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——- Is It Really Human Error?——-
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  As we all know, United States has recently declared war with Iran due the goal of eliminating the world’s top terrorist. However, the aggression between the two countries has involved other nations: one Ukrainian International Airlines plane has got crashed shortly after the Iran fires a missile at U.S. force. The tension has escalated between the two nations and caused the deaths of 176 innocent passengers’ lives. In response to the airplane crash, Iranian president Hassan Rouhani states that “it was a human error at this time of crisis caused by U.S. adventurism,” this demonstrates a vibe of intimidation and aggression of the United States regimes. As events like this will slowly accumulate, eventually the battle between Iran and United States will involved all the nations; no one can escape such fate.
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Source: https://www.euronews.com/amp/2020/01/11/iran-says-it-unintentionally-shot-down-ukrainian-jetliner
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----- Ice isn't slippery-----
 
----- Ice isn't slippery-----
 
   The matter "ice" is not slippery, the reason why the nature of ice (Slippery) is because a film of water generated by friction. But we know little about this liquid film, its properties and thickness, we don't know much about it except the fact it causes ice to be slippery. Researchers formed into small teams to solve the mystery using a device that can precisely measure the forces during ice gliding; ever though, its size limit the area it can measure, few centimeters is enough to measure an analysis and conclusion of properties of friction. From the experiment, scientists derived the friction indeed generated from the film liquid. This liquid does not only consist of water, but also oil with complex properties, this suggested the surface ice does not transform into water ( even though it suppose to) end up as a mixture. This will us understand the properties of melted ice, ice gliding and solutions to solve skidding on icy road.   
 
   The matter "ice" is not slippery, the reason why the nature of ice (Slippery) is because a film of water generated by friction. But we know little about this liquid film, its properties and thickness, we don't know much about it except the fact it causes ice to be slippery. Researchers formed into small teams to solve the mystery using a device that can precisely measure the forces during ice gliding; ever though, its size limit the area it can measure, few centimeters is enough to measure an analysis and conclusion of properties of friction. From the experiment, scientists derived the friction indeed generated from the film liquid. This liquid does not only consist of water, but also oil with complex properties, this suggested the surface ice does not transform into water ( even though it suppose to) end up as a mixture. This will us understand the properties of melted ice, ice gliding and solutions to solve skidding on icy road.   

Revision as of 19:34, 11 January 2020

Liang Lin's Article: ——- Is It Really Human Error?——-

 As we all know, United States has recently declared war with Iran due the goal of eliminating the world’s top terrorist. However, the aggression between the two countries has involved other nations: one Ukrainian International Airlines plane has got crashed shortly after the Iran fires a missile at U.S. force. The tension has escalated between the two nations and caused the deaths of 176 innocent passengers’ lives. In response to the airplane crash, Iranian president Hassan Rouhani states that “it was a human error at this time of crisis caused by U.S. adventurism,” this demonstrates a vibe of intimidation and aggression of the United States regimes. As events like this will slowly accumulate, eventually the battle between Iran and United States will involved all the nations; no one can escape such fate.

Source: https://www.euronews.com/amp/2020/01/11/iran-says-it-unintentionally-shot-down-ukrainian-jetliner


Ice isn't slippery-----
 The matter "ice" is not slippery, the reason why the nature of ice (Slippery) is because a film of water generated by friction. But we know little about this liquid film, its properties and thickness, we don't know much about it except the fact it causes ice to be slippery. Researchers formed into small teams to solve the mystery using a device that can precisely measure the forces during ice gliding; ever though, its size limit the area it can measure, few centimeters is enough to measure an analysis and conclusion of properties of friction. From the experiment, scientists derived the friction indeed generated from the film liquid. This liquid does not only consist of water, but also oil with complex properties, this suggested the surface ice does not transform into water ( even though it suppose to) end up as a mixture. This will us understand the properties of melted ice, ice gliding and solutions to solve skidding on icy road.  

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/11/191105104416.htm


***The Mystery Behind 'Slippery' Ice*** - Your title is too direct; we want something to grab our attention, not just a simple statement.

*** The slipperiness of ice doesn't come from the matter itself, but from a film of water generated by friction.*** - The parenthetical elements in this sentence are not complete; it's like you have two starts to the sentence.

*** We know very little about this liquid film, besides its basic properties and thickness, which causes ice to be slippery.***

- "Very" and "besides" gives direction to your sentence. Do not start the sentence with a conjunction-- this makes the sentence seem incomplete. 

***Researchers use a device that can precisely measure the influence of friction on ice, through measurement, analysis and an understanding of the properties of friction.*** - Some phrasing in this sentence is too closely connected to the original text; when you do this, your writing can sound false and mismatched. Instead, map out the sentence and use your own terms and ideas to support the sentence.

'***From this experiment, scientists confirmed that the liquid film is indeed generated by friction. *** - Use "this" to show directness, instead of "the" which is generalized. I also switched "liquid film" and "friction" for clarity.

***This liquid does not solely consist of water; oils with complex properties were also present, which suggests that surface ice does not melt to pure water, but instead ends up as a mixture of substances. *** - Your sentence has good points but it is a run on sentence. Utalize semi-colons and conjunctions to help the sentence flow without making the reader out of breath.

***These discoveries help us understand the properties of melted ice, and can help us find solutions to gliding and icy roads.*** - "This" is a bit too general. "These" is more direct, especially for a conclusion. "Skiddy" is also too colloquial.

EDITED VERSION The Mystery Behind 'Slippery' Ice The slipperiness of ice doesn't come from the matter itself, but from a film of water generated by friction. We know very little about this liquid film, besides its basic properties and thickness, which causes ice to be slippery. Researchers use a device that can precisely measure the influence of friction on ice, through measurement, analysis and an understanding of the properties of friction. From this experiment, scientists confirmed that the liquid film is indeed generated by friction. This liquid does not solely consist of water; oils with complex properties were also present, which suggests that surface ice does not melt to pure water, but instead ends up as a mixture of substances. These discoveries help us understand the properties of melted ice, and can help us find solutions to gliding and icy roads. https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/11/191105104416.htm




White Noise-----
 We often think the noise we hear from one place is just the same exact voice we hear from any other place. However, there're some differences and distinctions scientists had made about different kinds of noises. "White noise," a noise that's beneficial to us, this noise contributes to the hearing of pure sounds becoming more precise, it may apply to other further development of cochlear implants. Our brain subtle different environments, so we can recognize the tone of noise and recognize it easier with white noise in the background. As the data showed, the white noise inhibited the activity of the nerve cells and more of these neutrons overlap creating a more distinct tone, which increases the precision of the noise. Understanding these matters help us reach the truth one step closer. 

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/11/191107093927.htm

*** The Wonders of White Noise ***

- Your two-word titles are too brief/non-descriptive. The title must grab in the reader, not simply state what the article will be about.

*** We often think of noise sounding the same no matter where it goes.*** - Your intro was very confusing. It was difficult to determine the point you were trying to make. Try reading the sentence aloud to see if it sounds clear.

*** However, scientists have noted the distinctions between different kinds of noises.*** Your use of "there" is incorrect. You must break the contraction. Sometimes, contractions can make the writing too colloquial.

*** 'White noise', for example, is beneficial to humans and allows us to hear sound more precisely. For this reason, white noise may be used in the further development of cochlear implants.***

- Quotes, not quotations. 'White noise' is not dialogue (spoken by someone). The sentence needs to be set up to unfold what you are trying to say. Using 'for example' helps rev the sentence. I also split the sentences for cohesion.

***Our brain takes note of the subtle differences in our environment, so we can recognize the tone of noise incorporated with white noise.*** - The first part of your sentence is missing the very necessary verb. I included "takes note of" to provide that action. The phrasing of the last part of the sentence was very confusing. Are you saying white noise helps us discern other noises? Your facts need to be clearer.

*** Data shows that white noise inhibited the activity of nerve cells, and overlapping nerve cells help create a more precise sound. *** - Pretty good sentence. You can incorporate where the data comes from. Also, data would be current so it should be in present tense.

***Understanding the functions of white noise helps us learn the truth behind sound.*** - Your conclusion is a bit vague. Try bringing things full circle. Also your source takes us to an article about carbon dioxide; we need the proper source!

EDITED VERSION The Wonders of White Noise We often think of noise sounding the same no matter where it goes. However, scientists have noted the distinctions between different kinds of noises. 'White noise', for example, is beneficial to humans and allows us to hear sound more precisely. For this reason, white noise may be used in the further development of cochlear implants. Our brain takes note of the subtle differences in our environment, so we can recognize the tone of noise incorporated with white noise. Data shows that white noise inhibited the activity of nerve cells, and overlapping nerve cells help create a more precise sound. Understanding the functions of white noise helps us learn the truth behind sound. https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/11/191107093927.htm


——- Myth Buster ———

 Majority of the population though house plants would purify the household air. But it only contribute a little to the purifying of toxic gas and substances in the air. As a study shown, a sample of 196 plants were used to conduct experiment to find how these plants subjecting in an environment filled with a toxic matter “ volatile organic compounds” to see which plant is best for absorbing the molecules. The experiment shows that a normal household ivy can absorb 2/3 of the toxic molecules in their environment, which greatly purify the air and the toxic matters, which are harmful to human. Learning these facts help you better understand and chose the plants that are best for your family’s’ health.

Source: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/science/2019/11/houseplants-dont-purify-indoor-air/

***Myth-Busting the Helpful Houseplant***

- You don't really bring up myth-busting in the piece, so it can not stant alone as a title.


*** A majority of the population believe that house plants can efficiently purify the air in their homes.***

The article needs to start the sentence, to modify "majority of the population". "Believe" and "can efficiently" helps boost the sentence through word choice and description. 

***However, it was discovered that houseplants don't contribute much to the purfication of toxic gases and other insidious substances from the air.***

- Try not to start your sentence with a conjunction, which should only be used to tie together two clauses. "Discovered" adds direction to the piece: we know the hypothesis is disproven and that we are about to find out how. "Contribute a little" doesn't need the article ("little" does not need to be modified). I changed "purifying" to a noun and the accompaning "in the air" to "from" to create an image of the action.

*** A study completed by environmental engineer Michael Waring sampled 196 plants to find out how these plants react to an environment filled with toxic matter.*** - Good sentence. For clarification, include where the study comes from. Also split the sentence, as it becomes a run on.

*** This test demonstated which plants are best for absorbing molecules; for example, normal household ivy can absorb 2/3 of the toxic molecules in their environment, great purifying the air around them.***

-Another good sentence. Following from the previous sentence, the semi-colon helps move the sentence along so it does not become a run on. We can also provide an example/ proof of the finding with the semi-colon. Lastly, there is information in this sentence that the reader can already surmiss and is unnecessary. Like "harmful to humans" and "the toxic matter". We have established all this in the accompaning sentences.

