mesosphere.***

- Many phrases from this sentence were plagiarized. I marked two apparent ones:

clouds gleam blue or white as they catch the sun’s rays; develop up high in polar skies. Use your own descriptions. 

***These night-glowing clouds occur during condensation, when water vapor freezes around dust particles and produces ice crystals. *** - Another plagiarized phrase : water vapor condenses onto and then freezes around dust particles. MUST be rewritten. I also believe that thise sentence should follow your intro; you end the last sentence with the mesosphere and begin the sentence that follows this one talking about mesospheres. To separate them with a sentence loses the pace and flow.

***This summer, the mesosphere was the wettest it has ever been; scientists believe this is because of rising number of methane in the air.*** - Bring together similar thoughts using conjunctions or punctuation to avoid run-on sentences-- keep the flow of the sentence moving!

*** Through further research, hopefully scientists can discover why these clouds are forming outside the polar skies.*** -Good conclusion sentence, though I shaved away some phrasing that was unnecessary and dragged the sentence.


"Night-Glowing Clouds"

  • Scientists have seen incredible numbers of noctilucent clouds in the Northern Hemisphere, and, surprisingly, have observed these clouds further south than usual. Noctilucent clouds form in the polar skies, and produce astounding colors as they drift into the mesosphere. This summer, the mesosphere was the wettest it has ever been; scientists believe this is because of rising number of methane in the air. These nigh-glowing clouds occur during condensation, when water vapor freezes around dust particles and produces ice crystals. Through further research, hopefully scientists can discover why these clouds are forming outside the polar skies.

https://www.sciencenewsforstudents.org/article/night-glowing-clouds-crept-south-summer



Missing Child's Dead Body Found[edit]

August 1

    In a remote area of Northwestern Montana, a body was found. From an autopsy, it's confirmed that this body belonged to 2-year-old Aiden Salcido of Medford, Oregon. Aiden's story is an interesting one. His parents had already a tragic died earlier on July 24th. It was ruled a murder-suicide. His mother died of a gunshot wound to her head while the father died of a self-inflicted gunshot wound. Aiden was not with them in their vehicle at this time and thus, he was declared missing. After witnesses called in tips when they reportedly saw the vehicle, searchers had finally found Aiden in the West Fisher Creek area. This family was no ordinary well off family as relatives said the family was homeless and would camp in Medford. In addition, the parents were convicted of charges from an earlier burglary in 2018. Warrants were issued against them when the mother failed to show up for her sentences. 

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Mexico City Gunmen shot[edit]

July 31

    In Mexico City, two gunmen have been shot to death by the security of the Nayarit state governor’s wife during her time in the stay of neighboring western state, Jalisco. The Nayarit state government said that María Luisa Aguirre de Echevarría was at a restaurant in a shopping center outside Guadalajara when attackers entered and began shooting at another customer. The government says the supposed target had no relation to the first lady. Her bodyguards had to fire at the gunmen. This killed them both. Aguirre, however, was unharmed. Local media reported that her two children were with her.

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****Like the first article, a lot of this article was taken from the original piece; not only phrases, but I've noticed that you change some connecting words so the text is only just not a complete replica of the original article. I think if you look at some different piece, subjects that are not so direct in the reporting and presentation of the information; this gives you a lot more wiggle room and an ability to give us your understanding of the facts given. Below are some websites to look for. I also recommend finding articles that appeal to your interest, whether that be the arts, science, history, etc. ***

https://www.scientificamerican.com/ https://www.knowablemagazine.org/ https://www.sciencedaily.com/ https://www.zdnet.com/

China's Huawei and Cananda[edit]

July 30

    Canada has decided to wait until after this fall’s federal election to see whether Chinese tech, Huawei, can provide equipment for the country’s next-generation 5G wireless network. Ralph Goodale says Canada requires more information from the United States about the potential security threat by the state-owned company. The election is Oct. 21. Canada and its Five Eyes intelligence allies had a meeting discussing whether to let Huawei supply the equipment for the 5G system. This is a conflicting issue as The United States and Australia have already banned Huawei. Their reasons being that they are concerned it is an organ of Chinese military intelligence. The issue is even more pressing as Canada and China are in a political dispute. China imprisoned two Canadians and this is being seen as retaliation for the Royal Canadian Mounted Police’s decision to arrest Huawei senior executive Meng Wanzhou on a U.S. extradition warrant.