***These facts can help a family understand what plants are best for their overall health and the surrounding environment.***

- Try not to begin the conclusion with a verb. We want a solid, sure-fire conclusion, and not hint at a possible continuation of the piece.

EDITED VERSION

Myth-Busting the Helpful Houseplant A majority of the population believe that house plants can efficiently purify the air in their homes. However, it was discovered that houseplants don't contribute much to the purfication of toxic gases and other insidious substances from the air. A study completed by environmental engineer Michael Waring sampled 196 plants to find out how these plants react to an environment filled with toxic matter. This test demonstated which plants are best for absorbing molecules; for example, normal household ivy can absorb 2/3 of the toxic molecules in their environment, great purifying the air around them. These facts can help a family understand what plants are best for their overall health and the surrounding environment.

https://www.nationalgeographic.com/science/2019/11/houseplants-dont-purify-indoor-air/



Needs to Evolve-----***
   -Sounds incomplete. Let's change by keeping the same meaning but, with different words. Possibly "Adapting to Environments" or "Adapting Animals" or "Food Storage in Animals";

Adapting Animals

Gathering foods for plants and animals is not easy thing, they are not human where people can get food from a grocery store or market place.***

   -Missing the word 'an' before 'easy'.
    -This sentence includes two independent clauses so, must use a semicolon instead of a comma.
    -The last half of sentence is difficult to read. Let's shorten and use more fluid language. Note how "they aren't like humans who can get their food from..." flows better than "they are not human where people can get food...";

Gathering foods for plants and animals is not an easy thing; they aren't like humans who can get their food from a grocery store.

Some of the animals can't gather enough food for them to survive, so they evolve some special body part or trait to allow them to still alive for a longer time.***
   -Change 'Some of the animals' to 'Some animals'. 'Some of the animals' makes it sound like we are referring to a certain group of animas when in fact, we are talking about the world's animals. 
    -Omit 'for them' in first part of sentence. It's not necessary for clarity.
     -Last half of sentence is too wordy and difficult to read, let's shorten: "so, they evolve a body part or trait to help them." 
    -Moving the comma to after 'so' allows a more natural break in the sentence. Notice how the new sentence below still conveys the same meaning but with less words;

Some animals can't gather enough food for them to survive so, they evolve a body part or trait to help them.

For example, hamster, pelican, pitch plant, honey ant, and black swallower, these wildlife evolve to adapt their environment or environmental changes.***
   -use 'the hamster'.
    -'these' is modifying the singular noun 'wildlife'. It should also be singular (this) but, sounds awkward where it is placed in the sentence so, let's omit it.
    -'to adapt' is missing a preposition. Change to 'to adapt to'. 
    -'adapt to their environment' and 'environmental changes' is basically the same thing so let's shorten by deleting 'environment'
    -Omit 'For example' and use it on your next sentence instead.

The hamster, pelican, pitch plant, honey ant, and black swallower evolve to adapt to their environmental changes.

Hamster store its food inside inside the huge cheek, so it has food to allow him to survive in long winter where foods are scarce.***

    -Make sure to proofread and watch spelling and typing errors. 'Hamster' must be plural and the other pronouns need to be plural as well (their, they).
    -Change 'the huge cheek' to 'it's huge cheek'.
    -"allow him to survive' is wordy and can be replaced by 'can survive'.
    -'in long winter' sounds to be missing something. Change to 'in long winter months';

For example, hamsters store their food inside their huge cheeks, so they can survive in long winter months when food is scarce.

All these animals trying evolve in a way that is easier for them to get more food and store food, so they wouldn't dead of starvation.***
   -read your sentences slowly after typing. You are often missing words or using the wrong tense.
    -Let's begin with "Many animals.." it sounds more 'global'. Omit 'trying' because evolution isn't always a conscious thing but an accidental thing that occurs and replace with 'are'. 'Evolve' must change to 'evolving' to be correct tense.
    -'that is easier' change to 'that makes it easier" to make it clearer.
    -'to get more food and store more food' is wordy and repetitious. Change to 'to store their food'.
    -tenses are all disagreeing in 'so they wouldn't dead of starvation' and 'so' has been used a lot so let's omit it and add a word to connect the two parts (therefore, however, furthermore, thus,) of the sentence: 'therefore, insuring they don't die of starvation';

Many animals are evolving in a way that makes it easier to store their food therefore, insuring they don't die of starvation.

We should not wast any food, the animals were starve to death because lack of food source, but its so much easier for a human being to get food, so wasting food is a shame to yourself.***
    -This isn't something that is expressed in the original article so, let's use a sentence that more accurately summarizes the article from National Geographic. Something like: "Studying these traits is helping us further understand animals and our changing environment.";

Studying these traits is helping us further understand animals and our changing environment.

Complete Paragraph:

Adapting Animals Gathering foods for plants and animals is not an easy thing; they aren't like humans who can get their food from a grocery store. Some animals can't gather enough food for them to survive so, they evolve a body part or trait to help them. The hamster, pelican, pitch plant, honey ant, and black swallower evolve to adapt to their environmental changes. For example, hamsters store their food inside their huge cheeks, so they can survive in long winter months when food is scarce. Many animals are evolving in a way that makes it easier to store their food therefore, insuring they don't die of starvation. Studying these traits is helping us further understand animals and our changing environment. Source: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/10/animals-carry-own-food-deep-sea-fish/

Edited by Kira Carson


***Food Collection and Evolution***

- Your title is vague and tells us nothing about what the article will be about.

***Plants and animals have a much harder time gathering food than humans-- it's not like they can go to a grocery store or market place!***

- Your sentence is incomplete, the dash gives the sentence structured. I see this pattern with your writing where your sentences are not complete; not a clear subject, verb and full thought. Don't cut up your sentence.

***Some organisms have evolved certain traits that all them to collect food and survive.***

- There is repetition of facts in this sentence, so I simplified it.

*** A few examples include hamsters, pelicans, the pitch plant and honey ant and the black swallower; each organism has adapted to their environment in order to thrive.***

- Another example of where your first parenthetical is not a complete thought. Think about the order of a sentence and what sounds correct when you speak the sentence aloud.

***Hamsters, for instance, store their food inside their huge cheeks, allowing them to survive long winters where food is scarce.***

-Edits here regarding tense. You are generalizing when talking about hamsters, so the tense must reflect that.

*** All these animals have had to evolve to find an easier way to store food, otherwise they would die of starvation.***

- Similar to above, edits for tense and clarity.

***The adaption of these animals shows us that, as humans, we can obtain food easily and we must be aware of what we eat and, more importantly, what we waste.***

- My main edit for this piece would be direction. Throughout the article, we think the focus is on animals adapting in order to survive, but the conclusion leaves us with the impression that the article's main focus is humans and our waste. The conclusion being so different from the text is confusing and leaves the article unresolved.

EDITED VERSION

  • Food Collection and Evolution

Plants and animals have a much harder time gathering food than humans-- it's not like they can go to a grocery store or market place! Some organisms have evolved certain traits that all them to collect food and survive. A few examples include hamsters, pelicans, the pitch plant and honey ant and the black swallower; each organism has adapted to their environment in order to thrive. Hamsters, for instance, store their food inside their huge cheeks, allowing them to survive long winters where food is scarce. All these animals have had to evolve to find an easier way to store food, otherwise they would die of starvation.The adaption of these animals shows us that, as humans, we can obtain food easily and we must be aware of what we eat and, more importantly, what we waste.

https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/10/animals-carry-own-food-deep-sea-fish/




Who to blame-----
  When your baby happened to be girl as you given a birth, the females are not responsible for such cause of why the baby isn't a boy. Men played a dominant role in having a son or daughter and this tendency to have more daughter or sons was inherited from their parents. This means when a man has more brothers/sisters, the more likely the sex of the baby will be male/female. In addition, female has only chromosome X, while male has chromosomes X and Y; in other word, a male baby (XY) or a female baby (XX) is depended by male's sperm cell and nothing related to female since they only have chromosome X.  As a result, males with more daughters will pass its trait (more daughters) down to the next generation and resulted in more females in the family, same matter enforced on the males. For example, war, after the war there is more male children because men who lost their sons in war who will more likely father daughter and father with more sons will more likely to father male children, which caused more sons in the society after the war. These studies and evidences had prove the innocence of the female, they should target male for having no sons. 

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2008/12/081211121835.htm

***Who's to Blame for our Chromosomes?*** - Your title is good, but too vague. It does not give us a clear idea of what the piece will be about.

*** A parent is not able to choose the sex of their baby at birth, but scientist are exploring the connection between fathers and gender.*** - Your sentence is all over the place! Very similar to the article below, your main point is lost in the muck; don't talk around an idea, follow it directly.

***Men play a dominant role in determining the sex of their children; often, if a man has more brothers than sisters, it is likely he will have more sons, or vise versa.*** - Some of your phrasing is taken directly from the original text, or follows it to closely. Use your own wording and descriptions. More often than not, this helps your writing become clearer.

***Additionally, women only have chromosome X while men have an X and Y chromosome, allowing their sperm cells to influence gender.*** - This was a hard sentence to straighten out but the single parenthetical helps separate thoughts. Too many can jumble the sentence.

***As a result, males will pass down this preference to the next generation. For example, there are normally more male children born after wars because those with more sons have passed down those genes. *** - There is still a dependance on the original text. Granted, this is a hard topic to understand. I tried to make the idea clear and simple.

***These studies prove that women can not determine the gender of their child, and fathers are more likely to influence gender. *** - Good final sentence, try not to send on an opinion or phrase your opinion more like a delivery of a discovery.

EDITED VERSION

  • "Who's to Blame for our Chromosomes?"

A parent is not able to choose the sex of their baby at birth, but scientist are exploring the connection between fathers and gender. Men play a dominant role in determining the sex of their children; often, if a man has more brothers than sisters, it is likely he will have more sons, or vise versa. Additionally, women only have chromosome X while men have an X and Y chromosome, allowing their sperm cells to influence gender. As a result, males will pass down this preference to the next generation. For example, there are normally more male children born after wars because those with more sons have passed down those genes. These studies prove that women can not determine the gender of their child, and fathers are more likely to influence gender. https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2008/12/081211121835.htm


Properties of Sleep-----
 Sleep is a major part of our daily routine, buy people tend to sleep less than average people or don't have chance to have an average sleep hours. However, some people are born with a talent or something we called gene mutation, which lessen the times one need to sleep a day. This gene mutation has some has trade-offs, even if drugs that have no significant side effects, it will have a social consequence on the society; for example, people with such trait will also have downtime. These special people sleep more efficient than most majority in the society where they only need 4.3-5.5 hrs of sleep, but everyone else can do the same thing when they need less sleep. People are naturally short sleepers if they rest a relative amount of sleep even if they got opportunity to sleep more, if you got extra time to sleep, then it is a sign for you to sleep more. When people are busy with the business and little stuffs in their day, then they will need less time because they got less time to sleep.

Source:https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/why-do-some-people-need-less-sleep-its-in-their-dna/


- The only edit for your title is to include the article "the" before "properties" for specificity.

*** Sleep in a major part of our daily routine, but many people tend to sleep less then the recommended number of hours per night.*** - The second part of your parenthetical was very confusing-- it is hard to discern the point of the text so I filled in the blanks.

***However, some people are born with a gene mutation which miraculously lessens the amount of sleep ones needs a day.*** - The adverb achieves what you try to accomplish with "talent" in a smoother way. "Lessen" should be plural and no comma is needed before which.

- Your third sentence takes phrasing from the main paragraph, and you use it in such a way that the sentence makes no sense; it is very difficult to understand the fact you are trying to present. First, you start the sentence asserting the mutation has its drawbacks, then go directly to medication then to social consequences. Your ideas should not be smushed into one sentence. Give them space to breathe. An appropriate sentence would be :

***It comes to no surprise that the mutation is attractive to the sleep-deprived; many people wish to replicate this gene variation through medication, even if scientists fear the social consequences of such drugs.***

This way the semi-colon helps separate two thoughts and the ideas are clearer.

***Individuals with this gene mutation sleep more efficiently than others who need more hours of sleep to feel rested.*** - "Efficent" must become an adverb. Simplify your sentences, there is a lot of exccess wording and unnecessary phrasing that hinders the paragraph

***People are naturally short sleepers, but usually require an average of 7 hours of sleep a day to function well.*** - Another sentence that made very little sense. It's like your sentence just runs in a squiggle, bouncing from A to C to E to B. Before you write the sentence, think about what you want to say in the clearest of ways to discern what the real point of the sentence will be.

***In this fast-paced world where sleep is essential, it might help to have a unique gene pattern. *** - Similar to the notes from the previous sentence. Clarity, clarity, clarity!

EDITED VERSION

  • "The Properties of Sleep"

Sleep in a major part of our daily routine, but many people tend to sleep less then the recommended number of hours per night. However, some people are born with a gene mutation which miraculously lessens the amount of sleep ones needs a day. It comes to no surprise that the mutation is attractive to the sleep-deprived; many people wish to replicate this gene variation through medication, even if scientists fear the social consequences of such drugs. Individuals with this gene mutation sleep more efficiently than others who need more hours of sleep to feel rested. People are naturally short sleepers, but usually require an average of 7 hours of sleep a day to function well. In this fast-paced world where sleep is essential, it might help to have a unique gene pattern.

https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/why-do-some-people-need-less-sleep-its-in-their-dna/




Microscopic World-----
Science has advanced in many ways because of the discovery of new fundamentals; for example, microorganisms. Microoganisms are tiny organisms that we can't see with our eyes, the first discovery was made by the Dutch cloth merchants Antoni van leeuwenhoek who first discovered bacteria using a homemade microscope. However, as the technology become more advance, the capability of the intruments evolved and it allows us to view the tiny objects in a more clear details. Image viewed 400 years ago compared to today might changed a lot, but the immense beauty of microscopic world always remain the same and existed in its world with samll scale. The small scale helps us understand the building blocks and organism that the world was composed of, giving us a better view abou the details we don't see often. The microscopic world is not only beautiful, but also meaningful due to its properties ( building blocks).

Source: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/science/2019/10/see-years-best-pictures-microscopic-nikon-small-world-2019/

*** The Wonders of a Microscopic World***

- Good title, but too vague. Add a little creativity to reel in the reader.

*** Fundamental science has advanced in many ways due to the discovery of microorganisms.***

- Your use of the word "fundamental" was very confusing, I believe because you are using it as a descriptor or action.

*** Microorganisms, or tiny organisms that can not be seen with the naked eye, were discovered by the Dutch cloth merchant Antoni van Leeuwenhoek, who used a homemade microscope to view bacteria. ***

- Good sentence, use a parenthetical for the start of the sentence-- otherwise it seems like there are two different sentences smashed together.

***However, as technology becomes more advances, the capability of such instruments have evolved, allowing us to view these tiny beings in clearer detail. ***

- Another good sentence. "Becomes" should be plural, as technology is a broad word. "such" tells the reader about the variety of instruments and "clearer" was a smoother phrase than "more clear detail". Try reading your sentences out loud-- this will tell you where things sound awkward.

*** An image viewed 400 years ago would be very different compared to modern standards, but the immense beauty of a microscopic world remains the same and exists on a small scale. ***

- The article helps with direction and clarity, "modern" is more defined than "today", try not to include vague words like "a lot", it makes your writing weaker than it should be.

***This small scale helps us understand the building blocks that make up a microorganism, and gives us a better view of a world we can not see.***

- Change the article to "this" to point directly to the topic. Good sentence; this could almost be your conclusion, so perhaps this is a moment where you can add a small fact.

      • The microscopic world is not only beautiful, but also meaningful and essential to our understanding of the natural world. ***

- Do not end your sentence with parantheses. The reader takes this to mean that the paragraph is unfinished.


EDITED VERSION

  • "The Wonders of a Microscopic World"

Fundamental science has advanced in many ways due to the discovery of microorganisms. Microorganisms, or tiny organisms that can not be seen with the naked eye, were discovered by the Dutch cloth merchant Antoni van Leeuwenhoek, who used a homemade microscope to view bacteria. However, as technology becomes more advances, the capability of such instruments have evolved, allowing us to view these tiny beings in clearer detail. An image viewed 400 years ago would be very different compared to modern standards, but the immense beauty of a microscopic world remains the same and exists on a small scale. This small scale helps us understand the building blocks that make up a microorganism, and gives us a better view of a world we can not see. The microscopic world is not only beautiful, but also meaningful and essential to our understanding of the natural world. https://www.nationalgeographic.com/science/2019/10/see-years-best-pictures-microscopic-nikon-small-world-2019/



Periodic Table-----
 Have you ever heard about the periodic table. If not, I will explain what it is to you. This is a chart that compose of 90 something natural elements and more than 10 of man made elements, such dicoverey made by human is because men trying to find and understand how the universe function using our own words. Since elements were composed of protons, electrons, and neutrons ( the basic componenet of the world we living in), we are able to explain the elements using these terms and understand their properties. The order of the elements were arranged based on their atomic number, this number is the number of protons in an atomic nucleus and it tells us the behavior of the elements and the type of element it is. These properties and behaviors are the important parts for our understanding us world and how the elements interact with each other. The founding of periodic table helps us understand and made discoveries that benefit or harm the world; for example, atomic bomb. 

Source: https://www.sciencenewsforstudents.org/blog/scientists-say/scientists-say-periodic-table

***Understanding the Periodic Table***

- Vague title! The verb helps make it stronger.

*** While most people have heard about the periodic table, not all of us know how it works.***

- Starting out your paragraph the way you do makes it very weak-- the audience is immediately put on the spot; instead, phrase your question as a response.

*** This chart is composed of about 90 natural elements and more than 10 man-made elements; these synthetic elements were discovered by scientists trying to understand how the universe functions.***

- This sentence was too long, so the semi-colon helps break it up. Also some changes with tense, particularly your use of "compose", "discovery", and "trying to find". Past tense, not present!

*** Elements are composed of protons, electrons and neutrons-- these are the basic components of the world we live in, and we can explain and understand the elements by using these terms.***

- Keep it present tense! Use "are" not "were". The dash, in my opinion, works better than the parentheses because there is no halting the text. Try and be as smooth as possible.

*** The order in which the elements are arranged on the periodic table is based on their atomic number. This tells us the type of element and the number of protons in the atom's nucleus, along with its specific behavior.***

- Your sentences are very dense. I split this sentence into two so the paragraph has breathing room-- you don't need to fit so much info into one sentence.

*** These properties and behaviors are vital in understanding the world and how elements interact with each other.***

- Good sentence. "Vital" is more to-the-point than "the important part". I removed the unneeded pronoun "us".

***The periodic table has helped us make amazing discoveries, that can either benefit or, unknowingly, harm our planet.***

- Don't end your sentence off the back of a semi-colon. It makes your conclusion feel like an after thought. Perhaps fit "atomic bombs" elsewhere in the piece.

EDITED VERSION

  • "Understanding the Periodic Table"

While most people have heard about the periodic table, not all of us know how it works. This chart is composed of about 90 natural elements and more than 10 man-made elements; these synthetic elements were discovered by scientists trying to understand how the universe functions. Elements are composed of protons, electrons and neutrons-- these are the basic components of the world we live in, and we can explain and understand the elements by using these terms. The order in which the elements are arranged on the periodic table is based on their atomic number. This tells us the type of element and the number of protons in the atom's nucleus, along with its specific behavior. These properties and behaviors are vital in understanding the world and how elements interact with each other. The periodic table has helped us make amazing discoveries, that can either benefit or, unknowingly, harm our planet. https://www.sciencenewsforstudents.org/blog/scientists-say/scientists-say-periodic-table




Chance for Better Batteries?-----
 We often used electronic devices in our lives, but who actually care about what are the components of these devices and how these devices function and powered? The battery is an essential part of electronic, without these, there is no way the technologies can last for a long time without a wire. However, manufactured industrial products caused environment impacts and money; consequently, a new concept for an aluminum battery has twice amount fo energy density, included many sources of energy and reduced production costs and environmental impacts had come to mind of researchers from the Chalmers University of Technology, Sweden, and the National Institute of Chemistry, Slovenia. In this new concept, graphite ( material in battery that served as a cathode that reacted with the negative electrode ( anode) produced energy content inefficiently) was replaced by an organic, nanostructured cathode that makes the battery last longer and less harmful to the society. That what possibly the best form battery we could make, besides the fact the lithium-ion batteries could last longer and not produce yet. No matter what battery it is, they are all contributing to the development of human civilization.

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/09/190930082249.htm


*** A Chance for Better Batteries?*** - Good title! Only edit is to add the article "a" for specificity. But I like the alliteration you use here.

*** We use electronic devices in our everyday lives, but rarely think about their components and functions.***

- "Often" is not needed as a descriptor here (it's already asserted with "lives"). The adverb 'rarely' helps bring your ideas together and marks a shift in the sentence in a stronger way then the simple conjunction.

***Batteries, for example, are an essential part of electronics-- without these, there is no way to sustain a device for long without an wire or attachment.***

- "The battery" is much to specific for this generalization. Instead, pluralize it. The dash allows the sentence to continue with a brief break. "Sustain" is a key verb to describe your thought-- compact words like this can help cut down your sentence and make it clearer.