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== China's Huawei and Cananda ==***

    Watch spelling. I added "Still Disputing" to better represent the topic in the article. Without it, it is a broad headline. 

China's Huawei and Canada Still Disputing Canada has decided to wait until after this fall’s federal election to see whether Chinese tech, Huawei, can provide equipment for the country’s next-generation 5G wireless network.***

Ralph Goodale says Canada requires more information from the United States about the potential security threat by the state-owned company.***

The election is Oct. 21.***

    Let's omit this small sentence to get down to our 6 sentence structure. If you did want to keep it you can easily combine it with the first sentence. 


Canada and its Five Eyes intelligence allies had a meeting discussing whether to let Huawei supply the equipment for the 5G system.***
This is a conflicting issue as The United States and Australia have already banned Huawei.***
Their reasons being that they are concerned it is an organ of Chinese military intelligence.***

    Let's combine the two sentences above into one. 

The issue is even more pressing as Canada and China are in a political dispute.*** China imprisoned two Canadians and this is being seen as retaliation for the Royal Canadian Mounted Police’s decision to arrest Huawei senior executive Meng Wanzhou on a U.S. extradition warrant.***

    Hey there! Sorry about this article. I just realized that I must have not finished it or saved the final product properly! The original article has now expired so, I am going to leave it for now. My main notes are for you to watch how many sentences you are using and make the most of each sentence. A few of your sentences can be combined and cut back a bit to better summarize the new story. 

Edited by Kira Carson

Pakistani military plane crashed[edit]

July 29

    A small Pakistani military plane crashed into a residential area near the garrison city of Rawalpindi before dawn. It killed at least 12 people, including two pilots. The military said five soldiers were among those killed in the plane crash as well. Rescue officials say the number of people who die could continue to rise as there are more injured and in critical condition. The military gave no details about the cause of the crash and only said an army aviation aircraft was on a routine training flight when the plane went down in the village of Mora Kalu on outskirts of Rawalpindi. About 20 people were injured in the plane crash. A rescue operation is still ongoing. An AP reporter at the scene of the crash saw a burning house and some makeshift homes. It is said that the plane suddenly lost control with the tower and the reason for the incident is unknown.

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Brooklyn Shooting[edit]

July 28

    A popular community festival was coming to a close when a gunfire shot in a Brooklyn neighborhood. One man died, another person is in critical condition and 10 others were wounded. Thousands of people were gathering to take part in the annual Old Timers Event, which featured musical performances from former residents and current local talent. The crowd at the festival was just leaving when gunshots rang out from a playground area in the park where it was taking place. Twelve people were hit — seven men and five women between the ages of 21 and 55. A 38-year-old man died from a bullet wound to the head. Police believe there were 2 shooters. One gun was recovered. gang activity was a possible motive. The Brooklyn neighborhood continues to struggle with gun violence, even as New York streets become safer than they have been in decades. Activists spoke out on the need for more resources to go toward community groups and anti-violence programs, as well as efforts to illegalize guns.

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Voice of Minnie Mouse Dies[edit]

July 27

    Russi Taylor, the actress who gave her voice to Minnie Mouse for over three decades, has died. Taylor died Friday in Glendale, California. She was 75. The cause was unclear. Taylor was actually married to the man who voiced Mickey Mouse alongside her, Wayne Allwine, from 1991 until his death in 2009. Taylor had become the official voice of Minnie in 1986 despite there being more than 200 competitors who auditioned. She voiced Minnie across Disney projects in film, television and theme parks, including the movie “Who Framed Roger Rabbit?” and the TV show “Mickey Mouse Clubhouse.” For more than 30 years, Minnie and Russi worked together to entertain millions around the world — a partnership that made Minnie a global icon and Russi a Disney Legend.

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Homocide in Bowie[edit]

July 26

    In a park in the city of Bowie, a man was found brutally murdered. He was found with stab wounds in Alley Pond Park. Alley Pond Park is the major multi-purpose recreation facility in Bowie. The park’s softball and lacrosse fields were closed for investigation. The skate park and basketball courts as well. The man was found between the basketball courts and the Mitchellville Road entrance to the park. The community was considered generally safe and no danger or risk had existed. So, this attack could not have been random.

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Dangerous Man Shoots at His Family and Others[edit]

July 25

    In Los Angeles’ San Fernando Valley, a man, by the name of Gerry Dean Zaragoza, fatally shot his father, brother and two other people during a 12-hour rampage. He escaped an intense manhunt until officers finally found him and arrested him soon after he gunned down a city bus passenger. The police say they do not know what his motivation was for the attacks. Police Captain William Hayes says, “It is obviously an individual that went on a violent spree. We knew he was a danger to the community.” Zaragoza killed his father and brother and wounded his mother at an apartment complex in the Canoga Park area. He is also a suspect for the shooting of two people at a gas station in North Hollywood, killing a woman and wounding a man to an extreme degree. Moreover, he has been linked to an attempted robbery outside a bank as well. However, that victim was not hurt and nothing was taken. Hours later, Zaragoza shot and killed a stranger on a bus in Van Nuys before being arrested with a small amount of force in Canoga Park. during the arrest, Police retrieved a firearm from him.

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Oregan Passes New Assisted Suicide Law[edit]

July 24

    Oregan's legislation is signing a law allowing certain terminally ill patients to have quicker access to life-ending medications under the state’s first-in-the-nation assisted suicide law. The law lets those with 15 days left to live to bypass a 15-day waiting period required under the Death with Dignity Act. Many agree this will provide relief to gravely ill people. However, some opponents argue that the law removes important safety measures that ensure people are confident in their decision to end their own life. Usually, before this new law, those seeking life-ending medications had to make a verbal request for physician-assisted suicide, wait 15 days and then make a written request. They then had to wait an additional 48 hours before receiving the prescription. With the new law, doctors can make exceptions to the waiting periods if the patient is likely to die before completing them. The number of people who have taken advantage of Oregon’s law has been relatively small.  After the U.S. Supreme Court upheld Oregon’s law in 2006, eight states have since approved physician-assisted suicide. Maine and New Jersey’s laws are set to take effect later this year as well.

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LA Man Carrying Knife Shot[edit]

July 23

    In Los Angelos, authorities say a man with a knife has been shot and wounded outside a federal courthouse downtown. Los Angeles police say a courthouse security officer wounded the man. The man was carrying the weapon in front of the court on First Street and was shot in the hand. However, he is expected to survive. No one else was injured. Details of the confrontation weren’t immediately released as the case most likely dealt with confidential information. The FBI will need to further investigate the shooting since it occurred on federal property.

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Barking Dogs Save Man[edit]

July 22

    Barking dogs helped attract attention to bring help to a man who was stuck in the mud near the Potomac River in Montgomery County. The man got stuck out of view in a wooded area near the Brookmont Dam, about 50 yards from the C&O Canal towpath. He was gathering sticks for his two dogs to fetch when he got stuck in mud up to a little above his knees. he made efforts to free himself, which only seemed to make matters worse for him. However, he said, the dogs went to the towpath, and their barking alerted a cyclist who then heard the man’s calls for help and contacted authorities. With the dogs' help, the man was freed and determined to be uninjured.

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Many Hawaiians Protest Construction of Telescope[edit]

July 21

    Hundreds of opponents of a planned telescope on Hawaii’s highest peak have gathered for a protest march. The activists opposed to the Thirty Meter Telescope and started marching Sunday morning in Waikiki. Hundreds of protesters last week blocked a road to stop construction of the telescope on Mauna Kea. Not only would the construction have cost $1.4 billion, but many Native Hawaiians consider Mauna Kea to be sacred. on the other hand, Astronomers wanted to build the telescope in hopes that the telescope will help them study the earliest moments of the universe after the Big Bang. Democratic Gov. David Ige has said National Guard units would be used to transport personnel and equipment as well as to enforce road closures on the Big Island. With about 800 to 1,200 activists gathered there Friday, Ige said no more troops would be called in.