*** However, manufactured industrial products negatively impact the environment and costs a great deal of money.***

- Good sentence, although it is much too long even with the semi-colon. You present two different thoughts in this one sentence. Break them up so each idea is presented clearly.

***A new construct for the aluminum battery, developed by researchers from Slovenia and Sweden, would provide twice as much energy, and reduce production costs and environmental damages.***

- Good presentation of information. Some info I didn't include simply because the sentence worked well without it, but you could still use that info later in the piece, or reword to fit it in. I also noticed you put words in the past tense-- think twice about what should be present and what should be past.

***This concept uses an organic, nanostructured cathode instead of graphite, so the battery lasts longer and is less harmful to the environment.***

- When writing, assume the reader knows nothing about what they are reading-- the scientific wording in this sentence can be simplified so the reader can understand. We want the layman's terms! Also, use "environment" not "society"-- society is people, environment is earth.

***These are possibly the best batteries produced today, and contribute to the further developement of human civilization. ***

-I like your ending and the authorative note is has. Short and sweet! Try not to introduce new information in the conclusion.

EDITED VERSION

  • "A Chance for Better Batteries?"

We use electronic devices in our everyday lives, but rarely think about their components and functions. Batteries, for example, are an essential part of electronics-- without these, there is no way to sustain a device for long without an wire or attachment. However, manufactured industrial products negatively impact the environment and costs a great deal of money. A new construct for the aluminum battery, developed by researchers from Slovenia and Sweden, would provide twice as much energy, and reduce production costs and environmental damages. This concept uses an organic, nanostructured cathode instead of graphite, so the battery lasts longer and is less harmful to the environment. These are possibly the best batteries produced today, and contribute to the further developement of human civilization.

https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/09/190930082249.htm



Men Lived Longer Than Other Men-----
  New research has shown that Australian men's life expectancy is higher than most groups of males in the world. The majority of people believed that the Japanese and the Nordic people are experts in terms of health and longevity. However, according to the data gathered from 15 countries across the world that had a high life expectancy, Australian National University believed Australian men were simply better in such fields. The organization believed such results because of long-term stability and the standard of living in Australia compared to most of the countries around the world. Also with an experiment based on a hypothetical group of people, which tests put them in the mortality rate of the country in a specific year and country, then they compared the results produced by the experiment in different countries to see which country has a high life expectancy. In general, life expectancy is based on the mortality rate in the area and it seems like a high life expectancy due to a surplus of food.

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/08/190822094020.htm


***"Location Matters when it Comes to Life Expectancy"***

- Your title is very vague and unspecific. I used specific wording and alliteration (location/life) to make the title interesting.

***New research shows that the life expectancy of Australian men is higher than most groups of males around the world.***

-Since the research is new, the verb "show" should be in present tense. I reworded "Australian men's life expectancy" to make the flow better. You want to use the preposition "around" instead of "in"; "in" assumes something actually inside something else as opposed to around something as in around the world.

***A majority of people believe that those of Japanese or Nordic descent have mastered good health and longevity. ***

- Try not to use the same word/descriptor in one sentence (in this case "people"); it can dumb down your writing. "Believe" should be present tense since you assert that this is still a common belief. "Experts" was a confusing term, so I used "mastered" to build a clearer image.

***However, after gathering data from 15 countries across the world- each with a high life-expectancy rate- , the Australian Nation University asserts that Australian men live longer and better than others in the same demographic. ***

- The dashes here help break up the sentence, and by making the verb "gather" active, the rest of the sentence is set up to uncover the information. The latter part of your sentence was not clear/vague. The wording "simply better in such field" didn't make sense, so I used the word "demographic" to tie together your thoughts. You are also using the word "believe" too much. Use a thesaurus; this will expose you to a lot of new words.

***The University believes these results stem from Australia's long-term stability and the high standard of living compared to most other countries.***

- "Organization" is vague! Be specific. I used "stem" instead of "because" to add strenght to your sentence and the idea you are trying to prove.

***Their theories were tested by using hypothetical groups to compare mortality rates between countries with high and low life expectancies.***

- This sentence was confusing to decipher your ultimate idea. Try to be as clear and concise as possible; this usually means going over the sentence and removing unnecessary words.

***In general, life expectancy depends on mortality rates, though Australian men seem to be on the brighter side of this statistic.***

-Your conclusion needs to have a wrap-it-up feel, and this can best be accomplished by returning to the start of the paragraph and bringing together points you have asserted through the rest of the article.


EDITED VERSION

  • "Location Matters when it Comes to Life Expectancy"

New research shows that the life expectancy of Australian men is higher than most groups of males around the world. A majority of people believe that those of Japanese or Nordic descent have mastered good health and longevity. However, after gathering data from 15 countries across the world- each with a high life-expectancy rate- , the Australian Nation University asserts that Australian men live longer and better than others in the same demographic. The University believes these results stem from Australia's long-term stability and the high standard of living compared to most other countries. Their theories were tested by using hypothetical groups to compare mortality rates between countries with high and low life expectancies. In general, life expectancy depends on mortality rates, though Australian men seem to be on the brighter side of this statistic. https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/08/190822094020.htm



Monsoon Are No Longer Plight-----
 Monsoon, a season prevailing wind in the region of South and Southeast Asia; usually, bringing rain that helps fertile the farmland. However, the western Indian City was battered by 5.5 inches of rain this week and brought devastating effects to regions with low-lying geography. Local agencies in Baramati (the worst affected region) had more than 15000 people evacuated and set up 38 emergency shelters; consequently, people were killed and lost. Emergency supplies are running low in almost every city in the country, this rain is unusual and sudden, which has left millions are suffering and hundreds died nationwide. Additionally, it has measuring 6.5% above average terms of rainfall in the season, resulting in a worst and deadly condition than the previous season. Wish the ones that were lost are found and end this terrible season sooner.    

Source: https://www.cnn.com/2019/09/27/asia/india-flood-intl-hnk-scli/index.html

***"The Severity of Monsoons"***

- You are using "plight" as an adjective when it can only be used as a noun.

*** The monsoon season in South and Southeast Asia usually bring prevailing winds and rain which helps farmlands remain fertile.***

- The sentence before the semi-colon is not complete; there is no verb. There is a similar issue with the sentence following the semi-colon. A semi-colon is used to separate two complete sentence instead of a comma or dash.

***However, this week a western Indian city named Pune was battered by 5.5 inches of rain, causing devastation to the low-lying region.***

- By omitting the name of the city, the reader is confused and wants more information. I also made "devastating" a noun since "causing" provides the action verb.

*** Local agencies in the badly affected region of Baramati had to evacuate more than 15,000 people and sent up 38 emergency shelters.***

- The parentheses makes the sentence weak, as this information should be included fully into the sentence, not as an aside. Also, the semi-colon and comment following is not necessary information. This is already assumed.

***Emergency supplies are running low in almost every city across the country, leaving millions suffering and hundreds dead nationwide.***

- Your phrase "the rain is unusual and sudden" doesn't work with your paragraph, as the monsoon season is just that- expected and long anticipated. I removed this and made "left" present because you say "supplies are running low", indicating current events.

***Additionally, the rainfall this season is 6.5% above average, resulting in deadlier conditions than ever before. We can only hope the damage can be contained before the next monsoon season. ***

- Good use of the adverb, some of the phrasing was confusing so I simplified. Also, your conclusion is incomplete and way to informal. It's okay to be more conversation in the conclusion of the article but it still must read like an editorial.

EDITED VERSION

  • "The Severity of Monsoons"

The monsoon season in South and Southeast Asia usually bring prevailing winds and rain which helps farmlands remain fertile. However, this week a western Indian city named Pune was battered by 5.5 inches of rain, causing devastation to the low-lying region. Local agencies in the badly affected region of Baramati had to evacuate more than 15,000 people and sent up 38 emergency shelters. Emergency supplies are running low in almost every city across the country, leaving millions suffering and hundreds dead nationwide. Additionally, the rainfall this season is 6.5% above average, resulting in deadlier conditions than ever before. We can only hope the damage can be contained before the next monsoon season.

https://www.cnn.com/2019/09/27/asia/india-flood-intl-hnk-scli/index.html




Dream might come true " Hairy Head"-----
 There aren't many things in the world that could make men devastated and sobber at night. Baldness is properly the first few fears on the list; however, thanks to the University of Wisconsin-Madison, cheap hair grow technology has been developed for the need of hair. Such technology uses low-frequency electric pulses coax to reactive the hair follicles, which reactivate hair production, this device only functions on patients that are in the early stage of baldness. Although it's defect destroys dreams of the aged men, its' relative size allows people to put their on 24/7 without been noticed. This revolutionary technology of electric stimulations generate energy from movement and transmit electricity to the skin can also be used in other parts of the body; for example, stomach, when you are hungry such technology trick the stomach to feeling full. The further development of electric stimulation will change the perspective of how our body view objects.     

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/09/190919165334.htm

*** "Dreaming of a Hairy Head."***

- You have two titles at work here. Bring them together uniquely to complete the thought.

***There aren't many things in the world that can make men devastated and somber at night. ***"""

- Since you are talking about something present, "could" must become present tense "can". I think you also want to use the word "somber" which reflect melancholy, but sober can also work.

'*** Baldness is probably one of the first few fears on the list; however, thanks to the University of Wisconsin- Madison, cheap hair growing technology has been developed to address this issue.***

- "Properly" is not the right adverb to use here; instead use "probably. Also use "one" for specificity. Good use of semi-colon. "For the need of hair" is very awkward- I changed to "developed to address this issue."

***Such technology uses low-frequency electric pulses to revive inactive hair follicles to stimulate hair production. Unfortunately, this device is only successful on patients that are in the early stages of baldness.***

- Part of this sentence was taken from the original piece. Do not copy key words or descriptors; instead use your own. For example "revive inactive hair follicles to stimulate hair production" instead of "coax to reactive the hair follicles, which reactivate hair production". I also separated your sentence, which was too long and contained two different complete thoughts. Give yourself space, otherwise the writing becomes cramped and rushed.

***This revolutionary technology of electric stimulation generates energy from movement, and transmits electricity to the skin. Similar technology is used to trick the stomach to feel full. ***

- The sentence that you used before is not needed with the included "unfortunately..."- you already assert that older men can't use this treatment. Instead, you can use the convenience of the device at the conclusion and break down the semi-colon to have two clear sentences.

***The device's relative size makes it easy to conceal, and further developments of electric stimulation technology will become the new norm. ***

- By talking about the convenience of the device, we can conclude this will become more regularized and end the paragraph on this projectio into the future, which is always a good tone to end a piece on.


EDITED VERSION

  • "Dreaming of a Hairy Head."