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White Man Verbally Attacks Pregnant Black Lawmaker[edit]

July 20

    A white man has admitted cursing at a pregnant black Georgia lawmaker for taking too many items into a supermarket express lane. Yet, he denies telling her, “go back where you came from.” Along with the denial, he adds, “I am Cuban.” Erica Thomas, the black woman, confronted Eric Sparkes, the white man, in front of reporters and said he had “degraded and berated” her. In a Facebook video posted Friday, Thomas said she was in the express line because she is nine months pregnant and cannot stand for long. Thomas’ video went viral as the hashtag #IStandwithErica trended on Twitter. On Saturday, Sparkes told reporters he called her a vulgarity but did not say anything racial. Thomas claims Sparkes was just trying to make himself look better. Sparkes said he’s a Democrat and was being unjustly attacked for political purposes. However, Thomas said that she never identified herself to Sparkes as a public official. She said she was so taken aback by his actions that she didn’t think to try to record them. The incident occurred just days after President Donald Trump tweeted that four congresswomen of color should go back to the “broken and crime-infested” countries they came from. In her video, Thomas referenced those attacks and accused the president of spreading hate. During a television interview, she said Sparkes “needs to be held accountable because people can’t just go out and berate pregnant women."

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Wisconsin Fires cause more than 11,000 power outages[edit]

July 19

    Thousands of people in Wisconsin lose power after fires in Madison. There were fires at two transmission substations in Wisconsin’s capital. They knocked out power to more than 11,000 customers on an incredibly hot day. Government buildings, courtrooms, and businesses were forced to shut down. The police were prompted to call in additional staff. An explosion and fire at the Madison Gas and Electric main power center sent thick, black smoke over Madison’s east side about 7:40 a.m. Friday. A second fire at a substation near the University of Wisconsin-Madison brought about an evacuation of Ogg and Smith residence halls and the UW Safety Building. Gov. Tony Evers declared a state of emergency in Madison and surrounding Dane County. The state of emergency allows the activation of the National Guard and directs state agencies to provide assistance. The State Capitol along with the City-County building, both closed. The Wisconsin Department of Health Services sent employees home and directed the public to leave the building because of a lack of electricity. All state court system offices in downtown Madison also closed because of the outage. Fortunately, there were no reports of injuries.

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2 horses killed at Del Mar[edit]

July 18

    Two horses were killed in a freak collision at Del Mar during training on the second day of its season. The accident occurred Thursday morning when the first horse, Charge A Bunch threw rider Geovanni Franco, turned sharply and collided with the second horse, Carson Valley. Charge A Bunch was trained by Carla Gaines and Carson Valley was trained by Bob Baffert. Carson Valley’s rider, Assael Espinoza, was taken to a hospital for evaluation, while Charge A  Bunch's rider, Geovanni Franco was not injured. Franco was able to ride as scheduled in the day’s first race. It was a freak accident beyond anyone’s control and that both horses were killed on impact. The Del Mar deaths follow 30 horse fatalities at the recently completed Santa Anita meet. Those deaths led to more awareness and implications of new procedures intended to increase safety. PETA requested that Del Mar and all other California racetracks release records of horses that have gotten loose on the tracks and urged the California Horse Racing Board to investigate in order to eliminate the dangers of training.

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6-year-old girl killed by father’s golf shot[edit]

July 17

   While out golfing at Sleepy Ridge Golf Course in Orem about 40 miles south of Salt Lake City, police say a golfball struck 6-year old Aria Hill in the back of the head on Monday morning. According to her uncle, David Smith, it was “A complete, fluke accident — you couldn’t repeat it if you tried. She just happened to be in the exact wrong place, just directly across from him, when it happened.” The ball hit the base of her neck. Lt. Trent Colledge of the Orem Police Department says she was immediately flown to a hospital in Salt Lake City in critical condition and later died from her injuries. Relatives say that Aria, who died after her father accidentally struck her with a golf ball, was a loving, playful child. Smith described her as a happy child who greeted strangers and enjoyed spending time with her parents. Steven Marett, the head golf professional at the course, told the Deseret News that he has seen people occasionally get hit by balls, but he had never heard of any getting seriously injured or killed. Police are not planning to pursue charges as it was just a tragic accident. Hill’s family has planned her funeral services for July 20 at a Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-day Saints meetinghouse near Eagle Mountain in northern Utah.