There aren't many things in the world that can make men devastated and somber at night. Baldness is probably one of the first few fears on the list; however, thanks to the University of Wisconsin- Madison, cheap hair growing technology has been developed to address this issue. Such technology uses low-frequency electric pulses to revive inactive hair follicles to stimulate hair production. Unfortunately, this device is only successful on patients that are in the early stages of baldness. This revolutionary technology of electric stimulation generates energy from movement, and transmits electricity to the skin. Similar technology is used to trick the stomach to feel full. The device's relative size makes it easy to conceal, and further developments of electric stimulation technology will become the new norm.

https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/09/190919165334.htm



Relationship between weight gain and aging-----
 Many have are worrying about weight gain as they get older; consequently, researchers conducted experiment and collect data to see what are the causes of weight gain. As a result of the experiment, lipid turnover in the fat tissues decreases as aging, which makes the body easier to gain weight, even you exercise little or much and control your diets. In addition, the data has shown women who underwent the early stage of bariatric surgery, scientists believes that these women have more room of improvement for lipid turnover growth than those in the higher states of the surgery. This could open new treatments for curing obesity, since the change in tissues is independent from other factors. This article serves as a proof of how physical activities can affect long term surgery can increase the lipid turnover. With this article and others of the same topic, obesity will not be a problem in the future. 

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/09/190909193211.htm

*** "The Relationship between Weight Gain and Aging" ***

- Use the article "the" for specificity. Also remember capitalization in titles.

*** Many people worry about weight gain as they get older; consequently, researchers conducted experiments and collected data to see what are the causes of weight gain.***

- "People" provides specificity, and allows the verb to stay in present tense. Because it is assumed that many experiments and data are being refereed to here, both words need to be plural.

***Results concluded that lipid turnover in fat tissues decrease as one ages, which makes it easier for the body to gain weight, even if you exercise and control your diet.***

- The beginning of this sentence is awkward, "results concluded" is clearer. "Aging" is an active verb and you are describing "ages" as a noun in this sentence. The adjective "easier" should go before the noun as a descriptor.

***Additionally, scientists believe that women who underwent the early stage of bariatric surgery have more room of improvement for lipid turnover growth than those in the higher states of the surgery.***

- Change "addition" to an adverb; this helps the sentence transition. Also, by putting the information about scientists first, the sentence becomes clearer.

***This could open new treatments for curing obesity, since the change in tissues is independent from other factors.*** - Good sentence! No edits.

*** This data shows how physical activities can affect long term weight-gain and how surgery can increase lipid turnover.*** - Your sentence is incomplete; the connection between physical activity, surgery and weight-gain is confusing, so I used "and" to separate and complete the two thoughts.

***Studies and data of this kind help change the future of obesity.*** - It is confusing when you directly bring up the original article. Use the information to support your own conclusion, do not defer to it.


EDITED VERSION

  • "The Relationship between Weight Gain and Aging"
Many people worry about weight gain as they get older; consequently, researchers conducted experiments and collected data to see what are the causes of weight gain. Results concluded that lipid turnover in fat tissues decrease as one ages, which makes it easier for the body to gain weight, even if you exercise and control your diet. Additionally, scientists believe that women who underwent the early stage of bariatric surgery have more room of improvement for lipid turnover growth than those in the higher states of the surgery. This could open new treatments for curing obesity, since the change in tissues is independent from other factors. This data shows how physical activities can affect long term weight-gain and how surgery can increase lipid turnover. Studies and data of this kind help change the future of obesity.



Global change is triggering an identity switch in grasslands-----
 Grasslands are always important to sustain humanity and thousands of other species since 300000 years ago. But today its feature has change from growing on top of lands to shifting beneath their feet. The global change like pollution and other sustained humanity in fact of 300000. This drones transform the plant species growing faster and total different from what scientists found really different from what they expected to be. The plant species is transforming into other because of environmental alterations. Scientists performing such experiment to find the effects of it and how the effects of the global change is happening naturally. 

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/08/190819164334.htm

***"Global Changes are Giving the Grassland an Identity Crisis."***

- Your title is the same as the title for the original piece. Use your own language and creativity.

*** The grasslands have sustained humanity and thousands of other species for over 300,000 years.***

- "Always important to" can be removed to get right to the point, as "sustain" accomplishes that for you. "For over" should be used to represent the passing of time instead of "since".

*** Today, however, its features have changed due to climate issues like pollution and other human influences.***'

- A sentence that begins with a conjunction comes off as not strong, so I used "however" to mark that transition you are trying. The second half of your sentence provides some confusing imagery (some taken from the original article) so I used some of your thoughts from the next sentence here.

*** For example, many plant species are growing faster and in a totally different way from what scientists expected.***

-The phrasing of the sentence was confusing and I'm not sure about "drones" referred to here. I used "for example" to make your point clear. You also needed the very "are" before "growing" (-ing words usually follow a verb).

***The grasslands are transforming because of environmental alterations.***

- I returned back to the subject "grasslands" to provide the reader with clarification.

*** Scientists are performing experiments to determine the ultimate effects of global changes on natural habitats.***

- The verb needs to be before the -ing word. I also used "ultimate" to help signal the end of the article, and used the last moments to summaries or draw together the final point.

EDITED VERSION

  • "Global Changes are Giving the Grassland an Identity Crisis."

The grasslands have sustained humanity and thousands of other species for over 300,000 years. Today, however, its features have changed due to climate issues like pollution and other human influences. For example, many plant species are growing faster and in a totally different way from what scientists expected. The grasslands are transforming because of environmental alterations. Scientists are performing experiments to determine the ultimate effects of global changes on natural habitats



Gut-brain connection helps explain how overeating leads to obesity-----
 Since most people thinks they are getting obese because of overeating. But scientists proved another reason or connection that helps explain the problem of obesity. They had recently found out that while mice consuming a high-fat diet showed increased levels of gastric inhibitory polypeptide and this substance flow through the blood to the brain. This is the reason the the animals continue eating and gain weight without stopping , eventually, this will have a similar result on human since the similarity between the body structure of human and mice. The reason why human wouldn't stop eating until they realize they are obese is because our body is not realizing a leptin, a hormone that control of body weight and giving a sensation of fullness. As soon as we found out how to stop this matter, we might be able to control obesity.  

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/08/190812160533.htm


      • "How the Gut-Brain Connection Leads to Overeating and Obesity."***

- Your title is a great hook into the article, so try and take out whatever words are unnecessary. Something like "The Gut-Brain Connection Explained" would also work.

***Most people think that obesity is caused by overeating.***

- If you include "since" the sentence is not complete because this adverb implies continuation. "Thinks" should be singular. If you change "are getting" to "is caused by", it makes the sentence smoother.

***However, scientists have proven another connection to explain the problem of obesity.***

- Try not to start a sentence with a conjunction- it makes the sentence feel incomplete. Use an adverb instead. Change "proved" to "have proven" to show that it was a discovery of the past now being exposed.

***They discovered that mice who consume high-fat diets show increased levels of gastric inhibitory polypeptide, a substance that flows through the blood to the brain.***

- Good sentence. By eliminating certain words, like "recently found out" and "while", the sentence becomes clearer. Also, sometimes it is stronger to use a comma and a parenthetical than a conjunction.

***This is the reason an animal will continue to eat without stopping, and we can predict similar results in humans, because our body structure is similar to those of mice. ***

- Similarly, by simplifying our wording we can get to the point of the sentence faster and with more precision. I also used a conjunction to keep the sentence from running on.

*** A human will not stop eating when the body does not recognize the hormone leptin, which controls body weight and gives a sensation of fullness.***

- The phrasing of this sentence was very confusing and it was difficult to tell what the main point of this sentence was. For example, "the reason" can be removed and you can just begin the sentence with your assertion.

***As soon as we find out how to combat this issue, we might be able to curb obesity***

- Nice way to end your sentence. I felt that "combat" was a stronger word than "stop this matter". It achieves in one word what you could say in three.

EDITED VERSION

  • "How the Gut-Brain Connection Leads to Overeating and Obesity."

Most people think that obesity is caused by overeating. However, scientists have proven another connection to explain the problem of obesity. They discovered that mice who consume high-fat diets show increased levels of gastric inhibitory polypeptide, a substance that flows through the blood to the brain. This is the reason an animal will continue to eat without stopping, and we can predict similar results in humans, because our body structure is similar to those of mice. A human will not stop eating when the body does not recognize the hormone leptin, which controls body weight and gives a sensation of fullness. As soon as we find out how to combat this issue, we might be able to curb obesity.



Schrodinger's cat-----
 In 1935, Erwin Schrodinger has conduct an experiment about quantum cat, in which the cat enclosed in a box together with radioactive material, a detector and a lethal amount of poison. During this time, the cat remain in a condition that in which it is alive and dead the same time. In this experiment, the state of the cat is extremely sensitive where a little thermal interactions with the environment cause them to collapse, this is the reason why it is only possible to realize significantly few quantum bits of what Schrodinger cat depict. Scientists are not able to control the whole experiment, but only more than 50 in laboratory experiment. In addition, the process is complicated and usually takes too much time and the result can be measure before it has been destroyed. This advances in quantum research were complemented by efforts of a Chinese group and the researchers succeeded in new record for experiment approach. 

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/08/190813102023.htm


Schrodinger's cat-----***
    -Capitalize all major words in a title 
    -"Schrodinger" is "Schrödinger". Get this option for the 'o' by holding down the "Alt" button and using the numeric keyboard on the right side or Google search for how to find this option in Word or a Mac book. If all else fails, copy and paste the 'ö';   

Schrödinger's cat-----

In 1935, Erwin Schrodinger has conduct an experiment about quantum cat, in which the cat enclosed in a box together with radioactive material, a detector and a lethal amount of poison.***

    -Watch your tense. This should be in past tense. For example, 'has conduct' should be 'conducted'. 
    -omit 'about quantum cat'
    -Read this article carefully and use the links for the terms on the left-hand side because this article is difficult to understand.
    -'experiment' should be 'thought experiment' because this experiment did not actually occur. It was an idea.
    -read you sentences aloud. You're often missing articles or in this case the verb, is: 'cat enclosed' should be 'cat is enclosed';

In 1935, Erwin Schrödinger conducted a thought experiment, in which a cat is enclosed in a box together with radioactive material, a detector and a lethal amount of poison.

During this time, the cat remain in a condition that in which it is alive and dead the same time.***

    -'remain' should be 'remains'. Missing 'at' between 'dead' and 'the'
    -'that in which' doesn't make sense. Let leave it out or shorten it;

During this time, the cat remains in a condition in which it is alive and dead at the same time.