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Small Plane Lands on Maryland Beach[edit]

July 16

     On July 16, 2019 in OceanCity, M.d., a small plane had to make an emergency landing at around 6:19 p.m. The department says the plane went down in shallow ocean waters near 21st Street. They also informed that the single person onboard the aircraft was evaluated by paramedics and released. Police spokeswoman Ashley Miller says the Maryland State Police will need to investigate the incident further.

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Fire in Mexican Nature Reserve[edit]

July 15

    A fire in the Sian Ka’an nature reserve on Mexico’s Yucatan Peninsula spread to more than 6,000 acres on Monday. Only 30% of the damage is under control. The fire was located about 19 miles south of the popular beach town Tulum.
    The fire slowly burned across the brush and high grass. The ruin site of Muyil, an once important stop along Mayan trade routes. The fire has caused droughts and heat waves. More than 50 firefighters and a water-dropping Air Force helicopter are working to control the flames. 
    The Sian Ka’an reserve is on Mexico’s Caribbean coast. It is a UNESCO World Heritage site and an important tourist destination. It has many ecosystems such as jungles, wetlands, coral reefs, and Mayan archaeological sites.

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Hurricane Barry[edit]

July 14

    Hurricane Barry swept through the Gulf Coast States. It spared New Orleans from a direct hit, but inspires fears with flooding, tornado risk, and power outages. Barry’s rain bands caused flooding and tornado threats that ranges from central Louisiana to eastern Mississippi and beyond. Many parishes or counties in both states have received multiple flash flood warnings. Luckily, there have been no serious damage or injuries reported.The U.S. National Hurricane Center said Sunday parts of south-central Louisiana could still have rainfall totals of up to 12 inches, with isolated pockets of 15 inches. In Mississippi, forecasters said 8 inches of rain had fallen in parts of Jasper and Jones counties and there could be even more. Water flowed everywhere and made a creek out of the highways and streets.The storm had briefly become a Category 1 hurricane with maximum winds fall to 35 mph. About 75,000 residents in Louisiana, 4,000 residents in Mississippi and another 1,800 residents in Arkansas were without power.  

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NYC Power Outage[edit]

July 13

    There was a widespread power outage in the heart of Manhattan. It shut down some of the city’s iconic subways including Times Square and Rockefeller Center. They just went dark. Con Edison said it was working to restore power to 73,000 customers, mostly on the west side of Manhattan. They tweeted that power was being restored to affected customers and they expected to have it restored by midnight. The New York City Council speaker, Corey Johnson, said that there was a major disturbance at Con Edison’s 49th Street substation. The power outage resulted in pizza shops selling lukewarm slices in the dark with flashlights and only being able to accept cash only. Many hotel guest were using candlelights and glow sticks. The New York Fire Department said that the loss of power was from Fifth Avenue to the Hudson River, and from 72nd Street to the West 40s.

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California Oil Spill[edit]

July 12

    Crews in California are beginning to clean up a massive oil spill that dumped nearly 800,000 gallons of oil and water into a Kern County canyon. California officials said the spill is not near waterways and has not affected wildlife too much. Chevron, the oil industry, reported that 794,000 gallons of oil and water have leaked out of the ground where it uses steam injection to extract oil in the large Cymric Oil Field about 35 miles west of Bakersfield. The steam softens the thick crude so it can flow more readily.  Environmental groups believe that the Chevron spill is sign of weak regulations under a Californian agency. Gov. Gavin Newsom fired the head of the state’s oil and gas division because of a recent increase in hydraulic fracturing permits. Chevron hired contractors to clean up the spill and take responsibility over all expenses.

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Coastguards Find Tons of Drugs in Ships Off the Pacific[edit]

July 11

    The U.S. Coast Guard seized tons of cocaine and marijuana from boats and submarines in the Pacific Ocean. Vice President Mike Pence was there as 39,000 pounds of cocaine and 933 pounds of marijuana were found taken off the cutter Munro at Naval Air Station North Island in Coronado. They estimated the drugs to have a street value of around $569 million. The drugs were seized in 14 operations since May in international waters off Mexico and Central and South America and 55 smuggling suspects were taken into custody.