In this experiment, the state of the cat is extremely sensitive where a little thermal interactions with the environment cause them to collapse, this is the reason why it is only possible to realize significantly few quantum bits of what Schrodinger cat depict.***

    -I see what you are trying to say here but, it reads as if you don't totally understand the meaning of the article itself. From what I understand is that "Schrodinger's cat" is the idea that if this experiment was to be conducted, the cat can't actually be declared dead until the experimenter physically checks on the cat. If this was to be done, it would tamper with the experiment, so according to quantum mechanics, the cat would be both alive and dead.
    -The comma creates a comma splice. Let's delete the last half of the sentence because it doesn't make sense and you use too much of the same language from the original article. You are still at risk of plagiarizing in the first half of the sentence as well. Rewrite using your own words. 
    -"where a little thermal" doesn't read easily and isn't accurate to the original article. Change to "and any thermal"
   -"environment cause them to collapse" should be singular. It is referring to the "Schrodinger's cat experiment" which is singular;

In this experiment, any thermal interactions could compromise it, causing the environment to collapse.

Scientists are not able to control the whole experiment, but only more than 50 in laboratory experiment.***

    -again, remember to paraphrase using your own words. Replace 'but only more than 50' with 'but can control over 50 quantum bits'. Using 'quantum bits' clarifies what you're talking about and using 'over' makes sure you aren't using exact wording from the article. I'm also not sure 'laboratory experiment' is necessary;

Scientists are not able to control the whole experiment, but can control over 50 quantum bits in the lab.

In addition, the process is complicated and usually takes too much time and the result can be measure before it has been destroyed.***

    -I believe what you actually mean is that it "can't be measured"?
    -Let's make this flow better by replacing one of the and's with a comma
    -Use your own words!

In addition, the process is complicated, long and the results can't be measured before it's destroyed.

This advances in quantum research were complemented by efforts of a Chinese group and the researchers succeeded in new record for experiment approach.***

    -This sentence feels as though you've grabbed bits and pieces of the article and put it together without thoroughly understanding the meaning of the article. It's a complicated article to understand! I suggest reading it again.
    -"This" is referring to "advances" and both need to be plural. Change to "These advances".
    -Again, plagiarism with the first part of the sentence. Must rewrite. Read the last paragraph in the article again. Try to use your own words to describe what it's talking about then, create a new sentence using your own words;

This research, which now includes a record breaking creation of 18 qubits, was aided by a Chinese research group.

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Schrödinger's cat-----
  In 1935, Erwin Schrödinger conducted a thought experiment, in which a cat is enclosed in a box together with radioactive material, a detector and a lethal amount of poison. During this time, the cat remains in a condition in which it is alive and dead at the same time. In this experiment, any thermal interactions could compromise it, causing the environment to collapse. Scientists are not able to control the whole experiment, but can control over 50 quantum bits in the lab.  In addition, the process is complicated, long and the results can't be measured before it's destroyed. This research, which now includes a record breaking creation of 18 qubits, was aided by a Chinese research group.

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/08/190813102023.htm

Edited by Kira Carson



Influence of arctic sea-ice loss-----
 Connections are drawn between Arctic sear-ice loss and extreme cold weather by the researchers, just like those cold months during winter in USA. But it doesn't really has a big impact on the swathes of Asia and North America despite of this reduced sea water in Arctic and explain the reason why winter is cold. International team combined observations from the pass and data collected to result something, which that they found that reduced in sea ice and cold water do have some kind of correlation and also it happen coincidentally. However, keep in mind that it doesn't mean that there is actually coincident of one causing the other to happen. Researcher found out that reduction of sea water mean that areas with open sea increases and this causes the sear to lose more heat to the atmosphere during the winter, this doesn't happen in only Arctic, its happening over the place. This has a simultaneously effect of sea ice loss and cooling of weather.

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/08/190812130831.htm


Recovery of New Zealand's lost bird species-----
 Originally, New Zealand is an island where it contains many species of bird, but now the arrival of human on the island lead to the extinction of half of New Zealand's birds and many threatened.

Researchers observed it might take approximately 50 million years to recover the population of the birds since the beginning of human's colonized New Zealand. The biodiversity on Earth now took billions of years of evolutionary time, but with the interference of human, it might takes million of years to recover and already know that New Zealand need 50 million years to recovery its species population. Human is the first leading cause of the extinctions of many species on Earth, which are well living before human's actions. New Zealand are highly innovative and appear to be efficient for evolution, without human may prevent million of years of evolution. Human is the one that destroy the stability of the ecosystem on Earth and will be better for the species without human actions. Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/08/190805112225.htm


Solution for the invasive species. Good or bad?-----
 Invasive specie is always the problem that brings a headache, since there is no predators that can counter invasive specie, they greatly affect the marine ecosystem in the area. Invasive silver carp is moving northward since the accidental release in the 1970s, these fish threaten the aquatic food web that is worth $7 billion in the Great Lakes fishery. However, Chicago water pollution keep the invasive silver carp from moving northward, the negative compounds inside the water flowing down stream from Chicago. Experiment been conducted to examine gene expression patterns in blood and liver from different locations in the Great Lake. Fish near Kankakee developed livers that are working overtime and detoxifying the chemicals and toxic, which has a cause and effect relationship between the water pollution and silver carp. We should always be aware of the pollution and water quality for the sake of our good. 

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/08/190809104939.htm


Fear toward predators-----
 Study has demonstrated that the fear predators inspire has a long lasting effect in the nervous system of a wild animal and introduce a fearful feeling that is similar to PTSD. Researcher has found out that the behavior similar to PTSD can persist more than the immediate response and last more than a week for wild animals because of the predator exposure. This finding demonstrated that PTSD is not unnatural and the effects of predator exposure will have a long lasting effects on fecundity and survival, and how this is a norm in the nature. As this memories of life threatening experience pass through offspring, this helps the future generations to avoid same events from happening. Furthermore, scientists recognize that predators regulate the number of prey not only by killing them, but also scaring them, so this PTSD feeling among the wild animals will be inherited to the future generations on offspring survival. This helps us to have a basic understanding of how PTSD behavior will have on animals' neutral circuitry and contributed to PTSD on human neutral circuitry.   

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/08/190807112939.htm


Fish preserve 'memories' better than humans do-----
 Most people has properly hear a stereotype that fish has only three second memories. But it turns out that fish's DNA has a far capacity that can hold far more memory than that of humans. Study shows that DNA methylation encodes additional information that we just started to understand and new information has been recorded. In fact, the information has been removed from generation to generation, on the other hand, this phenomena doesn't apply on fish. However, special events like famine and war have a long lasting effect on generations through the inheritance of DNA but theses information will be erase during its development; this doesn't apply on fish, they are able to pass their DNA to their next generation. With this understanding of DNA methylation, scientists can understand the molecular secret that is been pass during the offspring.

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/08/190808091403.htm


Proper waking and sleeping routine-----
 Imagine you have a proper body clock  that will lure you to wake you up everyday on time and go to bed on time, so whenever you wake up in the morning without the distraction of alarm. This is called advanced sleep phase -- previously a really rare case where only 1 out of 300 adults will have such trait. While most people struggle to wake up really early in the morning, people with such trait can wake up naturally from the bed without any doubt or concerns. In addtion, on non-working day, advanced sleepers only sleep five to ten extra minutes compared to non-advanced sleepers sleep 30-38 minutes. Such study bring us a conclusion that advanced sleep phase people has a general costant sleep hours and how there routine will not be affected by working or non-working day. Better sleeping routine will help us to have a healty boy and mind for the next challenge. 

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/08/190806101552.htm


Greenhouse gas to fuel-----
 As scientists looking for fast and effective ways for resources, so they trying to convert carbon dioxide into fuel. This helps reduce the amount of carbon dioxide, strength our need for more resources to power up machines and vehicles and return with a better living environment for the growth of our future generation. Researchers trying to approach this concept by utilizes a series of catalytic reaction to electrochemically reduce the carbon dioxide to methane, the main component of natural gas. To perform this process, you need a surface of copper, electrical wiring, reactors, and some costly separation and purifying steps to reduce carbon dioxide into carbon monoxide, which later been break down into methane. Also, many steps of chemical reaction will happen and it requires more chemicals to add into the reaction. This will further benefit our environment and solving the pollution problem.

Source:https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/08/190801122634.htm


Extinction of species will lead to rising carbon dioxide levels in atmosphere-----
 The elephant population in central African forests encourage the growth of slow-growing trees with high wood density because elephants preferred fast-growing species as their foods. The extinction of these animals will lead to an abundance of fast-growing trees, which will reduce the ability to capture carbon in the air. As researchers point out from the stimulation of the elephants in the forest of central Africa that the proportion of trees with high-density wood is higher in forests with elephants. These high-density and slow-growing trees have a large number of carbon molecules in them and it contains more carbon molecules per unit volume than fast-growing trees. In addition, without these elephants there will be a less carbon dioxide will be taken in by the atmosphere  This information and data collected by the researcher have demonstrated that the negative effects of the extinction of elephants caused rising carbon dioxide levels in the atmosphere.

Source:https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/07/190725100433.htm


Love hormone has a stomach-turning effect in starfish-----
 The hormone released from a human brain has different effects on other species like starfish. For example, the hormone released from the human brain when we fall in love will cause starfish to turn their stomach inside out to feed. The study has shown that the oxytocin  (the love hormone) molecules have been acting in the nervous system of animals for over half billion years already, but different animals might receive a different reaction with oxytocin molecules. However, oxytocin molecules change the feeding habit of the crown of thorns starfish, which means we can regulate or control the feeding behavior of these starfishes for coral. With the evert of the crown of thorns starfish, they had their appetite changes and induces them to what is know as fictive feeding. This change in their feeding behavior with love hormones, we can control them and bringing some striking effects to this species.

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/07/190731155940.htm


Wearable device-----
 The wearable device has benefited our life and advances from the field in electronics, material, and mechanical design. But they are sort of uncomfortable to put them on and this wearable device model was not able to contain multifunction at one time. However, researchers have reported that they had discovered a multifunctional ultra-thin wearable electronic device and imperceptible for the wearer, which make the experience much comfortable. It also brings many benefits users don't have to suffer from the slow response times and decline in performance over time. Such a device is more suitable for different environments and mechanically imperceptible. It helps us better understand our body by capturing multiple physical data and AI as a respondent. 

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/08/190802144409.htm


Shark threat from overfishing-----
 Shark is an organism that has been living for ages from 450 million years ago to today, they are survived from the meteor in the era of dinosaurs and evolved to fit the environment.  Now, they face a new challenge, overfishing, over 150 scientists from 26 countries track the data of nearly 2000 sharks using satellite tags have found 24% of the space used by sharks in a monthly downfall under the footprint of fishing. Their living space has been overlapped with the fishing area or longline fleets, this results in higher catch rate and accelerates declines in abundance. Our little to no protection exists for sharks in the high seas are not protecting sharks, we immediate need protection on these high sea species. Some of the shark species are already endangered worldwide and facing pressure from the industrial longline fishing effort will soon be extinct. We need our action on preserving these animals or later they will be extinct.