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Man Eaten by Dogs[edit]

July 10

    Freddie Mack, a missing man, had been discovered being eaten by his 18 dogs in his home near Venus, Tex. This was no doubt a shock to the investigators as they had never heard of pets consuming an entire person before. According to medical examiners and the sheriff, It’s not clear whether the dogs killed the 57-year-old or ate him after he died of his “serious medical conditions”. 
    This case first came into attention by the sheriff when close relatives of Mack had not heard from him and eventually declared him missing after a few weeks. On May 15, they made their first great discovery when a deputy found a small piece of bone during a property search. More bone parts followed. With the dogs seized and out of the way, authorities discovered dog feces with hair, more bone and fabric that matched the only outfit Mack was known to wear. Soon, deputies found one of Mack’s two pairs of shoes in the area where the dogs had been penned. Mack’s case stands out for the thoroughness in how his dogs ate him. Only 3 of his dogs remain and according to the sheriff, “are friendly”. The others were killed for their aggression.

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Washington Flood[edit]

July 9

    A month’s worth of rain flooded into Washington. Streets turned into rivers. The rainfall overpowered the capital’s storm-water system, which was built almost a century ago and could not handle the amount of water that flooded in. Upgrades, that are very expensive, are clearly needed. 
    Even though we can’t claim the storm is directly the cause of climate change without more analysis, it fits a general pattern. Warm air can hold more moisture, which calls for heavier rainstorms.
    The main challenge for overcoming future flooding is funding. Mr. Morris said D.C. Water expected to spend $60 million over 10 years to improve storm-water pumping stations alone, as well as much higher costs for other climate-related projects. 

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Toxic Algae Blooms Close Mississippi Beaches[edit]

July 8

    Heavy rains in the Mississippi continue to cause damage. This time, they caused the blooming of toxic algae, forcing many beaches to close. More freshwater are flowing into the Gulf of Mexico,  feeding the thick blue-green algae. The algae is dangerous as it can cause rashes, stomach cramps, nausea, diarrhea and vomiting in people and animals. It is also harmful to the state’s oyster beds, and have killed most of them. It could take years to recover those oysters. Many tourists come down to the beaches for the independence day weekend and are being disappointed. Usually this weekend would be lucrative with tourism earnings, but when the beaches close, the tourists go. The algae bloom has been detected along the Mississippi coast by at least 20 beach-monitoring stations. It forms when salty water is flooded with freshwater carrying nutrients, such as nitrogen and phosphorus, and appears as foam on the surface of water. The result is a thick, soupy, clogged coastline full of algae. High water temperatures and other factors also impact the algae growth. The growth of these dangerous algae blooms really take a toll on the Mississippi environment and mood.

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There are Survivors of the Little Ice Age[edit]

July 7

    There was a Little Ice Age from around 1550-1850. Since 1850, plants lay frozen under a 100-foot-thick slab of ice. A biologist named, Catherine La Farge went to Teardrop’s melting edge and found a tuft of the species, Aulacomnium turgidum finally free from its icy jail. The moss was torn, but still had possible signs of life. The thawing of ice caps from the little ice age and permafrost are starting to reveal incredible evidence of biological resilience. Researchers are discovering organisms, frozen and thought dead, that can actually still have life. These "ice age zombies" range from simple bacteria to even multicellular animals. Their endurance are making scientists rethink what it means to survive. Catharine La Farge brought dozens of these samples back to Edmonton, and took care of them by providing them nutrients in a bright, warm laboratory. Almost a third of the samples grew new shoots and leaves. These mosses definitely proved themselves as strong survivors. The regrowth of centuries-old mosses shows us that glaciers and permafrost don't always have to be graveyards for multicellular life, but they could actually be helpful for organisms to withstand ice ages. After being encased in layers of ice from a little ice age, moss and other organisms can find themselves in a new geologic era as they proved to be strong enough to withstand extreme conditions.