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/07/190725151022.htm


3D printing heart-----
 Researchers have published a new bioprinting method, which might help us to get one step closer to the point where we can 3D print an adult size heart. Since each of the organs in the human body are made up of special cells and held together by ECM (extracellular matrix), this provides the structure and biochemical signals that cells need to carry out the basic function. But it seems like we are unable to print pieces of the heart and combine them that truly function. There are over millions of people around the world waiting for a heart replacement, such need to replace an organ is immense, and artificial organs required a heart that is capable of repairing, supplementing, and maintain a long-term organ function. However, Feinberg's lab developed a 3D bioprinting method that allows collagen to deposited in a layer by layer structure, so the collagen will have a chance to solidify itself. This will rescue many from the scarcity of heart replacement.

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/08/190801142542.htm


Boost Creativity-----
 New research has shown that playing video games is a good thing: it boosts your creativity by playing them that foster creative freedom can under some conditions. Minecraft is a good example of a game that increases the creativity of a person because it allows the player to explore and creating anything that they have in their mind. But playing games like Minecraft under the instructions have no benefits and the only thing it does is to kill your imagination and become less creative. Scientists had found that instructions may have changed subjects' motivation for play because it gives an understanding of what to do and limiting the options been given. This is the reason why instructed Minecraft players trying to use others' chains of thoughts and not their thoughts. From the investigation, we realized that video games have potential have as engaging and adaptive educational opportunity.   

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/07/190708140051.htm


Population-----
 Increasing in human population caused a demand for food and presenting an unavoidable problem to food production and distribution. This is what we faced in the present and as the population increase to the expected value "11 billion" in the year of the 22nd century, the rise of the population will bring more issues like infectious diseases. These infectious diseases account for 75 percent of death in the developing countries in the tropical area and even in the United States, an estimated 48 million people suffered from foodborne. Of this number, that 128,000 are hospitalized and about 3,000 died from the foodborne infection, the reason for such problem is that food imported from developing -- where sanitation and food safety is lacking and poorly enforced. The farming practice has also contributed to such issues because how it destroys the stability of the environment where it decimated snail predator and provide all source of resources for the animal to lived and affect diseases. If we want to solve this particular problem, we need to improve education on health literacy in developing countries.  

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/07/190702184601.htm


Americans are drilling deeper than ever for freshwater-----
 Groundwater might be out of sign many, but for over 100 million Americans who rely on it for livelihoods, it's everything to them. But wells are going dry and scientists just beginning on the research about the complex landscape of groundwater use.  Scientists had collected a lot of data over the regions from a variety of source because wells are a state matter, and determine if the regions depend on groundwater to see if wells are being drilled deeper over time. The way to stave off such issue is drilling new wells and the new wells are usually 1.4 and 9.2 times deeper, the reasons why the wells are deeper are because to source more water and to avoid contamination seeping into aquifers from the surface. Even though, the groundwater tends to get saltier at depth and finally reach a point that becomes unusable. These foundings contributes to the drilling of water and how to prevent it to dry.      

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/07/190722115943.htm


Element to blame-----
 Chemical in water might cause people to get poisoned, but naturally occurring manganese can lead to big changes in the water in the lead pipe, depending on the disinfectants are used in the water, the changes might be dangerous or significant. Lead dioxide in water can't dissolve in water, which might cause poisoning, but with a disinfectant like chlorine in the water. This oxidizing agent helps the dissolving of PbCO3 inside the lead pipe, and it was commonly used around the world. But this process is not speedy enough and this is where manganese comes in. Manganese can easily change oxidation states and after it combines with chlorine and formed manganese oxide. It acted as a catalyst, which speeds up the process to convert lead carbonate to lead dioxide.   

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/07/190722115933.htm


Pufferfish-----
  Pufferfish, a fish that is known for their strange and extreme skin ornaments and their spiky spines. But this remained as a mystery why they have such structure, researchers now have discovered genes that are responsible for the evolution and development of their spines.  The result is pretty similar to how vertebrates get their hair and feathers.  Scientists hypothesized that pufferfish lost its scale component for the development of their spines, but the fact is that spines are developmentally unique retained from spines. As scientists double the amount of that particular genes in pufferfish, it reduces the number of spines and lessens the restriction on where the spines appear on the pufferfish. What we know is that the spines are the evolving traits that pufferfish developed to better adapt to the environment and climate changes.

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/07/190725150956.htm


Bacteria hint at the ancient origin of photosynthesis-----
 The structure inside rare bacteria is similar to that photosynthesis in plants today. This discovery could mean the revolution of photosynthesis could be different, which means not only plants perform the process of photosynthesis. However, those bacteria instead perform anoxygenic photosynthesis, they perform the other version that splits water into hydrogen and oxygen to power the process. Besides, anoxygenic photosynthesis emerged about 3.5 billion years ago and oxygenic photosynthesis emerged a billion years later. This bacteria was called " Heliobacterium modesticaldum" and other bacteria that performed oxygenic photosynthesis might share the same ancestor, but evolved into bacteria with different structures. The study might have shown that anoxygenic photosynthesis was not the product of anoxygenic photosynthesis.   

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/07/190725120556.htm


Climate is warming faster-----
 The climate across the world now is warming way faster than it has in the last 2,000 years. During the little ice age (1300-1850), the temperature appears to be colder across the whole world, but the temperatures vary in different place and time. The temperature during the pre-industrial time was primarily affected by random fluctuations within the climate system itself and only a few external factors like volcano eruption and solar activity, but these factors are not strong enough to change the averaged global temperature. Out of all the factors, the industrial time is the period when the temperature has been affected the most from different climate epochs. However, the different region has a different minimum and maximum temperatures, which stood out that cannot be inferred from regional temperature phenomena like the "Medieval Warm Period" in Europe and North America. The results have demonstrated that the warmest period in the last 2,000 years is the 20th century when the industry has reached its height.  

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/07/190724131624.htm


Sensitive climates-----
 The new search has revealed that a decade without any global warming is more likely to happen if the climate is more sensitive to carbon dioxide emissions. This directly related to the sensitivity of the climate, which the amount of global warming increases as atmospheric CO2 concentrations rise. The higher the sensitivity, the warmer the temperature after the increase of CO2. And this helps us better understand how the climate throughout the centuries with its climate sensitivity. But we still have no idea about the exact range of natural variability in trends in the upcoming decades, however, the study of the risks should not be considered separate from the climate sensitivity. Still increasing the climate sensitivity would increase the mean of global warming.

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/07/190722111921.htm


Mosquito brains integrate diverse sensory cues to find a host-----
 A team of scientists had discovered how the female mosquito find their host for her blood meal. Female mosquito's olfactory system to sense certain chemical cues then uses here visual system to scan the nearby and fly toward their potential hosts. These findings can help us develop a new method to reduce the spread of mosquito-borne diseases and mosquito control. What trigger the mosquitos to find the host is CO2,  to them, this is a telltale sign that a potential meal is nearby. This affects mosquito's flight behavior and brain reaction to olfactory and visual cues.  It might not be the only one that affects the behavior of mosquito, other factors might also contributing to it. 

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/07/190718112528.htm


Volcanic eruption-----
  Since the molten rock that feeds volcanoes can be stored on earth's crust, as a result, we can predict when is the next volcano eruption. Researchers used volcanic minerals know as 'crustal clocks' to calculate how long magma can be stored in the deepest part of the volcanic system. And by determining how long it stored in the Earth's crust, it can help us to model the process that might trigger the volcano eruption. Also, the researchers need to measure the magma that was stored in the boundary area where the magma is spread. Therefore they used a volcanic mineral known as spinel like a tiny crystal clock, by using mineral, researchers able to model the composition of the mineral changed over time as magma was being stored. By knowing the magma storage, we can find out find it will happen and find out a solution. 

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/07/190718145408.htm


Insect: Chronic pain-----
 Scientists had discovered that insects experienced pain just like human beings since 2003. Not only this, but scientists also discovered that insects also experienced chronic pain that lasts long after their injury has healed. Many people thought that insects wouldn't be experienced pain like us, however, many different invertebrate animals can sense and avoid dangers. This sense is called nociception, which detects potentially harmful stimuli like heat, cold, and physical injury. Therefore when insects got damaged to the nervous system, in humans, is described as a burning feeling. As we discovered what caused neuropathic pain in insects, later we could find what caused neuropathic pain in mice and probably human.  

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/07/190712120244.htm


Healing heart disease-----
  Scientists are discovering new cells every moment, now they found a new cell that can finally heal heart diseases. This cell found in the pericardial fluid could lead to a new treatment for patients with heart diseases. For now, they found a cell in the sac of mice with heart injury and discover that it might cure heart injury since mice have very biological similar to human and many of the same disease, they found the same cell around the sac of human. Heart disease doctors were really surprised about cell around the heart can heal heart diseases because of the fact the heart has a really small capacity to be repaired. This pericardial fluid could open the door to new therapies and hope for millions of people suffered from the diseases. The further study of this new fluid will be important and typical for us to understand the heart. 

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/07/190716113027.htm


Sea level rise-----
 The ice on West Antartica has collapsed at a faster rate because of the increasing carbon emission. Scientists think that the entire collapse of West Antartica will raise the average sea level by 3 three meters and this process will take a hundred years. A possible solution to the problem is by snowing ocean water onto West Antartica, by sacrificing West Antartica we can save the coastal region of many countries. Even though, if we greatly reduce the carbon emission, the ice sheet melting in West Antartica will not stop melting. To prevent an unprecedented risk, humankind needs to take certain unprecedented efforts, too. There's always effects from one's action, but the one will always able to take some efforts to prevent the effects.

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/07/190717142709.htm


Grasshoppers top insect antioxidant-rich list-----
 As the study has measured the antioxidant levels in commercially available edible insects, we find some source of antioxidant that's equated to other food products. For example, crickets pack 75% the antioxidant power of fresh OJ, and silkworm fat twice that of olive oil, this shows that we have founded a way that benefits the planet by eating. Human beings are concerning everything that might harm their health and the people around them, meanwhile, they do not bother to find a new source of food that is benefiting out body with many nutrients our body needs. These insects including grasshoppers, silkworms, and crickets have the highest antioxidant capacity in them, which defend from the effects of aging on us and provided us with a great value of nutrient.  Besides, the insects have less carbon footprint, land, and water compared with livestock, a better source of food than what we had eaten. Improving insects' antioxidant value might be important for human consumption.

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/07/190715075432.htm


Joshua trees-----
   Global warming, the cause that led to the endanger of animals, which lived in the North and South pole and it also causes some plants facing extinction. Joshua tree, this is the type of plants that outlived the species in the ice age, including, mammoths and saber-toothed tigers. But the study has shown that this species wouldn't survive much past this century because of the heat-trapping gases that the carbon emission affects Joshua tree habitat. The fate of these trees are in the hands of ours, human beings are the only one that is capable of solving such case, although, human beings are the ones that cause such from happening. Not only facing the threat of carbon emission but another threat of the Joshua trees "wildfire," fewer than 10 percent of Joshua trees survive from wildfire. By protecting the Joshua trees from all outside factors, they can maintain the biodiversity and stabilize the environment. There's only going to be benefits and no harmful effects by protecting the Joshua trees, so it's the responsibility for human beings to protect the environment.

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/07/190716073719.htm


Brain consumes half of a child's energy-----
 Childhood is not only a time for the kid to have fun and enjoy whatever they got from their parents but also a time where the development of kids' body and brain taken place.

During this time, children's brain consumes used half of the energy been consumed in their body -- in other words, this is the time that's hard for weight gain in kids' body. It is a huge hole of energy expenditure in our understanding, by any access for us to know more about, then we can understand the brain's pattern of energy use. This means that we can control the weight gain based on the brain's pattern of energy, which means we could design a better program for early childhood development. Also, we will have a better understanding of how should uses this period for better development for children's brain. Improvement on the development fo the brain may produce a clever generation for the better future of human beings. Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/06/190617164629.htm


How plants breath-----
 Plants, animals and all the other living organisms need to perform respiration for the organisms to stay alive. Especially, plants, they have a similar respiratory system like us human, but instead of taking in oxygen, they taking in carbon dioxide to perform their respiration. Besides, leaves have pores--called stomata and it actually has a similar like the veins inside our body, veins transport and circulates the blood and oxygen around to our cells. On the other side, stomata provide a steady flow of CO2 to every plant cell and the stomata is a really important factor on how the plant shaped and mass, the fewer the pores and fewer the air channel means that the plant will have less water and CO2  been transported to some parts of the plant structure. By knowing this we can control the structure of the plants, which means we can make plants into some other structure that we desired.   

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/06/190627113953.htm


Ice Age-----
 Many people know that there is a time when the temperature had fallen to an extremely low temperature called "Ice Age." Geoscientific paradigm the cooling has brought the formation of many many ranges because of the formation, it removed the carbon dioxide from the atmosphere. Today, global warming was caused by the increasingly high amount of carbon dioxide in the air, so if the CO2 is been removed the temperature will fall into a really cold level. The study has stated that the increased reactivity of the land surface will also decrease in CO2. As a result, when the mountains range were formed in the Ice Age the reactivity of the land surface has reached an extraordinarily high level where the temperature is so cold that 5 percent of absolute zero, it can keep the snow from melting in summer in Northern area. Managing the amount of CO2 is important to the living condition of the organisms.

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/07/190703134052.htm


Wood products offset global carbon emissions-----
  When we are talking about wood, we usually think that wood always offset the carbon emissions because of how plants use carbon dioxide to perform photosynthesis.  In 2015, research shows that global wood products offset 335 millions of carbon dioxide, which will 3 times more offset than 2030. Depended on how the economic growth of the countries went, we might end up in a different effect due to the fact of wood products. Yet countries with larger timer industries have a higher offset, but if the this goes on, then there will be a bigger gap between the emission and offset. Although the wood products affect the emission and do eventually decay, still it wouldn't be an effective contribution to the general environment. The only way to get out of this way is to plant trees, this will be quicker and efficient to the offset of carbon dioxide.

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/07/190701163837.htm


Robotic ants that can work together-----
    Generally when we heard the word "robot,” we usually think its something that has powerful strength and potential like the robots in Terminal. Unlike the robot in the sci-fi movie, this is the kind of robot that functioning the same way as the animals in nature, but with stronger adaptability to the environment than normal insects and more locomotion gaits that ants are not eligible to conduct. Because of their ability to quickly detect and overcomes obstacles and moving objects much larger than them, they can perform missions easily without being stuck by outside factors. Despite this robot-ant has a simple and weightless design, it can be efficiently manufactured at a cheaper cost. Nevertheless, there are three different roles for the robotic ant: leader, worker, and explorer: with a duty assigned to different ant the structure of the robot ant population will be more stable. With all the listed particulars about what these robot-ants can deliver, they are the perfect choice for locating targets over large surfaces and gathering information.

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/07/190710131931.htm


Playing games with only your mind----
 The brain is always the most mysterious organ of our body and we use our mind to give the brain message, so it can send signals to other parts of our body to perform a task. The fact that the University of Washinton had recently designed an experiment to test how our brain works with the help of two other people while playing a Tetris-like game using a brain-to-brain interface. But the rule of this game is that the team members forbidding to make any kind of contact or communication with each other and all three are placed in a different room. Senders are allowed to decide whether to turn the block or not and after the senders have decided to rotate the block or not, the receiver's brain will receive a concentrating on the corresponding light, which means yes or no about rotating the block. Even though the answer to the rotating block wouldn't just appear on the receiver's mind, however, with the help of a cable that was attached to the receiver's head, the message will appear in front of their eyes. The purpose of conducting this experiment is to pave ways for future brain-to-brain interface to solve the problems that one brain is not able to solve alone and for people to collaborate questions on a brain level.

Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/07/190701163827.htm


COW APPRECIATION DAY-----
 Today, July 9th, 2019, is a day that we appreciate cows. This day wouldn't always be July 9th, but it will always be in the middle of July each year. On this day, people will dree like bovines for free foods, which is an experience that was designed to save the lives of cows on the world for just one day of a year, so on this day people will not eat cow instead, they will eat chicken. Basically, across the country and towns, you can find spotted cowls of the black and white hoof around in transportation and on the street, the crowds grow and grow and keep on moving before it is the time for free food in Chick-fil-A. Yes, every cow appreciation day, this fast-food restaurant will be offering a free meal to whoever visits it. This is the day that we all led to a fun and entertaining promotion for restaurants that serve chicken.  

Source: https://nationaldaycalendar.com/cow-appreciation-day-changes-annually/


Dangerous flash flooding hits Washington DC during morning commute-----
 On this day, July 8th, 2019, a dangerous flash flooding hits the United States' capital, Washington DC, which causes many traffic and delays. On this note, the heavy rain is about 3 to 4 inches in just a few hours, which is extraordinary danger weather for people to go to their working place or school. But still, some drivers are stopped on the road and waiting on top of the car for the help of others. Also, the fact that some metro station has to shut down since there is huge water streaming into the station and the schedule of other trains are delayed, not only this, the downpour appeared in the white house basement and the National Archive, which the important documents are kept safe. Luckily, firefighters are coming to rescue people that are stuck on the road and others with trouble in this dangerous weather. In such weather, like this people should just stay off the roads and low area and seeking to be on the high ground.   

Source: https://abcnews.go.com/US/severe-storms-expected-rockies-midwest/story?id=64186871


After two quakes shake Southern California, residents wonder: Are we getting close to the Big One?-----
 For the past few days, the United States has been experiencing two earthquakes that have a magnitude of 6.4 and 7.1 in Southern California, which causes massive destruction in the area. Now, people starting to wonder is there going to be a big earthquake that's going to attack Southern California. The mob doesn't look like that are prepared for this upcoming event. Even though, the possibility that there is going to be a big earthquake is 1 out of 20000, a fairly small percentage for a big one to come. But we don't know what is going to happen, so we need to prepare for this unpredictable event from happening. Since the earthquake has already happened twice in Southern California, parents asked their kids to practice, so there will be a bigger chance for them to survive under the earthquake. The more information we know about the earthquake, the bigger the chance the crowd could survive.

Source: https://www.cnn.com/2019/07/07/us/big-one-california-earthquakes/index.html


Dozens of Central Americans returned from the US are sent home by Mexico-----
 Since the presidency of Trump began in 2016, he started to enforce immigration laws on its citizens and illegal immigrants. Especially, he is targeting the immigrant from areas like Central America and now dozens of Central Americans had been returned to their nations. This program is known as "remain in Mexico" began in the border city of Juarez where military force is applied to stop the illegal immigrants from going into the United States. At least 14,000 people are now returned to Mexico by the United States and many others that are on the way returning to the country. Also, under the recent agreement between Washington DC and Mexico to head off threatened U.S. tariffs on Mexican goods, Mexico agreed with the expansion of the program, so the U.S. tariffs on the Mexican goods will not increase and affect its financial power. There would be a better way to solve illegal immigration, but now there's an only overflowing number of immigrants that are trapped the shelters and a scarcity of foods.

Source: https://www.foxnews.com/world/central-americans-returned-from-us-sent-home-mexico


UK 'modern-day slavery' ring that forced 400 victims to work for under 75 cents a day busted-----
 Our president, Abraham Lincoln, has greatly contributed to the abolition of slavery in the U.S. where people were considered equal in rights and freedoms. Even though, slavery still occurred in many other parts of the world. In this case, the UK 'modern-day slavery' ring where victims are forced to work for less than 75 cents a day and lived in harsh living condition, while the masters earned over millions of dollars off the victims. This is something we are hardly able to prevent and keep under our control because the world is not able to take care of everything happening every day. Besides, we can't rescue these victims who are beaten and threatened with violence by the gang. We should put more attention to the social groups that have less knowledge of the area and little English language skills.  

Source: https://www.foxnews.com/world/uk-modern-day-slavery-ring-that-forced-400-victims-to-work-for-under-75-cents-a-day-busted


Independent Day- July 4-----
 Independent day is a remarkable and significant day for every American citizen because it is the day when we declaring independent from the Kindom of Great Britain. On this day, adults and children celebrate this day with many parades and festivals, so we will never forget the history that for nearly 200 years we are suffering under British law, especially the taxes Great Britain enforced on the Americans because they need lots of money to help pay the French and Indian War. In term of celebrating, friends and families gathered together for delicious foods,  singing National Anthem we together, and fireworks displays re-enacted the moment of victory, the Americans had won almost 200 years ago. During this period, Independent day has been changing to be more suitable for the Americans. For examples, considering it as a celebration, changing in the day and many others to make the life of the citizens better. That's why we have the Independent Day we have today, CELEBRATE JULY 4TH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Source: https://nationaldaycalendar.com/independence-day-july-4/


National Chocolate Wafer Day-----
The history of the chocolate wafer, this delicately sweet cookie could be traced back to the mid-1800s in the United States. When the makers make their wafer and designed as a light favor and layered creamy feeling, they never know it's going to be such popular. That these sugar cookies starting to appear more often on people's table as after-dinner treat and snacks. Despite its popularity, companies in North America begin to produce these cookies as an art form, which they took pride and great care in every step of the manufacture.  Moreover, today, these sugary cookies are still American's favor due to its taste and flavor, also the fact it can be used as an ingredient of other treats. Due to its significant value and history, we now celebrate this day as a national holiday on July 3. 

Source: https://nationaldaycalendar.com/national-chocolate-wafer-day-july-3