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World's Largest Bee Found Not Extinct[edit]

July 6

    The world's largest bee was just re-discovered by a wildlife photographer in Indonesia. It is a giant wasp-like insect with the face of a stag beetle. The insect was thought to be extinct for decades as it had not been spotted since 1981. The insect is known as Wallace’s giant bee, named after Alfred Russel Wallace, a British naturalist. He discovered the insect in 1858. The bee is four times larger than the European honeybee and has a two and half inch wing span. The photographer that re-discovered this insect is Clay Bolt. He wishes to keep the location of the insect a secret so it is not in danger by poachers. Bolt found the bee inside a termite nest about two meters off the ground inside a tree. The bee lives in termite nests by coating the inside of termite mounds to protect from the termites. Bolt and a companion went in search to find these termite nests. One day, he finally came across one with a perfectly round hole penetrated on the top. When Bolt climbed up and looked in, he discovered the giant bee and captured the rare insect in high definition.

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Unfair Treatment of a Woman in Indonesia[edit]

July 5

    Nuril Maknun, 41, was a school bookkeeper in Indonesia. She recorded her boss’s crude phone call as proof that she was being harassed. Her boss goes by the single name Muslim. He was the principal at Senior High School Seven in Mataram, Lombok’s largest city. Maknun recorded him using lewd language and persecuting her to have an affair with him. Instead of being punished for the clear harassment, Muslim has been promoted repeatedly. On the other hand, Maknun was found guilty by a three-judge panel and imposed a sentence of 6 months and a fine of about $35,000. This is a huge amount for her family. The situation is even more grave as if she does not pay the fine, she must serve an additional three months. The problems for Maknun, who is a mother of three, started in 2013 when Muslim took over as principal of the high school where she worked. He spread rumors about maknun and made very vulgar remarks. This harassment got to the point where Maknun felt the need to disprove his rumors and recorded one of his calls. After hearing about the recording, Muslim filed a police complaint against Maknun for criminal defamation. In a police investigation, she was arrested and jailed for a month. Even thought the prosecutors eventually rejected the defamation complaint, they charged her with distributing obscene material. An online fund-raising campaign had raised more than $26,000 by midday on Friday to help pay her fine. Maknun said she was proud to fight for her “dignity as a woman”. However, she does question why she was punished when it was muslim making the sexual comments. This case highlights a common issue in the workplace in Indonesia - harassment.

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The Recent Ridgecrest Earthquake[edit]

July 4

    On the morning of Thursday, July 4, 2019, California experienced its biggest scare in years when a 6.4 magnitude Earthquake struck a remote region in Southern California. It had been almost five years since the state experienced an earthquake of magnitude 6 or stronger. The epicenter of the earthquake was pinpointed near Ridgecrest, a relatively remote area about 150 miles northeast of Los Angeles. Ridgecrest is a city of about 28,000. The area residents had declared a state of emergency and expect aftershocks. This earthquake had caused lots of chaos and disturbed celebrations of Independence day. 
    The disturbance was a "strike-slip" quake where two sides of a fault slide past each other, creating horizontal movement. This earthquake was shallow and just 8.7 kilometers (5.4 miles). The earthquake caused a 12-inch crack in Highway 178 and caused lots of damage to many resident homes, restaurant, and more. As of now, there have been no deaths recorded, however, there were multiple injuries. Many scenes of destruction were posted on social media. People observed swinging lamps, broken glass, sloshing pools, etc.

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National Fried Clam Day[edit]

July 3

   On July 3rd, 1916, the first fried clam was made in the town of Essex, Massachusetts by Lawrence Henry “Chubby” Woodman and his wife Bessie. This idea was brought about, at first, as a joke by a local fisherman named, Tarr. Chubby and Bessie had a concession stand and business was really slow. Tarr playfully suggested to fry their clams and business would boom if the clams were any good. Other customers protested, of course, with complaints about how clams have shells. Chubby and Bessie, however, decided to think about it and try it out. They shucked some clams and experimented with different batters in hopes in creating a delicious result. In the end, they believed the clams they made were delicious and things went up from there. The Yankee appetite changed ever since fried clams were first introduced the next day. Fried clams were advertised by the Boston Market as the newest tasty treats. It was truly an important day for Chubby and Bessie. Now, six generations later, clams are still frying at Woodman’s, where it all began. This National holiday was submitted in 2015 and is now observed annually every July 3rd.

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